Saturday, April 14


Saturday, April 14,

a crime scene,

the results were crude,

the dead man was found nude,

his lower half wrapped

in a sports blanket,

sanity had been cornered and trapped,

a single shot to the head,

Lets Go Jets, logo

covered in red,

no one in the building heard the scream,

cartoons on the big screen,

volume loud,

and what followed that dead man

was a dark cloud,

suicide was the cause,

no one had to think, or pause,

nothing else needed to be said,

the remains of his head,

was resting on the back of the sofa,

reality reeling,

his left eye stared at the ceiling,

gravity had pulled the other deep

into its socket,

a note on the chair

which fell out of his pocket,

an eviction notice on the door,

tax papers all over the floor,

the thermostat was on high,

and the heat was rising,

the dead man must have gotten tired

of itemizing.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Senoritaa 4 years ago

There you go again, detective Frank. But maybe it wasn't suicide?


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Very vivid poem. Taxes can be a b _ tch.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Senoritaa..LOL yeah you like the mystery here huh? and Just ask Susan Taxes can be a b...h LOL thanks for reading :)


V Qisya 4 years ago

I believe you, detective! But let's hear what others got to say.LOL!

Nicely written,Frank! I liked it. Voted up :D


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much V..


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Sky your memory served you correctly.. maybe this guy should have been born an armadillo... right? LOL


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Our Ms Brooks you always say the right thing bless you :)


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WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

At first I thought this must be in Orlando. Many Jets fans loose heart when they realize that Florida is not what they thought it would be like. They don't realize that they are better off with the 1040EZ. Yankees have to squeeze every nickle and scratch every dime.

But then I realized . . . who would have the heat on in April? It must be up North and he was weary of saving on heat as well.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

WD Curry.. LOL thanks for the laugh :) Frank


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Enlydia Listener 4 years ago from trailer in the country

That was very visual. rated up.


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Cara.R 4 years ago from New York

This is my first time reading one of your hubs. I loved it. I have more reading to do.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much enlydia for stopping by and thank you Cara for reading my Saturday, April 14


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Awesome poem, Mr. Detective. Voted up and awesome of course.


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

The visuals suggest a painful living. I can't say I enjoyed your work, actually I don't enjoy dark images. But I'm under the sell of the poet, who evoked empathy inside me.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks writer20 for having my back..:) and VG good to see you again my friend cheers ...Frank


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank

I call this one a comedy of horrors. Gross but the itemizing line made me laugh.

Voted up and awesome.

Enjoy your evening.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

yeah Sueswan.. how many times did I really want to end up like this chap after doing my taxes LOL thanks for realizing that light line :) Frank


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poetvix 4 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

Wow! Talk about intense. Sadly, while I think this is fiction, it could be the current headline in any city across our nation.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Poetvix... thank you for your comments.. bless you :)


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

A description creates a picture so that the reader can visualize the details. I even saw the cartoons on the big screen. Good work!


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

Good to see you again Marlene hope all is well :)


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tillsontitan 21 months ago from New York

This has just as much sting and mystery as when you first wrote it. We are certainly left with our own interpretations here though everything points to this poor guy just being overwhelmed by his bad luck or.....

Voted up, awesome, and interesting. Blessings to you.


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

LOL you're correct til.. :) thanks for checking this out


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lisavanvorst 21 months ago from New Jersey

Wow, powerful and sad. Another great hub Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Lisa


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Patsybell 21 months ago from zone 6a, SEMO

Can writers and poets be considered minimalist? ^+


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

probably... lol thanks for stopping by :)


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bizarrett81 16 months ago from Maine

Your simplicity and unabashed gruesomeness makes for some awesome, one minute reads that tell a whole story in just a few lines. That went great with my morning coffee :-) Thank you!


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

sorry biz for ruining your coffee :(


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bizarrett81 16 months ago from Maine

On the contrary. I've been reading Stephen King since I was nine years old. I like a bit of gruesome with my breakfast ;-)


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

LOL.. thanks :)

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