Snow White's Darkness

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An eternity seemed to pass as she stared,

the witch standing above her glared,

she took a bite of the apple,

and the witch doubled and tripled

in her blurred vision,

biting the apple was an odd decision,

the shadows around her would drape,

but she made no attempt to escape,

then she collapsed into one trembling shape,

she heard laughter, then cries,

her hand moved to her mouth,

but she couldn’t move her eyes,

then she rose and her shadow drifted,

not by her own power,

she was being lifted,

the witch made no sound,

staring as she turned round and round,

little men would call,

she opened her fingers

and she let the apple fall,

it was a late night,

but it was the moon that gave a fragile light,

it came in through the windows on the door,

when she was carried away,

only the apple was left,

spinning on the wooden floor.

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chrisam01 5 years ago from Los Angeles, California, USA

Haunting and beautiful last lines: "only the apple was left, spinning on the wooden floor." Beautiful work.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Chrisam01 actually i did enjoy writing this :) Frank


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chrisam01 5 years ago from Los Angeles, California, USA

This reminds me of a historical fiction novel I read about Alice in Wonderland. It's a kind of behind the scenes look.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks C.. Yeah I know there is a great deal of dark in our little tales.. I enjoy bringing them out.. Alice ..I love the movie with Depp..:)


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Deborah Brooks 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Frank you out did you self... wow.. so beautiful and scary in a way.. loved it...I VOTED UP AND BEAUTIFUL...I REALLY like reading your writings.. they are so good.


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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great story and I agree with Deborah above you did out do yourself with this one. Voted up and awesome.


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AshtonFirefly 5 years ago

Nice work :)


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Frannie Dee 5 years ago from Chicago Northwest Suburb

You've created great imagery here. Awesome.


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AudreyHowitt 5 years ago from California

Lovely writing! And great ending--Loved this! You could do a retelling of all the grimm's tales


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justateacher 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Great once again, Frank. I like how you wrote from the perspective of Snow White as she was falling into her deep sleep.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks again Our MS Brooks--Writer2o-- Ashton Firefly--AudreyHowitt and JustaTeacher and you FrannieDee.. welcome to my little darkness :)


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

I actually almost forgot you Franniedee.. sorry about that :) but thanks so much for coming aboard


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kittythedreamer 5 years ago from the Ether

Ohhh, Frank! How perfectly lovely and yet dark at the same time. My favorite type of poem. Great job! Voted up and beautiful.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Kitty--:) Frank


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Debby Bruck 5 years ago

Hi Frank ~ You brought me back to the Disney movie of Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs. Very very nice poetry! Blessings, Debby


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again Debby Bruck :)


Sunnie Day 3 years ago

Hi Frank good morning ! Wonderful imagery on a classic story that never gets old. Great job my friend,

Sunnie


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much and have a sunnie day :) Frank


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LaThing 3 years ago from From a World Within, USA

Wow, Frank, this is awesome! What a different view of the classic scene from snow white..... The details..... You are some poet, my friend! Voting ++


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

aaawww thank you so much Lathing


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PegCole17 3 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Hey there Frank. I liked the 'spin' on this classic tale. Oh boy, there I go again. You know, an apple a day. . .

I couldn't resist. Your poem was awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

lol thanks pegcole


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Moms-Secret 3 years ago from Central Florida

Amazing capture Frank! The thoughts swarming that one moment all collected here.


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Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Moms...:)


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The Stages Of ME 15 months ago

Awesome, life really is about choice as depicted here~Well Done


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Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you stages


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Missy Smith 15 months ago from Florida

Wow! I love, love, love, this. I mean, we all have watched Snow White, and we watched as she took that bite, but we could have never experienced how it felt to collapse with the taste of poison in our mouth like a real person would have. The way you put that scene in motion was awesome. I felt like Snow White. Voting ^^^^ So Awesome!


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Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Missy


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Jackie Lynnley 15 months ago from The Beautiful South

Hey Frank; glad to come across this little jewel from before I even knew ya! Brilliant mind, great talent. You should do more like this!

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Frank Atanacio 15 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Jackie for visiting this piece...:)

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