The Church Walls

There were so many outside sounds,

He would roam the church grounds,

As a slight mist falls,

He thought about the secrets

Behind the church walls,

A winding path led

To a small duck pond,

Where the ducks were fed,

Carpeted with water lilies,

As the drama played in his head,

It was an enchanting spot,

His face grew somber,

As the bodies in that pond would rot,

He became silent,

Staring into the darkness of the pond,

He was a disgrace,

As the mist covered his face,

He felt a presence behind him,

He was given a moment to think,

He tried closing his eyes,

But he would just blink,

And only his thoughts would holler.

As he tugged on the cross around his neck,

And then he slowly removed his collar,

Of course, there was remorse,

But it came after the fact,

And all the criminal charges

Remained intact.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Diane Woodson 4 years ago from Evansville, Indiana

I love the tone of this beautiful poem, descriptive yet holding back just a bit until the last few lines. May you continue to write this way and touch people with your writing, regards diane


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Diane


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Life Iz Beautiful 4 years ago from India

Lovely poem. You brought out the eeriness of the backdrop very well. Nice flow of the poem, I could actually taste the darkness and remorse of the soul. Great writing.


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

Wow Frank this was amazing. You make me see in my mind the story so clearly. :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much for stopping by Life Iz beautiful and Carolinemd2.. bless you both Frank


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

The picture set the stage perfectly for this chilling reflection. Crime really crosses all boundaries, Frank. Beautifully eerie.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you pegcole for reading Church Walls


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

He repents for what he has done. I loved the drama contained in this poem.


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

You really are one amazing poet Frank; I loved this one ;I am often amazed at all the talent here on HubPages and this is what I felt reading this one. Have a wonderful weekend my friend and here's to so many more for us both to share on here.

Eddy.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Vin and Eddy thank you for stopping by the church walls :) bless you both


Valleypoet 4 years ago

You have created a very eerie atmosphere in this poem Frank, and the ending, laced with regret and remorse, leaves the reader wanting to know more. A great write buddy:-))


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Coming from you Valleypoet I'll take it thank you bro :)


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wingedcentaur 4 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

Brilliant, Frank, I must say. This looks like a seamless fusion of the beautiful and the grotesque. Don't want to go to that particular priest for confession.

Well done. Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks winged for stopping by my church walls..


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up. Eerily beautiful, scary and amazing. Even church walls can't stop crime. Passing this on.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for the comment gypsy :)


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Kathleen Cochran 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Wow - talk about a surprise ending. Led me right to the brink, friend. Nicely done.


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Frank, yet another classic. This one is a new favorite of mine. I have always been a big fan of your work Frank. One day it will get you where your going I am sure of it. They are always fun to read and something I always look forward too. Voted up, awesome, interesting, and shared. Take care Frank and catch you later.

Lyrics


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Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

Ooohh, very cool! I love that you turned this suspenseful creativity of yours into a poem this time. And the ending...a shocker. Whew! what a way to end the night, haha. Now I'll be having visions of this poem dance through my head. Up/Awesome.


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Vellur 4 years ago from Dubai

Dark shades and intense emotions in your poem, brought out so well. Great write.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for visiting my Church walls Kathleen.. good to see you Lyrics and thanks for the comment.. and Denise.. crazy girl but hope you slept well :) bless you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much for coming by my church walls Vellur :)


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Very haunting Frank and I could see this becoming the beginning of a great story. You captured my attention and held it to the very end..Great job my friend,

Sunnie


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Peggy W 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

What images you conjured up in my mind in a very few sentences. This could be the start of a great murder mystery novel. What caused him to turn to the side of evil? Who were his victims and why did he choose them? You leave us with wanting more! Good work!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Sunnie Day and Peggy for visiting my Church Walls :) Frank


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epigramman 4 years ago

......one of my favorites by you Sir Frank. One of my all time favorite Hub writers you are. Always inspired by your poetic imagery and crime beat narrative - stunning and sublime as always - you paint great pictures in my mind - lake erie time 9:18am


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Epi and you also paint pictures in my mind with your fantastic work :) bless you bro...:)


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Dear dear frank.. wow.. how descriptive.. .. so many get in trouble for crimes.. against the world.. so sad and you described it so well.. Of course I love everything you write.. I hope this finds you well.. sorry i haven't been around much.. traveling.. busy busy busy..

many blessings

Debbie


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

busy is good Our Ms Brooks bless you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Vincent for those kind words bless you :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks tobusiness for stopping by and visiting my church walls bless you


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LadyFiddler 4 years ago from Somewhere in the West

WOW another lovely piece you got there Frank.

I enjoy this ;)

Keep up the good work


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks lady :)


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justateacher 3 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Chilling...And great as always!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks justateacher for visiting these church walls


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Cyndi10 3 years ago from Georgia

Dark, brilliant, and always with that signature twist.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Cyndi10


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dghbrh 2 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

As always ..its brilliantly done.

Votes up interesting and sharing.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Dghbrh


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savvydating 2 years ago

Such a gifted poet. Everything you write is pure beauty. Even with dark and horrible subject matter, you always create the most intense work of art imaginable.

Up, awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

savvy u r too kind bless you


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

Very chilling day and mood you set with the words of this poem. You are a master at setting moods. Well done, Frank.


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

Dark and twisted. I like it, especially the end.


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DealForALiving 2 years ago from Earth

Such a good ending to a very good poem!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you dear phyllis for visiting my church walls, flourish always good to see you thanks for the comments and dealforaliving.. thank you too


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poetvix 2 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

All the more chilling considering the bad guy is supposed to be a champion for good. Well done!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

hey thanks Poetvix :)


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Vellur 2 years ago from Dubai

Deep, intense and dark but he does repent all too late. The bodies will still rot. Great write.


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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks again Vellur for reading this now and two years ago bless you


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justateacher 22 months ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Revisited your church today...still as chilling as when I first read it!


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tillsontitan 22 months ago from New York

Eerie and bone chilling. The crimes he had committed though not stated and left to the imagination chill me to the bone and make me hang my head for that priest.

Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.


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Frank Atanacio 22 months ago from Shelton Author

Teacher and Til.. thank you so much for reading my church walls bless you both


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AudreyHowitt 22 months ago from California

Wow Frank--this is creepy in all the good ways!


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Frank Atanacio 9 months ago from Shelton Author

Audrey thank you so much..


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Missy Smith 9 months ago from Florida

I agree with Audrey. It had a very black feel, really creepy. The scene in my head was not color, but black and white imagery. Dark with a bit of mystery. It's your signature style, and I love that. Very nicely done.


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Frank Atanacio 9 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Missy... :)


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Mekenzie 9 months ago from Michigan

A revelation and atrocity that is best conveyed through the art of poetry. Very well done.


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Frank Atanacio 9 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by Mekenzie Ill be right over to return the favor :)

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