They Call Me Jack


I knelt down before my confession,

and it took a while,

in the shadows he saw the dim

outline of my profile,

the church was hollow, empty, black,

and what crossed my mind

was the women who feared my attack,

Father,

I would like to tell you of my sin,

I feel a loss,

and I don’t know how to begin,

lifting my hand to make the Sign of the Cross,

what I did was wrong,

I have sinned so often and for so long,

confessing felt strange,

I don’t know how to change,

nor how to confess before God,

the priest turned,

my emotions burned,

then I held my breath,

Father,

death after death,

I have walked the streets

like the Grim Reaper,

and that’s when the dead would call,

Father,

I don’t think I fear God at all,

I would decide who would die,

and who would live,

and I know God is infinite

in his capacity to forgive,

the priest slid the wooden panel back,

just a crack,

what’s your name boy,

Jack, they call me Jack

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Jack, Jack the Ripper. Awesome piece!


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Susan still the best


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Write your movie son I would most definitely attend, the screening.

Great work brethren Frank Great work.

Bless.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Movie? LOL.. Sky you are too generous with your comments..bless you for that..:) Frank


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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

wonderful written poem. voted up.


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Why not !Isn't that same character I saw so many times in the movies?

Let me know.

Bless.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks writer20 and Yeah Sky.. you are right.. everyone knows Jack LOL thanks for revisiting this again


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AudreyHowitt 5 years ago from California

An empathetic look at Jack! Wonderful piece Frank!!!


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Deborah Brooks 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow frank.. I love it it is so awesome...so glad you wrote this... this could be made into a movie.. I agree..I voted up or course...


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Audrey.. and you are tops Our Ms Brooks.. :)


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AudreyHowitt 5 years ago from California

HeHeHe! Thank you!


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ewelz51 5 years ago from Somewhere in the South...

This is a beautiful poem, so evocative and mysterious and eerie, and in so few words, you say it all. A lovely piece. I would love to hear the priest's point of view....


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks EWE for stopping by and visiting with Jack :)


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

Hi Frank,

You really are so very talented and here's to many more hubs to share on here.

Take care and enjoy the rest of your day.

Eddy.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Eiddwen


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Even the most hardened soul is still capable of desiring and feeling regret. Alas, usually the darkness wins inside these people. Jack lost himself as he brought loss to others. What a great idea for a poem. I really like this and am thrilled to read it.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

You are dead on Hyphenbird :) thanks for stopping by


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justateacher 3 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Frank...Love this confession from Jack! Brilliant as always!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you justateacher :)


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Now this is the kind of work I like to read. I've only read a few of your pieces so far, but I really like your style.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you wayne barret that means alot to me :)


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

Bless me father for I have sinned. I've done it before and I will do it again. lol. kidding. Jack is full of regret & guilt for sinning too often and for so long. At least he wants to change. It's never too late. That's a start. True Repentance and Forgiveness says that if we confess our sins, then God will forgive our sins and cleanse us from all unrighteousness. This is what I learned in Catholic school, but then again, I'm not a minister. All joke aside. Frank, this was a great confession. "Lifting my hand to make the sign of the cross," I think this was awesome how you let your readers visualize this. Voted up!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

crazy girl..but ill have it no other way..:) thanks Marlene


lovedoctor926 3 years ago

which one is it crazy or silly? can't make up your mind. Lolz.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

either way Ill have you no other way.. silly crazy girl you


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Phyllis Doyle 24 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

OMGosh! I love it, Frank. Your poem has so much depth to the inner thoughts of the confessor. The last line shocks yet clearly defines the rest of the poem, for it exposes who the confessor is. Very clever, indeed.


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FlourishAnyway 24 months ago from USA

Oh, the mind and evil heart of a predator. Great poem, Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Phyllis and Flourishanyway for reading Jack


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bethperry 24 months ago from Tennesee

Oh, this is oh so creepy good! Voted up!


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Frank Atanacio 24 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks Beth :)


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cleaner3 23 months ago from Pueblo, Colorado

nice write..


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Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you cleaner


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Just Ask Susan 13 months ago from Ontario, Canada

Stopped by for another read and to say hello. Still stuck me the same way as it did the first time I read "They Call Me Jack"


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Jodah 13 months ago from Queensland Australia

Wow! I love this Frank. Jack the Ripper confessing his sins...great concept and well written poem.


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Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton Author

Just ask susan..wow how the heck are you!!! @ Jodah,thank you for checking out Jack :)


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pstraubie48 13 months ago from sunny Florida

And would he have ever done this??? Does make me wonder...who can ever really get in the mind of such a killer.

Well done...kudos

Shared

Angels are on the way this morning ps


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Missy Smith 13 months ago from Florida

Jack the Ripper of course! You have a great imagination Frank, to come up with a confessional from Jack the Ripper... Awesome!


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Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you pstraubie48 and Missy Smith for visiting Jack :)

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