This Moment (poem)

When

And then

It will start

A beating heart

As moods awaken

Feelings unmistaken

Anticipation growing

Amid the wild dreams now flowing

Passion promises something that’s new

But for this moment all cares come from you

But for this moment what is really true

Here in this moment timeless rendezvous

And for this moment flowers dawn their dew

Passion’s promise dreams already knew

Where our memories are growing

That’s were we now are going

And heaven was shaken

By chances taken

Playing our part

With our heart

Open

Then

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PHILLYDREAMER 4 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

This one had really nice rhythm. I liked how you built up and then went back down.


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aviannovice 4 years ago from Stillwater, OK

Beautifully done in the shape of an arrow. It takes talent to do what you did. Keep it up.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Very nice! I'm impressed!


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anglnwu 4 years ago

Love it. You cleverly built up the anticipation and bring it down--the beauty of love when hearts are open.


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Gottabegod 4 years ago from Southern USA

I enjoyed this poem, mainly because of the rhythm and rhyme. The flow was nice with a very interesting build up, then decrease. Impressive work. Voted up, awesome & beautiful! God bless!


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Michele Travis 4 years ago from U.S.A. Ohio

Wonderful poetry, you have a talent and that is a very good thing. Voted up!


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blondey 4 years ago

Nice work here

thanks :)


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and beautiful. Love the rhythm and flow of this poem. Love these lines

Where our memories are growing

That’s were we now are going

Speaks of love and promise. Just great.


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christin53 4 years ago from UK

A really nice poem:)


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shiningirisheyes 4 years ago from Upstate, New York

You are quite creative in more ways that one. Beautiful poem and creative shape of the arrow (perhaps Cupids arrow) while telling a touching love story.

Voting it up


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G-Ma Johnson 4 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

The slow build up then the fast beating and the slow down, relaxed and enjoyed...:O) Hugs G-Ma


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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Beautiful poem, cleverly done.

Impressive!!


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

Well done, your creativity and imagery was beautiful. Love stories are fun to scribe, your performance was marvelous. Voted UP and awesome.


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Well at this moment this is a great poem...voted up....debbie


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sharonchristy 4 years ago from India

Awesome poem! I loved the shape, it must have required effort to do that, you are such a talented writer! Glad to be following you!


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Peggy W 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

Enjoyed your poetry and the video at the top perfectly set the mood. Voted up and beautiful.


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picklesandrufus 4 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

A lovely poem indeed! I liked everything about it.

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