Time of Death


He had followed the instructions,

it was a prolonged abduction,

he was finally there,

riddled with fear,

he kicked in the front door,

not waiting for back-up,

and the body was on the floor,

it was difficult for him

to catch his breath,

and without a time of death,

he wouldn’t know when she died,

her mouth was gagged,

and hands tied,

the Medical Examiner would have to

estimate based on body temperature,

and that was difficult to translate,

but he knew he was way too late,

sadly, her soul was set free,

only way to figure out the time of death,

would be through the degree

of rigor mortis and lividity,

although rigor mortis sets in,

and then disappears,

as the detective cupped his face

to wipe away the tears,

it was a mess,

and the coroner could only provide

a rough guess,

but the instrument that took her life,

was a serrated table knife,

and the saddest case a detective could be on,

was the one which involved his wife.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Whoa! I'm reading and feeling really sorry for the police officer walking in on this crime....then I get to the last line and I'm totally blown away and ready to cry!!! I obviously don't want to give it away in my comment so I'll just leave it at that. You really should be writing a mystery novel!

Voted up and way awesome.


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justateacher 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Another great one, Frank! Once again you paint a picture with your words...I can see the scene in my head....


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WD Curry 111 4 years ago from Space Coast

You never disappoint my dark side, Frank. This is easy to solve. The detective's boyfriend did it!


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Frank, this sounds like the beginning of a novel. It is a killer, padeon the expression poem. You must have been involved in some of these cases you write about so realistically.


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

Frank,

I don't know how you do it Frank! But you do it every time; and that is you never disappoint with these crime poems. I am loving them to death, and I hope you never stop writing them!


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

This is another poem fantastic poem for your next book.

Voted up and truly awesome my friend, Joyce.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL thank you so much tillson...:) and thank you justateacher always good to see you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL @ WD Curry.. crazy but thanks anyways for reading..again LOL.. and thank you X- for your comment.. Josh you're being too kind and Joyce its never a good hub until you grace the scene thank you soo much


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Loved the twist in the tale at the end.


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b. Malin 4 years ago

Wow, another Wonderful Piece Frank, written as only you can...A few words tell a Long, Sad, Tale on such a loss. Voted up!


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

double wow, Frank.

It sure is a sad story and you say it with so much depth!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

WOW This one packs a real wallop. Must be really tough on detectives when a case involves a family member.


Valleypoet 4 years ago

I'm trying to imagine the emotion the detective must feel. Coming across so many dead bodies must cause you to detach emotionally from the scene. Each body is just another job...until this one...suddenly it is a person, a loved one, lying there..very sad, and shocking. Good job Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Blossom for the visit and thank you too Malin for stopping by the time of death bless you both :) Frank


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much for reading my time of death Ruch, Valleypoet and Gypsy I really apprecaite the support bless you guys :)


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Talking about butterflies in the stomach! Frank, an awesome job my friend! I would be an emotional wreck personally.


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Each of these becomes more clever than the previous.


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Patty Kenyon 4 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

Wow, Awesome Job!!! The ending was a twist that I wasn't expecting!! I still say you should write a crime novel!!!


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Awesome job. loved the twist at the end. Each case must be so hard to deal with and to keep emotions locked away, but it is impossible to do when you know the victim or he/she is a loved one.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much thelyricwriter for stopping by and thank you too mckbirdboks for revisiting my pages bless you... Patty thank you too for coming by my page and Rosemay what can I say? good to see you and the gang too bless you all..:) Frank


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

This one took me by surprise Frank! Sad, but so effective write!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Audrey :)


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

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