Unspoken Grief


It was a hot August night,

nothing seemed right,

his face was tight,

and his eyes,

hard with restrained emotion,

in that instant of dark silence

he felt an odd motion,

then the fears,

as the smell of death

lingered on the stairs,

the chill would start at the bone,

as he willed his face

to turn to salt or stone,

paramedics were carrying

a stretcher up to his floor,

he just watched,

as he stood by the door,

in wrenching disbelief,

unspoken grief,

the frustration,

turned into devastation,

his wife clutching at the door,

to keep from falling to the floor,

white knuckles, her knees buckles,

he spoke, but nothing was heard,

they ignored him as if he had not

said a word,

then his wife would scream and shout,

and that’s when he realized,

that it was his body,

that they were carrying out.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Patty Kenyon 4 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

Voted Up, AWESOME and shared!!!! Wow, the ending definitely caught me off guard!!! Another, wonderfully Awesome Job!!!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Always a fascinating write Frank! Chillingly effective!


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

WOW Frank! WOW! I was definitely not expecting the ending! I am definitely sharing! I love your poetry! :)


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mismazda 4 years ago from a southern georgia peach

oh wow....great work again Frank..thumbs up..:)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Patty, thank you for sharing my State and state of mind LOL Audrey always good to see you on mypage.. and josh you're just being kind but thank you :) bless you guys


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Mismazda :)


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Wow! Frank this really is an amazing poem . Great work.

Vote up and AWESOME, Joyce.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Joyce.. you're amazing and thank you :) Frank


Valleypoet 4 years ago

Didn't see this one coming despite the 'odd motion' clue earlier in the poem. Another great read..thanks Frank


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Frank, I do believe this is your best one yet. I really liked the twist at the end! Fantastic job. :)


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Karen Hellier 4 years ago from Georgia

Wow, gut wrenching and I really liked the surprise ending. Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much ValleyPoet for your valuable comment and as always good to see the greatest entertainer here Ttombs LOL and welcome Karen glad you stopped by :) Frank


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josh3418 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

Frank,

No I am being completely honest, no need to be modest here bud!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Josh you're too cool...:) bless you bro


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fpherj48 4 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Frank....WOW.....This is stunning. What an image and scenario you create. Awesome! UP++


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much fpher :)


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

gosh...you sure must be a detective working on or around crimes. You describe the scene so vividly that it sends shivers down my spine.

many votes and sharing it across!


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duffsmom 4 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

Another winner Frank. Where do you get the energy to write such a jarring account? Well done my friend.


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Oh, this is outstanding! You hit the mark every time you write a poem.


leann2800 4 years ago

The ending was unexpected. I thought it would be a wife or parent at first and then a child maybe. Awesome


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much for reading Ruch and Duffsmom Cyndi thank you for stopping by and good to see you Leann2800 bless you all for reading :)


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I think I'll start calling you Detective Frank :) Another awesome one!


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Frank, such an awesome poem. You really write so well.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks JustaskSusan and Blossom for sharing my Grief bless you both..:) Frank


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Good one Frank. You know actually they do say that at times you have no idea that you died.


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Frank, this was genius! Love the perspective, makes you wonder for sure. Always a joy Frank, take care.


Ritambhara Om 4 years ago

sad but impressive...n heart touching


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you soo much the lyricwriter for your comment and thanks for stopping by Rita bless you guys :)


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

Oh wow this is really good, I have wanted to write one on this subject but it would take a lot I think, setting the mood and all that, lol. Well you did a great job! Rewards for Frank! And sharing.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for the rewards Jackie LOL and Im sure you'll put out one gang buster of a topic.. try it!!!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you for the visit Our Ms Brooks


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

byline Frank Atanacio 'Crime is My Rhyme' (feel free to use that)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you MCK :)


IntegrityYes 4 years ago

I voted up for sure.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Integrity!


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rajan jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

What a build up to a great climax, Frank. Voted up, awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for stopping by Raj thank you


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Intense and wonderful write! Very clever ending. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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Cathleena Beams 4 years ago from Lascassas, Tennessee

This was very captivating and I had no clue of the end. Great poem!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks for visiting Faith and Cathleena good to see you again bless ya both :)


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Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton Author

well Gypsy I hope that's the way I go LOL thanks :) Frank

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