Love Poem - Feeling Unbearable Pain when Someone Leaves

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Rivers Fiery and Cold
Rivers Fiery and Cold
a Monster Mind
a Monster Mind | Source
Echoing Wells of Self-Inflicted Despair
Echoing Wells of Self-Inflicted Despair | Source


Screaming hurt












Forging rivers fiery and cold

Through a long deserted soul.







A monster mind

Gleefully smashes aside

An eternity of mist-encased love








Craving the ecstasy found only

In echoing wells of self inflicted despair.



Downward
Downward | Source
Ego Rides High
Ego Rides High | Source
the Corroded Shoulders of a Neon God
the Corroded Shoulders of a Neon God | Source


Downward

In a flurry of gleaming perverted pride



















Ego rides high on the corroded shoulders of a neon god.



Pain and Passion Dancing Endlessly
Pain and Passion Dancing Endlessly | Source
Promise of Love until Death
Promise of Love until Death | Source


Pain and passion entwined in agony

Dance endlessly to the tune of a counterfeit promise









Mocking the faithful pledge of fidelity unto demise.


Truth and Trust
Truth and Trust
Clouds of Poison
Clouds of Poison | Source
Choking the Light
Choking the Light | Source


The colourful, carefree ribbons of truth and trust








Disintegrate in billowing clouds of fragrant poison








Choking the light and denying a homeward glance.

Pungent Tears
Pungent Tears | Source
Shattered Dreams Cluttering the Soil
Shattered Dreams Cluttering the Soil | Source
Abandoned United Identity
Abandoned United Identity | Source


Pungent tears honey-sweetened by all-consuming grief













Stream through the shattered dreams cluttering the soil






From which a united identity once sprang


Feigning Lofty Demands
Feigning Lofty Demands | Source
Embezzling Enchanting Delights
Embezzling Enchanting Delights | Source


Ah, but you, you unmindful one

You understand but feign weighty demands









And instead embezzle enchanting delights

From a sorceress of Delphi magnitude.




Tainted Allegiance
Tainted Allegiance | Source
Left Waiting with other Gigolos
Left Waiting with other Gigolos | Source


She is charmed to win your tainted allegiance





Before dispatching you to a teeming foyer

Of similarly encouraged gigolos.

a Woman Scorned
a Woman Scorned | Source
the Clarion Call for Vengeance
the Clarion Call for Vengeance | Source
Bonding with Triumph
Bonding with Triumph | Source
the Glories of Prior Place
the Glories of Prior Place | Source
Taking the Victor's Spoils
Taking the Victor's Spoils | Source


Misery puffed with the power of offended purity














Awakens to the clarion call of vengeance’s appeal












It bonds with disenchanted triumph











And the glories of prior place.










Finding solace in the plunder of the victor’s spoils
















2011; Maralexa, Marilyn Alexander, MBA. All rights reserved.

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Sueswan 5 years ago

Beautiful, powerful and heartwrenching.

Voted up and awesome.


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Thank you very much. I really appreciate your comments. You are such a great writer! Thanks. This is my first effort at 'poetry' -- I don't know what kind of audience it will ever have. But there it is.


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

First effort at poetry?!!! WOW. Strong! You wield language like a mighty sword! I'll have to ponder it long and hard for fuller comprehension. But these words grab me immediately:

"Ah, but you, you unmindful one

You understand but feign weighty demands

And instead embezzle enchanting delights

From a sorceress of Delphi magnitude."

Delicious! Rating it up and several other accolades!


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

I am so glad we have met! Thank you for taking the time to both read and comment. I do appreciate it! Obviously we have a mutual admiration society going here!


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

It's certainly a pleasure to have met you too! I hope you continue writing poetry. It's very unique! I'll look forward to reading more of it and your prose hubs, too.


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baharlaghari 5 years ago from Jamshoro Sindh

Nice Hub...


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Dexter Yarbrough 5 years ago from United States

Maralexa, for your first effort at poetry, you certainly made a great impression! I found it poignant and memorable. Voted up, up and away!


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Thank you Dexter. It was good of you to read and comment on my recent efforts. I appreciate your comments because I respect your writing. Have a great day!


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

I appreciate your comment, baharlaghari. thanks for taking the time to read my hub and to comment.


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland

Marlexa, I am blown away. This poem just grabs you from the beginning and doesn't let go. I echo all that Nellieanna (the Great Mother of all poetry) says - and similarly find that verse equally poignant. Your command of language is impressive. I love words and how they just string together and sound when they fall together in a perfect slice...

This especially caught me for your word choice and rhythm:

Misery puffed with the power of offended purity

Awakens to the clarion call of vengeance’s appeal

Finding solace in the plunder of the victor’s spoils

This was a beautiful and delightful read. Keep up your poetry, you have a natural talent.


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MickeySr 5 years ago from Hershey, Pa.

Maralexa,

I've not thought of Hubbing (?) some of my poems. I, actually, count myself more of a word-smith than a poet. Circumstances, ideas, people, etc, cause simple rhymes to come to me . . . like for instance, when we lived in a house that only had one phone jack and it was in an upstairs bedroom, I jotted down ~

When we're all downstairs,

Just in case we get a call;

I really stretch that cord,

And put the phone out in the hall.

. . . I don't write deeply insightful thoughts about big issues - I put things to rhythm and rhyme as it strikes me. Thanks for the idea of perhaps posting them publicly, we'll see what happens.


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Cathleena Beams 5 years ago from Lascassas, Tennessee

Inspiring, thought provoking and intriguing - You definitely have a way with words. I voted this one up, chose Awesome, and am now following your hubs. Love your poem! :o)


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Thanks Cathleena, it was my first attempt at poetry. I don't even really know how to write an appropriate summary. I appreciate your dropping by to read one of my hubs.


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

My new follower and new friend, hark the words and wisdom of two very fine poets in Nellieanna and Erin LeFey and others soon to find you. Your first poem? My lady, you have a poets heart and gift. Your magical twist with words here harken your talent and bring out your brilliant love for words.

I look forward to reading more Poetry from you, let other Poet's in here inspire you, there are many fine creative writers at the Hubs, let your eyes lighten on their page and let their beauty inspire and guide your Quill to hand . Peace and blessings from a new follower and Poet.


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

My dear new friend! Thank you for your very kind and inspiring words. Nellieanna has been very kind with her comments and I look forward to reading more of Erin LeFey. I found you from comments you have made on other hubs. I was impressed with what you said and how you said it. Thanks for taking the time to read my hub. I believe there will be more back-and-forth between us in future. Peace and blessings right back at you!


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ahorseback 5 years ago

Maralexa ,

What more can be said

telegraphed in emotion

Or thrown from cars of trains

still in motion

But you ...you have done it

again and first

Without even a hint of

undecided thirst

I wonder now of your

first intentions

And thirst for more

your worded inventions.......:-}

Of course voted up!


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

My gosh, ahorseback! What an awesome comment. I will with pleasure take a look at your hubs. Thank You very much.


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Cloverleaf 5 years ago from Calgary, AB, Canada

Wow, such powerful words! I could feel the emotion running strongly through your poem. I cannot believe that this is your first go at poetry? You're a natural, Maralexa.

Voting up and awesome

Cloverleaf.


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Thanks so much again, for reading some of my hubs. I appreciate your comments. I think, though I should move away from such heavy feelings and write about something really interesting to others. Your hubs, for instance, are so interesting and relevant that I send them to friends! :)

Thanks again.


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RNMSN 5 years ago from Tucson, Az

this was simmering inside you all this time!! first attempt? Shut the door! as my daughter used to say :) 'fantastic' just doesn't say enough!


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Maralexa 5 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Thanks so much for your very kind comments. When a good writer, such as yourself, gives me such positive feedback, it inspires me tremendously. My experience on HubPages has really brought out some interesting aspects of myself (not all positive). I truly appreciate being able to freely write in such a 'safe' environment.

Thank you very much, RNMSN.


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brakel2 3 years ago from Oklahoma City, Oklahoma

I love this poem and all the vivid photos. I can't believe it is a first attempt. The emotion is spellbinding, and the poem is bittersweet I am happy to visit a hub of yours once again. Hugs. Audrey. Sharing


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Maralexa 3 years ago from Vancouver, Canada and San Jose del Cabo, Mexico Author

Your comments are deeply appreciated, brakel2. I wrote this remembering a boyfriend from 30 years ago. It was amazing to me how vivid the hurt was. It was a good experience.

Good to see you Audrey! Thanks for sharing.

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