What Shall We Name Him?


This life doesn’t end

just cause we end it,

nor does the sun rise

during a sunset



~~~~~~~



I breathe fire upon them,

but only ice leaves my mouth

We’re encased in cold time,

only wishing we’d melt



~~~~~~~



Your power is empty,

for you remain powerless

to prolong your short life,

or avoid your earned death



~~~~~~~




I thought that I loved her,

when

I thought I was loveless,

but

she proved undeserving,

when

she proved herself heartless



~~~~~~~



I fly,

in my dreams,

such a casual thing,

as if I have done it,

so casually


I don’t stop to think,

how am I doing this?

I just run,

and I leap,

and I lift from the surface


of every curse,

of this Earth,

rise above,

every care,

then I wake,

just to wonder,

why can’t I remain there?



© copyright Ben D.A 2011


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BenWritings 4 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

max all your comments are greatly appreciated. You're literally the last and only one who does.


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BeyondMax 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

What a beautiful poetry, Ben. It's truly moving and touching. I always find myself lost in thoughts after I read one of your creations. They carry the same philosophical Ben-stamp, yet they are all so different in depth, spreading all over the universe. They always make me loose the traditional ways of perception. Very creative, I am absolutely amazed.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you Nikki, you always make me smile with your comments


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

i love the word play used here.

My fave part: "I thought that I loved her,

when

I thought I was loveless,

but

she proved undeserving,

when

she proved herself heartless"

Amazing words. Really good poem.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Oh, Ian that was one the greatest comments :]

Thank you soooo much, made my night. And tonight was a rough one.


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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Oh Ben. You did it man. I always try to listen to the music that accompanies your poems, and thank God that they are not interdependent, but this time the music was great, and your poetry?

As beautiful as ever.

I think I am going to be heartily sick of poetry by the end of this month's contest, but yours???

No. I always like yours... er... Love yours.


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

A great poem and thnak you for sharing.


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prairieprincess 5 years ago from Canada

Beautiful ... I fly in my dreams, too. It's a sign of creativity. I love how you fly without a thought, naturally. Different people fly differently. I have a friend who always uses wings to fly, like a bird. For me, I always have some apparatus to help me: like a parachute that keeps me up.

Such lovely poems! Thank you for sharing.


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

Well it's about the writing hey, not a personality contest (I hope).


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

Hey Ben I have another poem called "I am Phoenix - Immortal", can you give it a read and tell me what you think?


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

snakeslane - there is much not to like about me haha...thank you very much

cardisa - I don't ever feel on this earth..


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snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

Like the visuals, like the music, like the short direct lines of poetry, like that you fly in dreams, hey Ben Writings, what's not to like? This is great, partly bleak, partly hopeful, a nice blend. Regards, snakeslane


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

Maybe both...lol

Definitely the poem and how I felt when reading.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

are you referring to me, or how this made you feel? lol


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

It's like being on another spiritual plain. You are not quite on earth...yet you are.

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