What Things We Love and Lose

There is no substitute

For lost perfection

There is no warmth left

No hope

No direction


Fleeing from my thoughts

Branded to my heart

Moments sealed in time

In blood, I create art


Emptiness whispers in my ear

Death’s grinning teeth

My skin has become cold

Yet, a fire still burns beneath


There is no other love

That could ever replace her

From within my dreams

I could never erase her


May the truth be told.

So let it be known…

She left me behind

Heartbroken

Alone



© copyright Ben D.A 2011

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AUPADHYAY 5 years ago from INDIA, UTTAR PRADESH STATE, KANPUR CITY

Great job. Touched the heart. No word to express as you have already told a lot. Thanks for poem.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks barbergirl, this is one of my older ones


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barbergirl28 5 years ago from Hemet, Ca

Those are some very strong words. Great writing. You definately have a way with poetry!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Haha, thanks man. This one was very close to the heart.


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h.a.chauhdary 5 years ago from Australia

this is uber cool. i can so relate to this!!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks a lot docmo.

I definitely write with passion. I cherish every bit of it


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

Lost love and pain perhaps inspire as much poetry as all other things put together. Your words speak of the pain and loss yet there is the fire that burns beneath, the fire that can heal as much as burn, create as much as destroy. I am glad it is firing your creativity, and what a wonderful product we have here.

Beautiful and evocative, voted up!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Wow, thanks a lot acaetnna :]

This was one of my most simple poems haha


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

You are a pure genius - your words are amazing. You will definitely be loved by many - I am sure of that.


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

I like this one a lot, especially, "from with in my dreams, I could never erase her." Up and beautiful! :)


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Exquisite pain proves we are capable of exquisite joy. Keep seeking the joy and you will find it. Thank you for your honest words and pain.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

AHHHH *blushing*

lol thank you for ALL your comments ;]


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

I think you are fast becoming one of my favorite poetry hubbers :) Breathless again


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nighthag - this one was written somewhat recently, actually

It refers to the one girl I ever loved, and I am still haunted whenever I remember how things started and ended.

I have written a number of things regarding girls in my life, but this is the only one regarding her.

Thanks so much for your flattery. I have been overloaded with it the past week.

I fully intend to go back and look through more of your work


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia

every time I read your work I am both amazed and inspired, you are a truly gifted artist and I am so glad to be a fan of yours...

This poem was beautiful and heartbreaking, I could feel the emotions behind every word,


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Oh I have already learned much, just in a week :]


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epigramman 5 years ago

...well you are certainly doing that my friend - and always remember - it goes both ways!!!!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

I still find it hard to believe that finely tuned writers such as yourself, Nellie, Saddle, and Wayne speak such flattery in my direction

If I can teach, inspire, or impress fantastic people your age, then my goal has been met.

A huge thank you , epigramman


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epigramman 5 years ago

...well I may be 4 times as old as you - I'm 94 - and helped through life on earth by my Martian upbringing BUT

I am constantly learning from you my friend as I look up to you and say - EARTH MAN CAN WRITE!!!!! My alien sensibilities are being finely honed by the caress of your poetic magnificence!!!!! And I wish I had come up with 'that title' .......


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winepress 5 years ago

Uh! That's a sad one beautiful written and illustrated. Keep it up.


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Poohgranma 5 years ago from On the edge

YES - raw emotion, no holds barred pain. Not to be soothed, no comfort found.

Wonderful. All of these comforting words are meant well but detract from what you are saying. I say bleed and feel it. It is righteous and pure.

You can be comforted later but not in this context. It minimizes what you trying to convey NOW, this is too important to be watered down.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

I too felt this way once. Like I would never love again, but truth is you do. and the sooner you let go of the past and whats gone the sooner and easier is is to move on. WE go through heartaches in life to make us strong, we go through all the wrong people, so that when we find the right one we will appreciate and love them that much more. no one said life was easy, oh and to let you in on a little secret...No one is perfect. yu did not lose perfection, or a perfect girl, cuz if she was perfect for you, you would still be together. just remember shit happens, and you could always have it worse.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks Zulma :D

chills are good!


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ZulmaDear 5 years ago from TheCrosses, LasCruces

IMAGERY: A+

PERSONIFICATION: A+

my favorite part: "Emptiness whispers in my ear

Death’s grinning teeth

My skin has become cold

Yet, a fire still burns beneath"

gave me chills.

ZulmaDear :)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thats ok haha


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

Saddle you are my Shakespear hugs..... sorry Ben had to announce it!! lol


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

There are very fine lines between Loss, Love, Hate and death. I have loved till it hurt the pain so severe it left me a changed man, yet wanting it again and again. What draws us to keep searching for The One, our kindred spirit, our soul-mate?

I believe that lust is a driving force towards LOVE, sad but we have to hurt deeply before we find DEEP FOREVER LOVE and it will always be elusive and fleeting yet loyal like a worker bee is to his Queen.

You will get over each lover lost and move to another as your chapters in life unfold before your very eyes. LOVE is a masquerade, hiding behind so many masks.

Which mask will be yours. This was a sad piece, yet relevant to your heart screaming out. I want more.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

:] Thanks bella

i hate n love LOVE, too


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

this is very sad I know the feeling o so well. I hate and love LOVE!!! Either you hit or miss no in betweeners.... I feel ya on this one Ben

smiles :)

bella

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