Worse Than Maddening


It was a very dark place,

I could feel the haunt,

there was just no light,

he was gaunt,

and enormous in height,

he even intimidated my shadow,

a desolate sight,

my teeth chattered,

my courage rumbled and clattered,

my emotions splintered and shattered,

as I stared at the image,

listening, waiting,

life and death, debating,

all hope fell to the ground,

and fear was all around,

the words in my throat would choke,

he barely moved his lips,

but he spoke,

the terror blinded me like smoke,

my heart was beating

at such a rapid pace,

as I felt the horror coming from his face,

it was worse than maddening,

and much more,

defying the sweat

which came out of every pore,

the fears, the tears,

my heart deafening in my ears,

suddenly silence,

and he realized,

that life would be compromised.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Angelme566 4 years ago

My heart beats fast too as i read this poem , something to chose as to which is which ? something scary in here ?

Well delivered lines , it moved a reader !

Voted up . interesting and beautiful.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Angelme566 for stopping by


Lakepoet 4 years ago

Very tense and scary atmosphere created by your poem. Enjoyed very much. Voted up


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Jlava73 4 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

Haunting piece Frank!


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

This is another one of your best poems.

I had a dream like this a while back. I was in some foreign land and going up the staircase. Now, I am really freaking out!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Lake Poet :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Jlava.. and Marlene no matter I got your back! LOL :)


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow a Great poem but scary my friend...shaking in my boots.. You are a master at this

voted up

Debbie


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Angela Brummer 4 years ago from Lincoln, Nebraska

This was well written giving me chills!


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, Wow! this one of your best my friend.

Voted up an awesome, Joyce.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Awesome, had me holding my breath and and waiting. very scary indeed.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Our Dear Ms Brooks for stopping by my maddening.. and Angela Brummer thanks for the chills..LOL Writer20 always good to see you and Rosemay and gang bless you.. bless you all :)


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brewskitimeguy 4 years ago from Maine

love the mytery, the intrigue...keep writing


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and awesome. Kept looking back at that creepy picture. Boy I'm glad I read this during the day. Just great you really spooked me. Passing this on.


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank,

"the terror blinded me like smoke,

my heart was beating

at such a rapid pace,

as I felt the horror coming from his face"

This was horribly incredible.

Voted up and away.


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

Chilling piece... brilliantly crafted

You give such an excellent cinematic feel to it and love getting lost in it

Shivers here

Brilliant


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Rahul that was kind :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanksbrewskitime guy for visiting my maddening.. and thank you Gypsy good to see you on my page and Sue..How do you do? LOL thanks again for your loyalty :) Bless you all


leann2800 4 years ago

Reminds me of the Tell-Tale Heart. Slow, maddening details but in a sing songy way. Awesome!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks lean for visiting my madness


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

This was creepy Frank. I will be lucky to sleep tonight! Another great poem to many my friend.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much the lyricwriter :)


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

"Are you still having those nightmares Sammy?" Lol.

Frank, I absolutely loved Demon's Nature. I read the book in one day. It's amazing how much you can learn about a writer through his characters and work. Keep up the good work.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much sweetie I remember writing that story in grammer school and it stuck with me for a long time.. you are so sweet bless you love doctor :)


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

i remember the song Killing Me Softly with his Song, yet this is chilling...


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Raci :)


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duffsmom 3 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

Wonderfully eerie and so creepy. So well done Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

nice to see you duffsmom


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Cyndi10 3 years ago from Georgia

Just too good! Loved it!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Cyndi10

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