Writer's Challenge from Billybuc: Woman on the Mountaintop

I told a little white lie to my friend, Bill Holland (Billybuc) who published a photo of his wonderful wife, Bev, standing on a mountaintop in the Cascades and issued a challenge. The challenge was, by using the photo as our inspiration, to write some inspirational thoughts. I told Bill that we were entering our busy season at work and that I would not be able to accept his challenge. However, sometimes one’s soul clears the calendar and gives the needed kick in the fanny. I have said many times on HubPages that I am not a poet. I don’t even read a lot of poetry, so I don’t have the slightest idea why my muse decided organize my thoughts in this manner. Call it free verse if you wish because it is definitely void of poetic pentameter, just loving thoughts.

The Fulfillment


A woman stands on a mountaintop

overlooking the peaceful sea

surveying the sights around her:

The clouds, the azure sky,

and mountain birds that fly by

She marvels at how she arrived

at the pinnacle so high.

Such climb to discourage

ones of the faint hearted,

some to become soon departed

In Happier Days

Gripping despair
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The career she loved so much,

gone to a country far away

where she could not go.

It was hard to lift her head,

facing the life she now led.

Her family so dear now gone to her,

betrayed by husband she loved,

children removed from her life.

Oceans of love gone

in a mere heartbeat.

Each day held less to greet.

In a churning sea of total despair,

she wondered how she arrived

at that point in her life.

By grief so consumed,

no love in her bosom bloomed

Spiritual healing music - Ceremony to Mother Earth

Then one day the spirit spoke to her.

“You are my child,” Spirit said.

"Lift your head and do miracles,

know that I love you.

Yourself, you must love, too."

Love myself, how can I

do this, she questioned?

Is not that serving myself

would be a sin so tall?

Serving others is the noble call.

But the woman heeded her soul

as it explained her path.

To give of yourself to others,

first take care of yourself

then you will have strength left.

To walk the mighty path

that is narrow and steep.

Where reward springs forth

from the mighty fountain,

strong at the top of the mountain.


The woman took ownership

of building her new life.

On top of the mountain,

she surveys the calm sea

of life she never dreamed to be.

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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

I keep telling people I can't write poetry, and they keep telling me I have a poet's heart and I'm full of it. LOL I'll say the same to you. Beautiful, and I don't care if it has the right meter or whatever the heck that thing is that poets do...I love this, and I thank you sincerely for sharing it with us. Well done my friend.

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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Oh, how beautiful is your free verse poetry here! This has such a wonderful message. Excellent write.

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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

I am glad your muse gave you a kick MizB. good on you to for extending your wings and actually writing this "poem". There is even some nice rhyme in ther so well done, but the whole story/message was wonderful.

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annart 2 years ago from SW England

This is definitely poetry. Beautiful poetry. You've taken us through a roller-coaster ride and come out with hope. Lovely. Great response to this challenge!

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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

This is beautiful. She finally found her strength and reached out to her inner self. Wonderful message, MizB!

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Well, I’m full of it, too, but I’m sure it’s not poetry. Seriously, I don’t know what got into me. It’s like the words just flowed, and after about 10 rewrites, it was ready. Thank you so much for your kind words, my friend, Bill.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Faith, sometimes I have to share my faith, too. This challenge gave me the right opportunity. Thank you for the compliment.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

John, as I told Billybuc, I don't know what got into me. It must have been "channeled" because I avoided poetry like the plague in English class. Thank you, dear friend.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Ann, coming from you, that is the greatest compliment I could receive on this. You are a real poet, and I defer to your expertise. It encourages me to study what I left behind untouched in school. Thank you very much.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

BW, I just hope other women will do the same. Our strength comes from within, nobody else gives it to us. Thank you for the read and comment.

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lrc7815 2 years ago from Central Virginia

Miz B, my lovely friend, what have you touched in your own soul and mine with this piece? I have chill bumps from head to toe and tears rolling down my face. You may not call yourself a poet but this was poetry. It was also spiritual and introspective and soulful and loving. I am so glad you listened and took time away from your busy life to write. Don't you feel better now? I could babble on and on about how I love this and about how a part of you touched a part of me in between the lines of raw emotion. I also felt the spirit of Mother Earth and felt your video was the perfect compliment. I am so glad you took time to write. Like Bill said, I don't know what you call that meter thing that poets use but I found a rhythm in your words that was celestial. Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and linking to my own response to Bill's challenge. Love and peace to you my special friend. And Mr. B too.

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travmaj 2 years ago from australia

Your poetry flows beautifully and makes a mark, your words take us through many emotions and bring us to a denouement of hope and future fulfillment. Through the rough times, the self doubt, to the path of finding and loving our own spirit, Thank you

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Linda, what a lovely response. I consider you a good friend and soul mate. I have a metaphysical side that I show here only occasionally because most people don't believe in metaphysics. I literally got the call to write this, and it was like the waters parted for me to write it. In some ways it was my own experience talking. I think we have all experienced low points, but some of us actually listen when our soul speaks to us. And yes, I do feel better after writing it. After I wrote it, I sat and listened to the voice of Mother Earth in the music. The response to this has made it all worthwhile, and I treasure yours, my wonderful friend. Love and peace to you, too.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Travmaj, your description is so beautiful. I have always felt so clumsy when I tried to write verse. When I hit the publish button I was scared to death. Thank you, it means so much to me.

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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas

I hardly ever really worry about specific rhythms and beats when I write a poem. Free style is just as valid, especially from the heart. This is good work!

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

That's good to know, Shanmarie. Thank you for the compliment.

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manatita44 2 years ago from london

A noble effort even though you say that you're not a poet. Got better towards the end as it picked up momentum. Healing video, as implied. Much peace,Miz.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thanks, Manatita. BTW, Mr. B plays and teaches the healing Native American flute. I'll have to feature some of his work sometime.

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annart 2 years ago from SW England

You're very kind, but we all have our approach to poetry and each one is unique, refreshing. Poetry is subjective therefore I would argue that, given a good writer, the poetry will appeal to some more than others depending on the subject; however, the words and rhythm sway us more.


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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thanks, Ann. I think I get your point. I've read some poetry that appeared to have perfect rhyme and rhythm, and it was so abstract that it didn't make sense to me. On the other hand, I see poetry that probably wouldn't rate higher than a C from my English teacher, but it touched me.

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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Absolutely! I like what I like and that's what it comes down to but it has to be well-written. You write well every time.


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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thank you, I really appreciate that.

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manatita44 2 years ago from london

Well Miz,

Perhaps you can get together with Phyllis. Are you familiar with each other? Sometimes I think she has a native American Spirit, or perhaps she grew up in the village where I was born. Hermitage, it's called. A most appropriate name. More Peace to you.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Are you speaking of Phyllis Doyle? If so, we are familiar with each other. She's a great writer.

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manatita44 2 years ago from london

Yes. Read her recent piece on Ancestral Lands of Woven tapestry. I believe that every American should read this piece. The Spirit of America flows through it.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

I delayed my reply to you because I wanted to read Phyllis' piece first. However, as soon as I started reading, duty called, and I had to put it aside to get work done. I will pick it up later, but I will say that it looks very interesting. Thanks, I think she wrote it before I became familiar with her work.

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Jay C OBrien 2 years ago from Houston, TX USA

We are neither men nor women. We are the spirit and the material a shell. Once we realize we are spirit energy we look at life differantly. Know that Karma will take hold of the ones who do wrong and know we should forgive them or face our own Karma. Be patient and think long-term. We are a spirit and not merely attend to be.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Jay, thank you. I believe that very strongly.

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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

I never take notice of the rules of poetry, just go with the flow! lol! this was wonderful!

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thank you so much, Nell. I'm getting that advice so much that I believe I will. I just wish that English teacher hadn't been so hard on me during poetry class. lol

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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Loved this! Beautifully done!!

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Coming from you that is a real compliment. Thank you, Audrey.

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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

Thank you for this poem. Beautiful! Jamie

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Glad you liked it, Jamie, thanks.

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Nadine May 2 years ago from Cape Town, Western Cape, South Africa

Wow well done. Very emotional, somewhat sad but with a good ending. the last photo reminded me of our beautiful Hout Bay in the Western Cape.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thank you, Nadine. I just now noticed that you list Cape Town as your home, and I would love to visit there. I don't know where this photo was taken since it is a commercial photo, but the setting is lovely.

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B. Leekley 2 years ago from Kalamazoo, Michigan, USA

Beautiful truths beautifully expressed.

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MizBejabbers 2 years ago Author

Thanks, I enjoyed writing it.

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MsDora 23 months ago from The Caribbean

So glad you took the challenge, even though I am late in finding it. However, your message is powerful and timeless. Thanks for the inspiration.

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MizBejabbers 23 months ago Author

And I'm late in seeing your wonderful comment. I don't know how I missed it. Thank you, your comment is inspiring.

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