Make Me Cry

 

No sheep’s clothing on the wolf I met

Just a hint of sly, you give what you get

The face of an angel that could never lie

This one, if I let him, will make me cry

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Just look at him there next to the ‘vette

Packs heat in his smile, no sign of threat

Stone carved body that make clothes shy

This one, if I let him, will make me cry

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Smart and clever, he owns a chess set

Substance is there not a game of roulette

Feel kinda funny and a little bit high

This one, if I let him, will make me cry

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Adventurous one I want to abet

I can walk away, but will I regret

Will it be heaven or hell that I buy

This one, if I let him, will make me cry

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Chances are taken debts to offset

Image of you in my brain can’t forget

Pushing me forward so not to deny

This one, if I let him, will make me cry

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56 comments

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Bel Marshall 5 years ago from Michigan

Amy,

Never trust a man that drives a "Vette! LOL! Why am I getting images of Burt Reynolds here?

This is actually very lovely but seriously, I can't shake Burt out of my head now!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I know. The 'vette thing should be a sign, but of course there's that body!!! It was fun to write, that's all. I'm not going to jump in that 'vette and ride off into the sunset. If I decide to do that, I'll let you know and we can talk about the logic behind such a crazy idea! Thanks for reading. I always enjoy your comments, Bel!


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Bel Marshall 5 years ago from Michigan

That body will get you every time! ;)


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

You got that right, woman!


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TheManWithNoPants 5 years ago from Tucson, Az.

Uhhhhh .. Well, your people told my people, that I have to watch my comments on this one. But needless to say this one rocketed to number one with me. hmmm hmmm (to the tune of singing in the rain) .. laughing

jim


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you very much, Jim. Your comments always inspire me. And I would imagine you have inspired many a poem! I appreciate your support in my efforts to grow better in writing and to become a better person.


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vietnamvet68 5 years ago from New York State

I think the guy with the Vett is trying to compensate for something he is lacking I bet. :) last thing you need is a guy in crises. God Bless Amy


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I'm so happy to hear from you vietnamvet68! Yes, it is a fantasy poem, the perfect man and he'd have to be to make me cry at this point. No 'vettes in my future! It's a sad thing and a bad omen when the car is more impressive than the man. But, in a fantasy, anything and everything is possible. A girl has got to dream. Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm gonna miss your beautiful wife, man.


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tonymac04 5 years ago from South Africa

Love the way you played with words in this one, Amy. "Stone carved body that make clothes shy" - that does explain a lot. Agree with Vietnamvet that the 'vette is a compensation, though! Don't let him make you cry, but enjoy the fantasy anyway. No harm in that!

Love and peace

Tony


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epigramman 5 years ago

....I can truthfully say that my feet never really touch the ground as your profound poetic prowess always make me feel lighter than air - and it's in your craftsmanship (craftswomanship) of this written art form which allows me to fly ......above all that other commuter traffic - so damn who needs a 'vette' anyway - unless of course the new prototype is a 'Becherervette'


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Tony, It is hilarious that every commenter here mentions the 'vette. It does seem to be a red flag for "look out, run". Everyone is accustomed to my "open book" style, but I thought I'd branch out and create some fantasy and it's fun! Thank you for your time and comments, Tony. I'm always glad to see you here.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Mr friend, epigramman, could there be a better mentor for a flight into fantasy, I think not! Yes, of course, who needs the earthbound 'vette, when there are wings. Inspiration is boundless in your comments alone! Thank you, dear Colin, for opening my eyes to endless possibilities.


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Are you vulnerable? If so, put a set of reins on your emotions.

Now if you find yourself going too fast, just pull back and say 'whoa'!

Love always dons rose-colored glasses.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

As you can see, Will, I am a cowgirl at heart, hence the hat. I appreciate your western spin on reining in and "whoa" as it's excellent advice. But, I'm discovering the safest way to fly is fantasy. That way, I don't have to rely on rose-colored glasses, as in fantasy, everything is already rosy and just the way you paint it! So, I got my brushes out and concocted a babe with a brain who wants me, too. Voila! Thanks for reading, Will, and your sage advice.


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Just keep an open mind. The real Mr. Right might be balding and driving a Honda. :-)


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erthfrend 5 years ago from Florida

Hi there Amy! Our friend "possum lover" told me about you and I read the really nice comment you made on his possum hub. I always appreciate when people are kind to animals! I love your poem here, you are so talented and I look forward to reading more of your work!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Will, oh, so true...vanity can be a real and total turnoff. Narcissism is when the dude takes longer to get ready than me or has a closet full of beauty products! Good advice said with humor. I love it!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Erthfrend, thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your beautiful comments and yes, I love all animals. I would love to visit "Best Friends" in Utah someday! I share my digs with my adorable Scottish Terrier, MacGregor. Before my divorce, I took care of a rescue pup I named Gilly, MacGregor, Leo, the Golden, an aquatic rescue turtle, a Sun Conyer, a rescue rabbit, a chinchilla, and 4 stray cats. I fed the wildlife such as the birds, raccoons, and opossums that visited every night. Now, I live in an apt. in the city of St. Louis and I miss my friends! I had to find good homes for each and every one and I did, except the stray cats. I still worry about them. I hope God found them a new home, because I could not find anyone to take them, but my hope is they wandered to a home in the neighborhood where someone fell in love with them and they are doing just fine. I'm going to check out your pages where I'm sure I'll find many interesting "critter" stories!


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drbj 5 years ago from south Florida

Amy - based on your beautiful poetry, here is my thought for the day:

Fantasy is good, fantasy is fine.

But be aware when he feeds you a line.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear drbj, I am touched by the amount of sincere, caring comments I have gotten to be wary. I can truthfully say, "I am feeling the love" from all of my friends here and I am in love with that! Thank you, sincerely, from the bottom of my heart.


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MartieCoetser 5 years ago from South Africa

Oh my dearest friend, you are like an underground fountain accidentally ripped open - you are spouting the most amazing poems. I wish I can sit right here on the bench watching you all the time. Amy, you are indeed a beautiful bubbling woman. I love WillStarr’s humor. And listen to him – my cousin proved this to be true – Mr. Right may not at all look like your idea of him. Take care, my friend. You always delight me.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Martie, Your first comment line is poetry in motion. Now, that is an amazing line!! And yes, WillStarr is so right and yes, his humor is always such a welcome gift. I discovered his writing recently and his trips into the wild, wild, west are an amazing new world of storytelling at it's best. Thank you for your amazing commentary, Martie. I'm so glad you are my friend.


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Neil Sperling 5 years ago from Port Dover Ontario Canada

While you may have a fantasy of a muscle man in a vette - I have one of a cowgirl in tight jeans.

Save a horse ride a cowgirl. LOL

Good poem Amy

Hugs


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Lucky Cats 5 years ago from The beautiful Napa Valley, California

Oh...ladies! We've known one like him, haven't we? Undeniably delicious; relentlessly attractive, addictivley alluring...and oh, so very hard to resist. Yep..jump right in and take a long, cool drink...taste the sweet surprise...that rush unlike most...knowing, full well, that danger lies ahead! I wrote a poem once;

"Dreamers, Drifters and MadMen..." This poem recalls one of the personalities included in that 'looking back.' Very very good...great! Amy...thank you!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Neil, aren't fantasies great! Always the winner, you write your own story. However, real life is so much more exciting. One never knows whats around the corner and the real love of your life may be diametrically opposite from every fantasy ever conjured. Even fantasies have a lesson to teach. You can learn what you really want in a harmless, safe way. The lesson is to keep and open mind and a positive attitude. Closed minds miss many opportunities for fun, passion and fulfillment. Thanks for your comments, which always make me think...and laugh! Hugs to you, my friend.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Kathy, why is the danger and knowing, full well, the predictable hurt to follow, not enough to just STOP the madness? I believe the compulsion to keep trying is a way of staying "stuck" and uncommitted. Every repeat performance and the "knowing" this will not end well, must have a "pay off". Part of it must be the fairytale ideology that little girls grow up hearing in Cinderella, Snow White and the wonderful prince that just hasn't met "me". Whoever said males have the market cornered on ego? I still feel like "more" on the arm of a hunk. That is my own issue that someday I hope to get beyond because I don't want to be a cliche' included in the adadge "There's no fool like an old fool". I want to know "real".

Thank you for your thought provoking comments.


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Momma Mia 5 years ago from North Carolina

VERY Nice ............. vettes are best if driven by a chic ...lol I had one at 20.......traded it in to go to college lol..... smart I would say....now i drive a miata........great things to come in little packages .... You are a great writer....with lots of personality and ofcourse......attitude !

Keep up the great work...your canvas can be any color...and in style!

wishinguwell

Mia


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Mia, how uncanny! I also drove a vette at one time (pre-daughter) and now drive a Mazda Miata. You are so right on target in that great things come in small packages! Thank you for your kind encouragement, Mia. I feel a kinship with you!


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

After these comments, I'll keep my eyes peeled for Miatas.

You gals have a better handle on fantasy than we guys, I think. You play the reel right through to the end and find yourselves in tears. We dive in headlong without a thought for the consequences or endgame. This is a great write, Amy.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Gerry, my Irish friend, thank you for not only reading and commenting, but in giving me the concrete help I needed when I first started writing poetry here at the hub. You gave me advice regarding rhyming sequences and it made all the difference for me. Yes, Miata's are the bomb! Fun, fun and fun...except in the snow or ice!


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

This packs the rhythm and sizzle of a Shirley Bassey song like 'Goldfinger' or 'Diamonds are Forever'. Absolutely Ace. Love it!

'No sheep’s clothing on the wolf I met

Just a hint of sly, you give what you get

The face of an angel that could never lie

This one, if I let him, will make me cry'

What an opening!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Mohan, it's so uncanny that you bring up the musical idea. Just last night I sent this one and two others to a "lyricist" site to see what the writers think and, if positive, to submit for putting to music. I am so glad you arrived here to affirm my decision! I think the stars may be in alignment!!! The only problem is my feet would never again touch the ground. Thank you for arriving here at the perfect time, Mohan.


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

If you get a chance send me a link to the lyricist site too. I've had a lot of interest in 'when I touch you' and 'Give me a clue'...Thank you! The stars are, I agree, truly in alignment. What your star sign, btw?


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Mohan, yes, you have many great poems. I can understand where you would have much interest in your writing. Can I get your email to send you the link or do you prefer another avenue? I am, despite the discrepancies among astronomers recently, always and forever, an Aquarius. What about you, Mohan?


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

You can email me at becherer.amy@gmail.com and I'll be glad to send you the link, Mohan!


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Docmo 5 years ago from UK

A sensitive Virgo, no less. I will drop you a mail. Will be grateful for links.


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Granny's House 5 years ago from Older and Hopefully Wiser Time

Very clever. Well done


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Granny's House. I appreciate your visit and comments.


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Micky Dee 5 years ago

I'd say let that one go. Vettes aren't worth the money. There's a lot better bang for the buck. Great poem as always Amy. Don't listen to advice from a Vietnam Vet. I dismiss most women because if they had any sense- what would they want with me? Go figure eh? Great write Amy!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Hilarious irony, huh, Mickey Dee? As always, thanks for your clever spin on things!


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saddlerider1 5 years ago

I can't say much about the man behind the vet, however I sure enjoyed the ladies who were stoked over me and my Harley back many moons ago, it must have been the sound of my engine that attracted them to me:0) Surely it couldn't have been the man.....loved this piece...well done Amy


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Never underestimate yourself, saddlerider. The machine might look and sound powerful, but it's the driver that chooses the machine, operates the machine and turns off and walks away from the machine. You are the lifeforce and that machine will sit and rot without you, the man. Thanks for your thought provoking commentary, saddlerider.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Hi Amy- just back for a reread and spied your wonderful comment crediting me with helping you find your poetry muse. I am grateful if I played a role in advancing your love of poetry. Keep writing.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

My comment was the honest truth. You saw one of my first attempts in poetry and you intuitively and graciously handed me the information I needed on rhyming sequences. It is I who is grateful, Gerry! Thank you.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Make me laugh, Amy. I read all of your poems but I'm a bum about commenting. I would rather digest more and express less. This title inviting someone to make you cry may have induced some of that nonsense that we discussed privately. There is a vulnerability in tears which we share. Cheers.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear sligogbay, more than an invitation this was written after having met someone that I knew had the power to make me cry, because I felt he could be important to me. From inside me, I was stating that the choice was mine to either move forward, knowing I was vulnerable to his charms or chose to move on down the road and avoid pain.

It is interesting that, from your vantage point, it was my open invitation to "go ahead and make me cry". And, maybe it is that, too, ultimately. I haven't had my first cup of joe yet, Gerry, so I'm going to come back in a little bit with a focused brain and sort this out. Thanks for the challenge, my brilliant friend. I think you are more correct than I want to digest right now, as I don't want to lose my "Lancelot" status.


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Little Kim 5 years ago from Any town U.S.A.

My problem is I figure all this out after I let him make me cry. I am such a fool sometime.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

You are less a fool that I, Kim. I have no excuse and still proceed, with reticence, but nonetheless. Thank you for your sweet, endearing comment.


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Freya Cesare 5 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

So, take it or leave it? Following your heart (if it is heart which saying ^_*) or following your fear? I wonder on your decision. LOL

Interesting poem, Amy. It should be sexy poem but somehow, you make a voice of fear way louder.Awesome! I don't know why but I am picturing gallant cowboy from cigarrete ads right now. LOL


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Freya, you continue to amaze me with the power of your inner voice. I think I am just an angst filled person. It's odd though, because these kind of issues, which used to be my primary concern, don't really factor any part in what feels important to me now. In a relatively short span of time, I've changed alot. I don't know whether it's for the better or just different. I am, for the first time, independent of needing a man's validation of my worth. I think it is from so many disappointing men. I really don't have the desire to acquiese to any man ever again. Most of those I placed so much time and worry over weren't as smart as me. Why would I need a millstone anchoring me down to the superficial, boredom, pretending, and disappointment. Since my divorce I've managed to meet quite a few married men all too eager to fill my time with useless nonsense other than idle ego agendas. I have had the courage to take a stand, do what I needed to in order to respect my exes meaning I went through the time, trouble and expense of divorce rather than "playing around". Yet, I've met many men with no qualms about doing what they want without being honest to their partner or me. I have no respect for men that want their cake, so to speak. Playing both sides and respecting no one. I have come to the conclusion that I have more balls than them. That kind of man, I do not want or need. Sorry, Freya. I'm fired up now, but thank you for your profound commentary. I respect your thinking prowess.


Johnny 4 years ago

Hello Amy, Colin sent me to you knowing I would love your words and he is right. Touching words painting images in the tears you portray. I am not on Hubs but I write at Facebook daily. I will link this piece of beauty to my wall. Please let epi know that I was here and very touched by you. In light and love always, Johnny


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Johnny, Did my comment show up on your latest (the one with the brilliant "vampire" video)? I left a comment, but I don't think it posted when I tried to sign in. Thank you for your most welcome visit. Your work is magnificent...so open, so vulnerable, so beautiful. You are an artist. And, yes, I will let Colin know you were here.


Johnny 4 years ago

Thank you. No I didn't get a comment as of yet, but it may show. If you have Facebook I would be honored if you would be on my short but important list.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Fantastic, Johnny. I'd be honored.


ralwus 4 years ago

You probably have forgotten me by now. Anyway, so who ever said tears will melt you and what kind of cry? pain, joy, or sheer crystal extasee? you rock. live well now. Just tho't I'd visit a spell.


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Oh, Ralwus, I could never forget you. I think of you often and hope you are doing well. Your visit made me cry...tears of joy. Love you, man

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