I need your help for my hub! (improvement and feedback)

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   Trihorusposted 8 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I am about to publish my hub, but I would like you to go through it and point out any mistakes you find. Also, I am not sure if I have put it into the right topic. You can be brutally honest about my hub, and if you have any suggestions to improve it further please do let me know. Thanks a lot!
   
   http://hubpages.com/education/Traveling … his-is-How

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      lobobrandonposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      The article you are looking for is not published right now. Please try again later.
      
      If you are the author of this page, sign in and you can edit or republish your Hub.

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         Trihorusposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Oh, sorry. Fixed it!

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      greenmindposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hi -- it's interesting and thoughtful, but the title is confusing. I suspect it's meant as a paradox, but to me it looked like a mistake. Otherwise nice work!

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         Trihorusposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks a lot for your feedback! and can you suggest me an appropriate title? I'm even confused whether it belongs in the right topic.

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            lobobrandonposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            The category is ok. But your URL says isn't and your title says is. Make up your mind

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               Trihorusposted 8 years agoin reply to this

               Earlier my title had an  'isn't possible' but I thought, maybe 'Is Impossible' would be more accurate. So after posting the URL, I changed the title. Why didn't the URL update?

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                  lobobrandonposted 8 years agoin reply to this

                  Once you create the hub, the URL does not update. You need to make sure that the URL is what you want it to be at the very first step.

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   lobobrandonposted 8 years ago

   It should be just etc. and not followed by multiple dots.
   
   Visiting ancient Egypt, you don't need 'the' in between.
   
   The amazon capsules of the movies are not directly related to the hub in my opinion. No one would come to the hub with an intention to watch a movie and the capsules may be snipped.
   
   Disappeared into thin air. Not into the thin air
   
   
   "its past would be you doing whatever you were before". Must be whatever you were doing before ...
   
   There's inconsistency in the article, in two successive bullet points you refer to your writing as a hub twice and once as an article. I'd pick article everywhere.
   
   Interesting article, though, I left a comment

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      Trihorusposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks a lot for your help, I will edit the article and make sure that these little details are all corrected!

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      Trihorusposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Oh yes, and about the amazon products, even I think the first one isn't needed. But the second movie brilliantly gives an idea of the paradox. So I will maybe remove the first one, and keep the second.

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