I'd like feedback on my Hub: Old Is the New Fashion: Adorn Yourself With Mehandi

  1. Viz-eta profile image75
    Viz-etaposted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Old Is the New Fashion: Adorn Yourself With Mehandi and Alta (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. pen promulgates profile image80
    pen promulgatesposted 2 months ago

    Hi. Welcome to Hubpages.
    Your topic is a very interesting one, however, very less is covered. It's too short.
    The first paragraph sounds  a little funny, particularly 'hey! Guys,' read it aloud, it will help. Also, increase the length of the first paragraph.
    The paragraph how it stains is too difficult to understand. Simplify it.
    Statements like 'Dried henna leaves stain the skin if they are mashed into a paste.' don't make sense.
    Remove the Wikipedia link for 'lac'
    You haven't explained much about 'alta'
    What does the image 'the boiled tea' signify?
    And are your images legal to use?
    Images with creative common domain 'CCO' is permissible.
    Hope these help. Good luck!

    1. Viz-eta profile image75
      Viz-etaposted 2 months ago in reply to this

      Thanks a lot.
      I would make the changes asap.

 
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