I'd like feedback on my article: Calculation of Power and Work Done b

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   hubber8893posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with improving the hub score of my recently published hub. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Calculation of Power and Work Done by a Lift With Example
   Calculation of Power and Work Done by a Lift With Example

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      You need to cite the source of your quotations.  The original authors need to be credited.

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         eugbugposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         They're probably long dead, maybe hundreds or thousands of years

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            OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            It makes no difference whether the authors are alive or dead.  Without proper citation, it appears that he is attributing the quotes to himself.  That is plagarism.

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               eugbugposted 5 years agoin reply to this

               Do you mean the definitions? Maybe he could cite some textbooks, there aren't any specific authors. I notice Encyclopedia Britannica don't cite any sources on the subject (power and work).
               
               From Wikipedia on the etymology of the definition of work:
               
               "According to Jammer,[1] the term work was introduced in 1826 by the French mathematician Gaspard-Gustave Coriolis[2] as "weight lifted through a height", which is based on the use of early steam engines to lift buckets of water out of flooded ore mines. According to Rene Dugas, French engineer and historian, it is to Solomon of Caux "that we owe the term work in the sense that it is used in mechanics now"
               
               It would be nice if we had a way of adding numbered hyperlinks in the main body text to references at the foot of articles. If text modules had their HTML div tag listed in edit mode (in addition to the title at the top of the module ), it would be easy to hyperlink to them (without having to look for the tag in the HTML source code). Creating tables of contents would also be easier.

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                  OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

                  Yes, textbooks etc need to be cited.  He got the quotes from somewhere and he needs to say where.

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   eugbugposted 5 years ago

   Some observations about grammar in the article (I didn't read it all):
   You don't need the definite article "the" before physics, so it's "physics", not "the physics".
   Later you mention "the power", and "the work", it's "power" and "work".
   
   Later you say "the unit of measurement of power is Watt".
   It should read "the unit of measurement of power is the watt", so you need "the" in this case and even though the man was "Watt", the unit is lower case.
   
   Change "Let us consider the working of a lift which is lifting the mass m by the height h in the vertically upward direction. "
   to "Let us consider the working of a lift which is lifting a mass m by a height h vertically upwards"
   you use "a" because it's a general scenario. 
   In physics, the pull in the rope is called tension, it's also a force, but maybe you should add that info in the text and diagrams.

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   eugbugposted 5 years ago

   Using "÷" for division isn't really standard (or is it region specific?) and it's hard to make out the dots. Use "/" or images for your equations and a horizontal line for division.
   
   Edit: I never knew until today that this symbol is called an "obelus".
   
   From Wikipedia: "The ISO 80000-2 standard for mathematical notation recommends only the solidus or fraction bar for division, or the colon for ratios; it says that the obelus "should not be used" for division"

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      hubber8893posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Dear eugbug thanks for your kind response. Your points are worth noticing. ÷ symbol is being used to represent mathematical division in my country.

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         wildernessposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Mine too - I grew up with it.  But when writing on the 'net, a whole different set of customs can be in effect.  Probably best to take Eugbug's suggestion.

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            hubber8893posted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Yes Sir

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