My first hub. Does it work?

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   LuxChromaposted 13 years ago

   Hello everybody,
   
   I just posted my first hub and I want to make sure I am on the right track and also within the spirit of hubpages. So, if anyone would take the time and point out any shortcomings that I can fix I would appreciative.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Sleek-Illuminated-Wall-Art

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   Shadesbreathposted 13 years ago

   I think overall the hub is fine. The objects are actually pretty cool, wouldn't mind having one of those Celtic Crosses myself.
   
   Couple of things that will probably hurt you. First, I assume all those links below each piece and description etc. all go to the same website the links at top and bottom do (I only followed one and it does). So, that's going to ding you hard. You might even get this hub pulled down by moderators. Anything over 2 links to one place is considered "overly promotional" and you are sitting on 14 links to the same place right now.
   
   Here's the thing, that hub is actually a decent read. The images are good, you've constructed it well, and the product is actually cool. So, take off all those extra links and trust the reader to be smart enough to go to the site from one at the top or bottom if your article has earned a click.
   
   Second, and this is just a style thing, but HubPages purports to being an information site. Everyone knows that 86.8888% of the people writing here are just trying to make money, but it's important to at the very least keep up the illusion of writing for the purpose of informing rather than selling. So, at the start of your article, where you say, "We at LuxChroma..." the article begins sounding like a sales pitch right out of the gate. The company voice. Yawn. 
   
   Which is not to say, and I repeat, that the article isn't good. It is. So let your nice descriptions and cool pictures do the work. Trust that your product is neat, which it is, and let people come to their own conclusions. I bet they will.
   
   I'm going to go look at the rest of your stuff now, so, it's working.
   
   You can do lots of hubs out of your company and products if you are creative and strategically minded in the approach.
   
   Good luck and welcome to HP.
   
   [edit] DUDE, that blue dragon is seriously awesome. Your stuff is very cool.

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      LuxChromaposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks to you greatly. Your honest comments are going to help out.
      
      I will remove the excessive linkage. Also I am going to wear my word smithing hat and clean up the phrasing. I too really dislike cheesy sales pitches, I would rather be kicked in the shines by a kid with muddy shoes than listen to a sales pitch.
      
      Oh, thanks for the feedback on the designs too, your compliment helps me to keep on banging away at the keyboard with greater motivation.
      
      Ty, -Reuben

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