I think I have found my style

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   TFScientistposted 12 years ago

   Hi All,
   
   This is the second time I have visited this forum after some fantastic advice in my first week. I have read, listened, edited and experimented and I think I have found a style that suites me (2 in fact). Would you take a look at these two posts and give me some actionalble critical feedback of how I can improve either the style or content.
   
   The first is: http://tfscientist.hubpages.com/hub/Wha … on-Storage which I am most happy with
   
   The second is http://tfscientist.hubpages.com/hub/Wha … art-3-of-3 which is slightly different in style.
   
   I look forward to your thoughtful remarks. What I am looking for is basically a checklist for me to use for future hubs
   
   Thanks

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      lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      They look great but your in tough competition for traffic

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      Kris Heeterposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      I personally like the style of the 2nd one (protein structure).

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   TFScientistposted 12 years ago

   I know. Some of these I have made as resources for my A level pupils, so with this one I am not hugely concerned about outside traffic coming in from google. Any I can get would be a bonus, however. Any ideas/suggestions?

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      lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      Oh you do teach. That's nice I left you a comment

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   Kris Heeterposted 12 years ago

   As far as content goes, I think it depends upon your audience.  If it's someone that has a bit of a science background then they might be able to follow it.  But if your wanting to reach a wider non-science audience, then these might need to be watered down and explained in even more. 
   
   I think a non-scientist or young person would struggle with all the terminology and conceptually putting all together  - it's almost like an entire text book chapter condensed.
   
   It's been awhile since I've taught at the college level but I know explaining DNA was a challenge to non-majors.   It had to really be simplified a lot for them to even remotely understand the concept.
   
   Best wishes!

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      lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      I understood it. But as he said its for students. Other traffic will be a bonus he/she says
      
      BTW are you a he or she?

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      TFScientistposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      A He.
      
      thanks for that advice Kris - it was because of this that I published "explaining DNA to a six year old" instead of just answering the question. It is a difficult balance to strike with scientific accuracy and general literacy. I will take a look and see about tinkering one or two phrases to improve the readability of the whole thing.
      
      Thanks for the follow lobo! And the fan mail

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         lobobrandonposted 12 years agoin reply to this

         TFScientist you're a great writer and deserved it ;D

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   JustMikeposted 12 years ago

   As you post these hubs for your students in the teacher role I think you have a whole marketplace out there with your other hub of how to explain DNA to a Six year old. Because so many of these scientific subjects are hard for parents to understand they need a way to help them explain it and sometimes online it doesn't give the easy version. That could be a niche you could fill. You could actually do a whole group of how to explain to a six year old hubs on different subjects. We need kids to be interested in science and I think they are when they are little and they have that interest but a lot of times parents can't answer their questions and by the time they have gotten to the point where there are real science classes they have lost that awe of how the world works and maybe with some of this knowledge they can hold onto it.

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