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A Different Type of Torture

Updated on November 18, 2015
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An arson murder was considered a different type of torture because the police department was stuck with whatever the fire department’s investigator says is arson. Detective Laura Kimber and Nathan Chambers took an unmarked car and drove to the crime scene with fear and disgust in their hearts. The crime scene was a six family run-down on the corners of North and Colorado Avenue over on the west end of Bridgeport. Once there they walked toward the crime scene, which was almost directly under a massive pine tree that didn’t know whether it was alive or dead. Half of the tree was brown and the other half green. There were no witnesses, just a bunch of burned furniture and one charcoal human form wrapped in a plastic tarp. That completely melted on him when the blaze turned his way. The human form was a young guy, maybe early twenties. The poor bastard was lying there like a piece of meatloaf someone left in the oven too long.

The fire marshal was showing Kimber a dark splotch on the living room floor in apartment 1636 B calling it a textbook example of a pour pattern. Sure enough, when they cleared all the soot away, the splotch really did look darker than the surrounding area. Kimber and Chambers had to deal with a dead guy and a pour pattern and a Puerto Rican crack head that jumped out the third floor rear window with nothing to break her fall but asphalt.

“What do you think?” Chambers asked.

“Looks like someone forgot to take their to-go order,” she sighed.

“They wrapped this sucker and he watched himself burn,” Chambers added.

She nodded when she noticed breathing holes in the tarp.

Having satisfied themselves that this was indeed a homicide made their worst nightmares come true; an investigation without witnesses or motive.

“O’Brien, any other casualties?” Kimber asked Detective Peter O’Brien.

“Nope, just the jumper,” he answered. “Seems to me that everyone had something to do at the same time with the exception of these two.”

Kimber nodded.

So much for the door-to-door canvass, if the murderer took great pains to make the victim suffer, the detectives couldn’t blame the neighborhood for its reluctance to volunteer information.

“I’m sorry, that’s all I got,” said the fire marshal as he closed his note book. The phony, apologetic act seemed to work okay for Chambers, but Kimber saw right through him. He had better things to do, and he didn’t want to waste his time hanging out in this part of town. His actions just gave the people in the community the lack of faith in the public servants. Kimber also realized that the dead man will probably get two shakes from the homicide unit, one or two go rounds then the system would set the file aside. However, she decided she wasn’t going to allow this case to evaporate into the ether. Sadistic murderers who can create such nightmares should be hunted down. The homicide unit would have considered it dead weight, but she wasn’t going to allow that dead weight to get any heavier. She wasn’t going to give this a go around, she was on the hunt.

Chambers glared for a moment and then said, “Count me in Laura.”

She half smiled.

© 2014 Frank Atanacio

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Nicely written, Frank. It is so hard to do this well, and you do this well.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Great writing Frank. You could almost make this another challenge and ask others to write endings..hint hint. Voted up.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Another really good one Frank. The breathing holes in the tarp got my attention. Phew.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Just in case you didn't get Jodah's hint..Wink Wink...Hee..

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      Sam Deal 2 years ago from Earth

      That half smile at the end is so eery...

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, another good read. I hope Kimber and Chambers are getting some good psychological support, this kind of evil can really mess with the head. :). As always, nicely done.

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      Becky Katz 2 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Nicely done. I wish we could be privy to how the hunt works out.

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Another powerful piece from your pen, Frank. I love looking at your word-painted pictures. Great!

      Ann

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      Kept private 2 years ago from Northeast United States

      Interesting crime story :). Thank you for sharing :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      God writing! Interesting reading. Mention of items like the pine tree and the plastic tarp make us think you wouldn't have mentioned these if they weren't for real.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Hooray for public servants like Kimber ... yes, please, no more dead weight. Excellent writing, dear Frank, once again. The conversations along with their facial expressions you depict are always quite well done. Plus the added detail to the surroundings give it such a realistic feel.

      Up, awesome and interesting and away

      Hope your week ahead is wonderful.

      God bless you.

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      As usual frank, great writing, i wish i could be the invisible spirit watching those detectives.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you billy :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Jodah that sounds like a great idea for this piece...

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      always thank you I'd like to see how you and Jodah can end this

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      deal, becky and toobusiness thank you for visiting my flash fiction

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Annart, Msdora and Carrie bless you guys for checking out my fiction

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      My dear Faith thank you for your wonderful comment and Clive thank you too for reading my flash

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Another good write Frank; I just caught it before turning in. Now I will have nightmares. Haha... I might. ^+

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      Randi Benlulu 2 years ago from Mesa, AZ

      Another great one, Frank! And intriguing! I will be looking forward to what comes next! Up and interesting!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jackie Lynnley... and btrbell for reading my fiction

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      Oh, the details you paint ... like meatloaf left in the oven too long. You always do such a fine job capturing the essence of a crime scene. Well done! Up and more.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      flourish thank you so much

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Amazing. Again you draw us in. I can see the neighborhood and unfortunately I can see the dead man's dread as he watched the flames spread. Good for Kimberly, of course our heroine.

      Voted up, useful, awesome, and interesting.

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      You always draw me in and keep me there Frank! Well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Til thank you for leaving footptints on my pages and Audrey always good seeing you :)

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      Joanna Chandler 2 years ago from On planet Earth

      Hmmm what a cruel way to die Frank...... You always hit if off well with these detective stories, its why i am convinced that you are an x cop. You watch a lot of CSI Miami , law and order or undercover cop shows on the whole lol.

      Thanks for sharing Detective Atanacio

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      William Thomas 2 years ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

      Nice work, Frank.

      Once again, Frank, let me offer my compliments, specifically, for your ability---which I have alluded to before---to derive tales from the in-between spaces; the story before the story; even the story before the beginning of the beginning of the story. You have shown us, here, that there can even be a story in how one makes up her mind about something, gathers up her resolve.

      Again, well done: crisp and precise.

      Take it easy.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      lady after all this time.. thought you virtually knew me LOL thank you for your confidence in my writing :) Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      crisp? wing thanks so much for you comments.. I appreciate them and you bless you

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      Peggy Woods 2 years ago from Houston, Texas

      Interesting story and if based upon facts, it would be nice to know that some investigators would take things like this seriously despite the part of town in which such a horrendous act occurred.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      peggy thank you for the visit always good to see you :)

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 2 years ago from Lagos

      Count me in too. We are going on a hunt. Such unscrupulous elements must not be allowed to go free after such heinous crimes.

      Your stories are superb, Frank. Ride on!!

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      Christopher Dapo and S. 2 years ago from Havelock, NC

      Okay, Frank! Gave this the attention straight from alwaysexploring's ender (which was awesome), and I think I'm up for the challenge! Give me a moment to get these wheels on track and I'll deliver the "goods" soon! ;)

      Thanks for the inspiration, Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you uban for checking this out and Chris I look forward to your ending thank you

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Frank are you going to add links to other hubber's endings here or on the "challenge" hub? It's just that if anyone we aren't following adds an ending we won't know about it otherwise.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      I put them on the writer's challenge page but when i get more in ill post them here and on my two fan pages.. thanks Jodah for staying on top of this.. your help is always appreicated bless you bro :)

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      Eric Boyd 2 years ago

      Frankie, the endings are much more than hits, so you know. Take a good look at Jodah's piece and send it to you know who. She would be amazed. The others are stories all in themselves and they didnt really need to follow this lead. But I guess a challenge is a challenge. EB

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      Peg Cole 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Eerie and dramatic, this one reads like an episode of the first forty eight. Nicely done, or should I say well done. (Groan) Your descriptions are top shelf like this one, "lying there like a piece of meatloaf someone left in the oven too long." BTW, where is your fan page? I just read Tillsontitan's engaging continuation of the story, now on to the others.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Pegcole thank you so much for your continued support bless you

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      Mike Jones 2 years ago

      They did justice to this ending my friend so you know

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you erik and mike for stopping by :)

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      Marvin Parke 2 years ago from Jamaica

      Very well detailed and works well with my imagination.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you rasta :)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Another very good crime story, Frank. I debated and finally decided to take the challenge. "Detective Laura Kimber" - Hope you like it.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Hi Phyllis, ill check it out now!!! :)...

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 2 years ago from Lagos

      Yeah, go get the killer. I've actually read the version they got him. Ruby, said the Puerto Rican street gang did the dirty job on the killer. Lol.

      A great write again, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you again my friend :)

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