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A Murder of Crows

Updated on August 24, 2016

A murder of crows

In thirteen trees

Squawking loudly

Before the sun rose

Surrounding one house

Sleeping Soundly

Or meant only for me to see?

Long enough to listen to the song

And count the trees

Watching more join them

Then in a rush

Every single one

Flew away

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      thank you Sligobay, you know this one did warn of an impending death, I went to a funeral last weekend. They were in many trees, I took writer's license to make it "thirteen" - I should have made it Friday huh? LOL

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      It's crowing time around your Hubs. This is linked from the other. Unlucky thirteen doesn't promise a good day for any. At least its not Friday. Enjoyed the poem and its hint of superstition.

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Hello Docmo, nice to see you again! yes, I learned all these new collective nouns recently - some I knew, some were new - but I just love the ones that have to do with myth and superstition! Thanks for voting! Love and Peace.

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      Mohan Kumar 6 years ago from UK

      Elegantly done and I love the 'murder of crows' It sounds so good. I ma sure you know that the collective noun for ravens is an 'unkindness'! voted up!

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      erthfrend, thanks so much for visiting again, always glad to see your comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed this, I had fun writing it. It was a peaceful moment with a mysterious edge, I felt connected to the Earth - just a bit confused at the message. I supposed it will come easily with time, things always have a way of working themselves out. Love and peace.

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      erthfrend 6 years ago from Florida

      I really enjoyed this...it had a mysterious edge to it but yet it had that comforting touch, making me think of peaceful, quiet moments and subtle things that you notice while you lay in bed, in the darkness and peace of the night. Beautiful!

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      sentimental, thanks so much, this one flowed in a matter of minutes - i guess the simplest and best ones always do. actually it was true, i was just writing about my morning. namaste.

      ahorseback, thanks so much again, for your visit and wonderful words, im so glad you are enjoying my work, as I enjoy yours as well! Namaste.

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      ahorseback 6 years ago

      This is nice and the wording........! Nice job , I like it!

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      Capt Semant 6 years ago from India

      Like stream flows.... the emotions rolling down the senses.. Great works..

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      well thank you very much my friend, im very speechless! This is a true story too...I was just describing my morning the other day and trying to dedeuce its meaning...I have yet to find any very dark and ominous side to it - so it must have one of those very very wise and noble purposes.

      I match your 5 'verys' and I call.

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ...yes one of my favorites by you - it's short and to the point - and so very unsettling - and very very ominous too - you have really hit your poetic stride on this one - the epi-man is very very impressed.

      And if you're counting - that's 5 'verys' ......

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Thanks so much Nellieanna, I;m so glad you like it!

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      Nellieanna Hay 6 years ago from TEXAS

      I like this. It really sets a mood!

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Thank you all! I'm so sorry, I'm short on time today for individual comments - and I have to get to Home Invasion 5 tomorrow - this weekend is so busy - but your comments have blown me away - I am so honored to have friends and new friends to read my work and comment like you. And WillStar, its called a murder because they are believed to be a death omen - at least that's what I've read in my research - follow the links included above they give some great information!

      Thanks everyone, you are awesome, Love and Blessings as always!

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      Doug Turner Jr. 6 years ago

      I love that a group of crows is called a "murder". Good use of the doomed number 13 as well. This was dark and spooky but fun. Well done. Cheers.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      This is so ironic.I have a nest of crows in my far back lot. I have two and a half acres with my house and lots of huge trees. Sometimes they venture close. I like to watch them, really they are beautiful, so black, they glisten. Loved your poetry.

      Cheers

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      b. Malin 6 years ago

      Good Poem...It would be fun to find out where THEY sleep and blast them out of bed with some really Loud RAP music! Good one Erin!

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      Augustine A Zavala 6 years ago from Texas

      Grackles do the same here in Texas. They gather, gaggle, crap, then leave. Thank you for sharing.

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      prasetio30 6 years ago from malang-indonesia

      It looks frightening. But actually, this is awesome. You made this so different. I always love your presentation. Keep on writing, Erin. My pray always for you. Take care!

      Prasetio

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      saddlerider1 6 years ago

      The Omen of the Crows, beware. Yes mostly definitely brings back chilling memories of Alfred Hitchcocks "The Birds"..

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      lindatymensky 6 years ago

      Reminds me of the shortness of life. Very good poem. I'm following you! Keep 'em coming!

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      vietnamvet68 6 years ago from New York State

      reminds me of the movie "The Birds"

      God Bless

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      WillStarr 6 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Reminds me of my Iowa days.

      (And I always wondered why it's called a murder of crows rather than a flock!)

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Hi Christina, I thought of that this morning out there with all those birds!

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      Christina M. Castro 6 years ago from Baltimore,MD USA

      Beautiful! We should read this before watching that movie called "The Birds" ( remember that old scary movie?)