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A Short flash fiction story - A Day of getting lost at a new place

Updated on April 14, 2016
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Venkat loves arts and literature and keeps reading books of all genre and developed an interest in writing literary and fictional articles.

Enjoy getting lost voluntarily in this green maze

You can enjoy the funny experience of getting lost at these Botanical Gardens, St.Louis, Missouri.
You can enjoy the funny experience of getting lost at these Botanical Gardens, St.Louis, Missouri. | Source

A Day of getting lost

He is in a very pleasant mood, half-lying on a green lawn reading a book. Perhaps a novel. He is reading and watching the surroundings. Just some minutes before they have arrived in that flat in one of those buildings standing there within his sight. His son has been transferred to that city on some promotion. Minutes after checking in, he came out of the building to enjoy the open air and the beauty of the nature. The lawn was calling him when he was looking out from a window and that's how he came down to enjoy the outing.

The lawn is shaded by some trees on the side and the cool breeze is mesmerising. It is within an open compound. We don't know whether it is that building's compound or some public place. It is surrounded by some old walls on three sides leaving the side towards the buildings uncovered. Even the walls are not complete. There are some openings on all sides for people to pass by. And the height of the walls is very low.

He is reading the book and simultaneously watching all around. People are passing by his side and looking at him. He is alone on the lawn and none else. It seems to be evening time, must be just 4:30 pm or 5 pm. School children are also passing by and some of them smiling behind. He turns around to look at them and finds most of them jumping the wall instead of passing through the open space. Even some elder people were doing the same. The wall is only of 3 feet height at that place. He wonders at them and looks at the opening space of the wall in that corner. Then only he noticed that the place is not good for passing through. Trunks of wood were burnt there and the remains along with dark ash are spread all over in that place. That's why they are avoiding going that side.

Now, it's getting evening and will be soon dark. So, he gets up and walks towards his building. On reaching nearer to the buildings, he notices there are more than one building there and all are same. He becomes confused as to which one is his building. He doesn't know even the name of the apartment also. And he does not note even his flat number before coming out. He becomes too much tense.

He goes into one of those buildings and tries to find out by searching some of the flats. But, they looked much different than the one from which he stepped out. So, he comes out and tries the next building. There also he is unable to recognise his flat. Much confused and worried, he thinks of calling to his son. But, he could not find the mobile. Then he realises that he had left it in the pocket of another shirt, which he had changed before stepping out. Now, he becomes much afraid and contemplates on what to do. He wishes that his son, who was engaged in some office job before his stepping out, will be soon coming out in search of him. So, he waits outside with much tension and hope. ......................

Suddenly, he wakes up from his dream and looks all around in tension. He is very happy to see that he is presently on his own bed and in his own home.


A young man engaged in book reading

A person reading book under a tree. Source:veryshareimg.com
A person reading book under a tree. Source:veryshareimg.com

A very good place for getting lost

If you don't remember your apartment and flat number, you can easily get lost here. (These apartments are on the banks of Thames River, London). Source: wikimedia commons
If you don't remember your apartment and flat number, you can easily get lost here. (These apartments are on the banks of Thames River, London). Source: wikimedia commons | Source

A real incident of getting lost

Once, my cousin brother (aged) visited our house along with his wife while on their long tour of religious places. He is habituated to smoking. He went out of the house to purchase some cigarettes and have his smoke. While going out his wife asked him. But, he told her that he is going only to the nearby shop which he had seen already while coming to our house. She did not object anymore. He went out and we were engaged in our gossips. After a lapse of time, I started thinking of him that he might be confused in finding his way back and must be experiencing problems. Thinking thus, I happened to look out of the window and just noticed him passing by very swiftly. I got up and quickly went out to see him. By then, he already reached the other end of the lane and was just turning into another lane. I ran after him and shouted at him to stop. He looked back and seeing me began shedding tears. He told me he was lost in the lanes and was roaming since long being unable to find the way back home. I got much pitied and told him that I, by chance, happened to look at him through our window and that's how located him. Both of us thanked God and returned home. His wife scolded him for going out even though she was internally thankful that her husband was safe.

How to avoid getting lost at new places

By following some simple precautions, you can avoid getting lost at any unknown places.

  • The first thing that you should check is whether you have kept your phone with you or not. Always carry your mobile phone with you. And its battery should be full always. Also, keep your phone charged with talk balance. You can charge it at any place nowadays, but keeping it updated is better.
  • The next point to be checked (which may not be of that much importance) is to keep your id proof with you which can be of much help for tracing your home if you get lost.
  • You may also need to keep some money with you or your credit/debit card with you for reaching your destination or back home when you get lost.
  • The next important step is to note down the full address of your new home or destination along with the building name, door number, famous landmark of that location, phone number of the owner/person or office, if any, in the building, etc. You should keep all these details with you until you get accustomed to that place. With the help of these details, you can enquire any person and reach your place properly without problems till the time you become well accustomed.

A book titled "A Grand Day to Get Lost"

There is a great popular book titled 'A Grand Day to Get Lost" written by Kris Radish, centered around the adventures of a university librarian named Emily Weaver who in the pursuit of a treasure hunt gets lost for lifetime facing many dangers in her attempt to uncover truth by distinguishing facts from fiction during her encounters with ghosts and many unrealistic circumstances.

A Grand Day to Get Lost

Your experience of getting lost

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A video for enjoying getting lost "your soul"

Being getting lost either in body or soul should be under your control

Getting lost physically by forgetting your home or address is a very worrisome problem. It can be either due to some mental weakness or carelessness on your part.

If it is a mental problem, then you should meet your psychiatrist or psychologist for treatment.

If it is carelessness and overconfidence, you should be more practical and prudent in taking care of yourself. Keep your identity, mobile phone and the full details of your home address and destination address.

Getting lost in thoughts and awaken dreams should be controlled to certain extent to be conscious of your surroundings and to be on earth. Even though dreams and beautiful thoughts give you much pleasure and enjoyment, they should not be problematic to your existence in this world. So, you need to keep them under control.

Lastly, I hope all of you enjoyed my short story and appreciate my other tips and laments here. Kindly express your views in your comments below.

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      Venkatachari M 13 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thanks for visiting and the nice comment.

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      Frank Atanacio 13 months ago from Shelton

      Venka.. a very creative and well paced short story.. yeah.. I enjoyed the read :)

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      Venkatachari M 13 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Marie. I also do not find time nowadays. It's 3 months since I wrote my last hub.

      I think it to be good to touch different subjects with different ideas whatever trifle it may seem.

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      Marie L B 13 months ago from Yamba

      Ideas are everywhere - at least that is how I aee it V M. My problem is that there is never enough time to do everything I want to do!! You seem to be well organised, and your articles encompass such a variety of subjects, that one never get jaded with reading them. Thank you.

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      Venkatachari M 14 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Chris. I know it to be a tough task that requires much practice, again and again. I would like to write more stories if get some ideas. Thanks for your nice comment and advice.

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      Chris Mills 14 months ago from Maple City, Michigan

      I enjoy seeing others taking up the writing of flash fiction. It is a skill to be practiced over and over again. The setting was pleasant place if one has to be lost. I hope you continue to write more flash fiction stories.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thanks for the visit and nice comment. Some real incidents often come into dreams, but with a mix of more horror and excitement. You can spin wonderful stories around them with great twists.

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 16 months ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      Interesting twist at the end which I did not expect. Nice read. Useful tips as well.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Nell Rose. Glad to know you enjoyed it. Thanks for the visit, nice comment and for sharing your experiences.

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      Nell Rose 16 months ago from England

      Hi, what a great story, and I was so glad to see that he was dreaming! its so easy to get lost, I also read what you said about your cousin being lost, that is terrible when that happens! it happened to us many years ago when we were on holiday by the sea, we went for a walk and forgot to take notice of our hotel and road! lol! we soon found it, but its a very weird feeling!

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      That's a wonderful feedback, Missy. I like how you narrated your feelings and experience placing yourself into the character of the story.

      Dreams, as well as some of the real experiences of life at times, are much wonderful and we can't explain them why they are like so.

      Thanks for your visit and nice comment.

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      Missy Smith 16 months ago from Florida

      This was a very interesting read, Venkat. I placed myself in the man's position of sitting and watching people pass through, over, and in between those walls. He seemed very much aware of his surroundings and noted every little detail, and then, what made it interesting to me, is when he returned to the buildings and was confused on which to enter. After, it all becomes clear to me when he was actually in a dream. This is definitely how some dreams seem, do they not? Mazes we see clearly, then suddenly do not understand. I've felt panicked in dreams before as well.

      I like how this flash fiction played out. When I think about it, I should have guessed a dream. While watching the people I felt in a bubble, and in slow motion. It was very neat, Venkatachari. :)

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Chitra, for your visit and a nice comment. I am happy to know it kept you hooked. My blessings to you.

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      Chitrangada Sharan 16 months ago from New Delhi, India

      Very nice, short story that kept me engaged till the end and the end was a relief. The pictures you chose for your story are amazing.

      Incidentally I also get dreams like that so often!

      I think it is quite difficult to get lost in today's World of mobile phones. If someone is lost, the reasons could be really serious.

      Thanks for sharing this interesting hub!

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Hi Faith, I am much happy to see you. Sometime or other, it can happen to anybody. But, not like that as shared by me in the fictional story. It was much horrible. But, it was a dream. And my cousin brother's was also much scary. He could have really lost if he went away far too long. It was a relief that he was going around the same lanes near our home.

      Thanks for your visit and nice comment and for sharing your experiences. My blessings to you.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Hari, for your visit and nice comment and for sharing your experiences. My blessings to you.

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      Faith Reaper 16 months ago from southern USA

      Hi Ven,

      I enjoyed your story and the ending was a relief! I have always wanted to walk around a maze like that in your top photo there. I did get lost one time, big time, in the city of Atlanta, Georgia, and I thought I knew my way, but obviously I went astray somewhere along the line. Boy, was I thrilled to get to a spot I recognized after several hours of going around in circles. So, I can relate to your cousin brother. Bless his heart. It is not a good feeling to be lost. I stopped a couple of times to get directions, but that seemed to make it worse!

      You have shared great tips here too, Ven.

      Peace and blessings

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      Hari Prasad S 16 months ago from Bangalore

      Nice story and good read. Enjoyed it. I got lost once when i was a kid in a tourist place, but could make out my route back. I think for that not to happen children should also be given a note while going to a far away place.

      - hari

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Alicia. It is really horrible, as I have seen it on my cousin brother's face and tears. Thanks for your visit and nice comment.

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      Linda Crampton 16 months ago from British Columbia, Canada

      Your story is interesting and the advice is excellent. Getting lost in a new place can certainly be scary, as I know from experience!

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Carb. That's nice of you. I am glad that it impressed you. Thanks for your visit and encouraging words. I will try to follow your advice. Thanks a lot.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Ann. I was awaiting eagerly for your visit and response as you are my great inspirator. Now, I am happy. Thanks for the visit and nice comment and encouraging words. Thanks a lot.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Devika. Certainly, I wanted to do something new here. Thanks for the visit and nice comment.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Ruby. Thanks for your visit and a nice feedback. Your experience is a quite normal one which most of us can experience at large malls. I also had such experience some years back.

      And thanks for following me back.

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      Linda Lum 16 months ago from Washington State, USA

      I really enjoyed this story. You had me "hooked" from the first paragraph. Your ending surprised me, and that's the mark of a good story teller. I hope you will continue to do this type of writing from time to time. It suits you well.

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      Ann Carr 16 months ago from SW England

      Good effort on flash fiction! It's not an easy genre. I like that you've given plenty of advice as to how to remember your way in strange places; it's so easy to get lost unless you note memorable landmarks or street names.

      Great job!

      Ann

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      Devika Primić 16 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Interesting! I didn't have that experience of getting lost. You certainly did a great job here. Flash fiction is new and different.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 16 months ago from Southern Illinois

      I was at a large mall not long ago when I got lost, what happened, I went in on one side and left on the other side. I spent some time searching for my car until I realized what had happened. I now notice what objects are at the entrance. Nice story and some good tips.......

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Dreamer. I appreciate your feedback. Thanks for the visit and nice comment.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Bill. I get inspired from all you nice people here and keep trying something, even though language is my problem.

      Thanks for your visit, nice comment and appreciation of my work.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      That's nice of you, Jackie Lynnley. Thanks for the visit, nice comment and share.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      You are right, Valkaras. One can get lost as a tourist, visitor or in a huge office building when new. Visitors can also get lost. But, I showed here the tenant as a fresh visitor to his son living in another city where identical buildings are there and because of his carelessness, in this case. I hope it can happen at times. Just like I shared another real incident in the right floated capsule.

      Thanks for your visit and nice comment.

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      Venkatachari M 16 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Thank you, Manatita. You are the first visitor this time and it is my honor. That too you came up with such a nice comment and great feedback. I am much happy at all this. Thanks a lot.

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      DreamerMeg 16 months ago from Northern Ireland

      I think that beginning could lead to a very interesting longer story. It's useful to begin an informational hub with a story that illustrates why the information is important. As a child, I was told I was always getting lost but that wasn't how I saw it. To me, I knew where I was - here- it was just that others didn't know where I was. As an adult, I am careful to note my surroundings for getting back.

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      Bill Holland 16 months ago from Olympia, WA

      I like it that you are giving flash fiction a try. Good job.....and then some helpful hints after the story...nice, unique style of writing. Well done!

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      Jackie Lynnley 16 months ago from The Beautiful South

      Great little story and tips. Shared.

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      Vladimir Karas 16 months ago from Canada

      Other than suffering from the Alzheimer's disease, one can get lost as a tourist or a visitor, or a new employee in a huge building, which happened to me. However, rarely as a new tenant, since they must have revisited the place several times, like during initial checking it out, and afterwards during moving in.

      As a story it certainly has its charm and I like it.

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      manatita44 16 months ago from london

      Cute attempt at short Flash Fiction. The ending was good. Some great tips on getting or avoiding getting lost. I was lost in Austria once. You mention Soul, perhaps you could have talked a little about getting lost there, if there is such a thing. Still, as humans we are sometimes truly 'lost.' Isn't there a patron Saint of lost causes?

      Actually, I do not mix the Flash. Just write a Flash Fiction story, begin strong and end strong. This makes up for if you're a little weak in the middle. So build the story around the maze, give it momentum and end with suddenly becoming awake. Nice attempt.