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A change of heart on a rainy night - Flash Fiction

Updated on February 23, 2014
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I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

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A night to remember.

Evelyn was alone in her car following Bruce and Mary. It was a rainy night on interstate seventy five. She felt cheated.

She, Bruce and Mary had been to a party given by the company they all three were employeed at. Bruce and Mary were married.

Bruce and Evelyn had been sneaking around every chance they got. Bruce promised to divorce Mary, but that was two years ago.

She noticed Bruce had his right signal light flashing, so she pulled over too, keeping a safe distance behind. She waited. All the while wondering what was going on?

She exited her car and carefully sneaked close enough to see and listen.

All three had been drinking at the party. She noticed Mary had stumbled as they left.

She heard Mary say, " I hate you, you cheating SOB, then she saw Bruce hit her. She waited to see Mary's response, but she didn't see Mary again, only Bruce sitting with his hand's clutching the sterring wheel.

She ventured closer and saw Mary slumped over, face up with eyes wide open. She rushed toward the car and saw Bruce crying and saying, " Oh God, what have i done? "

She wanted to open the door and help him, but that uneasy, old feeling returned, feeling cheated and lied to far too many times. She quickly returned to her car, eased onto the highway. As she pulled away she looked into her rearview mirror and sees a highway patrol car pull up behind Bruce's car.

Funny how her mood changes. No more waiting for late night phone calls, no more lies. Flipping on the radio, she listens and smiles as Elvis sings ' I've lost you ( That's the way it is. )

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    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      3 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Paula, I love to write fiction. So happy you think it's a winner. Thank you so much. Peace...

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      Paula 

      3 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      True Crime....my favorite. This is a winner, Ruby....unlike Bruce! UP+++

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Jo, Happy you found this an interesting read. Thank you for coming by...

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      Jo_Goldsmith11 

      4 years ago

      A interesting read. And oh how the bad guy gets the comeuppance he deserves! A reminder how when one uses violence, the situation is already lost. Up and shared. Kind of dark, but worth reading for the useful lesson that it contains.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Thandi. I agree. Happy you enjoyed my story....Thank you...

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 

      4 years ago from Lagos

      I love this story, Ruby. Bruce got what he deserved and that's what every cheating person will get for being an a**.

    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Shyron. So happy you enjoyed. I really don't have a desire to write a book, i just love to write flash fiction. Thank you so much for sharing...Yes Bruce got in deep waters, now he must pay....

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      Shyron E Shenko 

      4 years ago from Texas

      This was spellbinding Ruby, when are you writing a book?

      I love the mysteries. Bruce is in to deep.

      Voted up +++ and shared.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello kerlund74. Nice to meet you. Glad you enjoyed my story. Thank you for coming by..Cheers..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mar, lol i do believe you're a poet! Hee.. Thank you dear one, stretching time! Hugs..

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      kerlund74 

      4 years ago from Sweden

      Excellent short story. I like this, great to read:) That Bruce seems to be in trouble now;) And he has only himself to blame...

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      Maria Jordan 

      4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      I must have stretched too far, dear Ruby...(LOL), because I read this when you first published and promptly got distracted from commenting!

      Evelyn is alright. Bruce is a fright. Mary said good night. You wrapped this up tight...outta sight, Sista! Voted UP & UABI - great write...!

    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Nadine, Happy you had fun reading this. Your comment cracks me up. Ha..Thank you..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      DDE, good to see you again. Thank you for reading and leaving a great comment..

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      Nadine May 

      4 years ago from Cape Town, Western Cape, South Africa

      Wow, short but sweet as they say. Fun to read and the end was like a shotgun wedding. Well Done!

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      Devika Primić 

      4 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Interesting and an enjoyable read your mind flows with great emotion.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello epbooks. I tend to rush it through too quickly. I wish i could master your stated problem, going on too long! So happy you enjoyed my story. Thank you...

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      Elizabeth Parker 

      4 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

      Enjoyable story. I wish I could master Flash Fiction, but I tend to go on for too long!! :)

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Rasma, So happy you enjoyed. Thank you...Cheers.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Ghaelach, It probably goes on much more than we realize. Thank you so much for sharing and pinning. Cheers..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Ruchira, I agree. He will have a long time to think about what he did for killing his wife and cheating too. Mary has to think how wrong she was too. Thank you for coming by...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Audrey. Always happy to see you. Thank you much...Cheers.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Genna, Thank you so much. As i've said, i wasn't too sure about this. I felt like i rushed it a bit. I am learning to write more fiction, i still want to rhyme every word..lol..Thank you for supporting my hubs and sharing. You are a dear friend....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Susan, happy you enjoy reading my stories. Thank you...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Barbara, I guess Bruce had a harder punch then he realized. Pun intended..lol Thank you for a fun comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Manatita, Thank's for coming by. I appreciate your honest comment..

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 

      4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and interesting. Enjoyed this lots.

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      Ghaelach 

      4 years ago

      Morning Ruby.

      A great piece of flash fiction that you have written. Sort and packing the punch.

      I wonder how often this sort of thing goes on in real life.

      Voted up, sharing, and pinning.

      Ghaelach

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      Ruchira 

      4 years ago from United States

      Good for her ;)

      He is gonna have some introspection to do while in the cell

      loved your take, Ruby!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Mike. I like your punch line.Hee..Thank you for the well done comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello suzzycue, So glad you enjoyed this story. Thank you for stopping by..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Lesley, I had no idea where i was going with this story, it seemed to take on a life as i wrote, funny how that happens. Happy to see you on my page..Hugs..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Annart, i feel the same, all three were in the wrong. Thank you for coming to read. Happy you thought it was a good message....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Jodah, Thank you for your well done comment. I am glad you didn't think it was too short. I'm still learning how to write flash fiction. I love doing it...Cheers..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Frank, I'm glad you liked this one. I kept thinking i was rushing the story too fast, so maybe not. Thank you for your wow comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello tobusiness, I had mixed emotions about Bruce too. They all three were on a downhill slide. Thank you for coming to read and comment..Cheers..

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      Audrey Howitt 

      4 years ago from California

      Well done Ruby! You packed in quite a bit of story here in this compact write!

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      Genna East 

      4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Wow! Isn’t it interesting how everything in life can turn on a dime...with the same quickness and determination in which Bruce turns off the highway, and in which Evelyn turns off and then right back onto that highway. This is flash fiction to a T Ruby, and done so very well! Voted up and sharing. :-)

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      Susan 

      4 years ago from India

      I enjoyed reading your hub Ruby. Thanks for sharing this. Voted up.

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      b. Malin 

      4 years ago

      Quite a ride (pardon the pun) Ruby. Very well done, it packed quite a Punch too. (oops pardon the pun again)

      Voted UP!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Perspycacious, happy you found it interesting. Thank you. Have a great week.....

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      manatita44 

      4 years ago

      Not bad. A little more length and you will be ready for a great short story.

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      mckbirdbks 

      4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Your writing sure packs a punch. Well done Ruby.

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      Susan Britton 

      4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      I enjoyed your Flash Fiction Always. Great ending . I never saw it coming.

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      Karen Silverman 

      4 years ago

      Oooo...Ruby...

      I watch far too much true crime..lol

      I thought for SURE that Bruce was going to say that EVELYN killed his wife and was getting away!!!

      LOL

      hugs, my friend - sorry i'm here monday - not sundayxx

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      Ann Carr 

      4 years ago from SW England

      Great story. Glad she decided to walk away from a bad relationship; shame Mary didn't do the same long before! Above board relationships with kind people are the best - good message. Ann

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      John Hansen 

      4 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Well done Ruby...short and to the point. But it didn't need to be any longer, you got the point across very well. Sounds like Bruce got exactly what he deserved. You reap what you sew, so to speak. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 

      4 years ago

      wow always... this was really good.. forgot to comment after I read it so Im saying awesome via smart phone..

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 

      4 years ago from Lincolnshire, U.K

      Ruby, very well done! Strange how our bad deeds always catches up with us in the end? Poor Bruce, I almost felt sorry for him....almost. :)

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      Demas W Jasper 

      4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Interesting scene and conclusion. Now back to a regular week?

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Bill, You're always the first to appear. I appreciate your support and encouragement. Happy it was an enjoyable read, i wasn't too sure about this one. I seemed to rush, ah heck, i'm still learning..lol..Thank you dear friend...

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      Bill Holland 

      4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I think Bruce is about to have his life altered drastically and good riddance. :) Well done my friend; an enjoyable read this rainy Sunday afternoon.

      Have a wonderful week ahead Ruby!

      bill

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