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Hansel and Gretel evil short story

Updated on May 30, 2014

Mischievous Hansel and Gretel

Hansel and Gretel Evil short story

Hansel and Gretel were lost again. The parents screamed there names. The dastardly children had put bread crumbs everywhere so their parent would go in the wrong direction. Mother and father cried as the two of them set off in search of mischief. Finally the two them decided to play in the forest. While in the forest they did all kinds of bad things. The poor woodland critters were tied up and beaten by the two children. These children would lore the animals out with food and then hit them over the head and torment the poor creatures.

As they laughed and frolicked around the forest they thought what better way to upset mother and father then to stay out all day. They will think someone kidnapped us said Gretel. She smiled at Hansel. They walked all through the forest. Making problems for any living thing they found. They would pick rocks up and throw them at birds nests just to upset the mother bird. They soon found themselves bored again though. This time they thought lets go back. It's almost dark now. We'll be able to get them to anything when we get home. They'll be so relieved we are back that they'll get us anything we want to play with. "There so stupid" said Hansel. "I think I'm going to steal fathers favorite pocket watch when we get back" Gretel replied. The two decided to go back, but soon realized that they hadn't been laying down the bread crumbs and they had to find their way back.

They had used all there food to pull out the woodland animals so they could torment them. Now that all the food was gone the two children were starving. They continued to walk through the woods with no idea of where they were going. Soon they stumbled upon a gingerbread house in the middle of the woods. "Candy" they screamed. In disbelief both of the children started eating away at the house. They didn't stop at just a few mouthfuls. They continuously ate away at the house almost causing a hole to form. Suddenly they heard a voice ask them," excuse me but if you keep eating my house I'll have a very cold winter coming."

Evil Hansel and Gretel

Sweet old witch

The kind Witch

The sweet old lady asked the children if they would like to come inside. Both of the children entered the house without saying a simple ok. The children toured the house and made there way to the kitchen. They found all kinds of candy in the kitchen and had their way with everything they saw. Hansel noticed something funny about the kitchen though. As they ate candy they noticed something cooking in the oven. The sweet old lady said, "this oven can turn anything into candy." The children smiled in disbelief. They had never heard of any oven turning things into candy.

The children but a piece of wood from outside into the oven and out came ginger bread. They began to put rocks into the oven and out came rock candy. What an amazing oven. We have found the greatest thing in the world. The children asked this lady where she received it. The lady said, "well I was a witch for many years, this was one oven I had enchanted on back when I was young. I could never make another but this one works perfectly." Hansel and Gretel had some evil thoughts. Gretel whispered to Hansel we need to get this oven. Hansel said and lets do something wicked to mom and dad.

"Excuse me miss" ,said Hansel to the older sweet lady. "I'm having a hard time grabbing my fathers pocket watch out of the oven, I dropped it and I don't want it to turn to candy." The witch looked at the boy with a smile and said, "don't you worry I'll get it for you, I have long arms." As she opened the oven and looked inside she reached for the pocket watch. Just as she went to grab it, Hansel and Gretel pushed the old sweet lady into the oven and turned it on. Within a few minutes and after a few blood gurgling screams. The old sweet lady was turned into a huge mound of chocolate. Hansel and Gretel were delighted.

They picked up the new giant chocolate woman and put it on the witches wagon she had outside. The oven which was made of candy itself was just light enough for them to put on the little wagon as well. They pulled the wagon and chocolate lady all the way home. Guessing which way they were going they finally made it home. They told there mother and father, "we're sorry we got lost." The mother and father were so relieved to see their children they just hugged and said, "its ok you two." They fed their parents the candy lady and said they had bought it and the oven for their fathers pocket watch. The father replied, "well you should have asked first, but we did really need an oven." The father smiled while eating the delicious woman and the children went to bed never telling their father or mother the evil things they had done.

© 2014 Joe


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    • Gypsy Rose Lee profile image

      Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Well that was an interesting take on the old story. Kinda scary in a way because I think that these days there are lots of children who are evil and bad.

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      Joe 3 years ago from north miami FL

      Thank you for those kind words b.malin

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      b. Malin 3 years ago

      Cute and Evil, how can you miss? Good Ending, after all, Who doesn't like Chocolate!

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      Joe 3 years ago from north miami FL

      Thanks vespa I appreciate the comment and am happy you enjoyed reading it. I enjoyed writing it.

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      vespawoolf 3 years ago from Peru, South America

      Those are some bad children! I like the sweet ending. Candy witch, yum!

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      Joe 3 years ago from north miami FL

      Thank you both for the comments and yes I will proof read it immediately and fix that. I was trying to get all my ideas out on paper quickly and needed to do some editing. Thank you for the proof read and yes I'm always open to constructive criticism.

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 3 years ago from The Caribbean

      Interesting twist! I also agree with Jodah to break up your long paragraphs into smaller ones. That makes it easier to read.

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Joe, you are really good at changing popular stories around to see them from a different perspective. Well done. These two were evil. You do need to proof read this though , there is some punctuation and words missing. Also you have used 'there' frequently instead of 'their', and you should break it into paragraphs of about four sentences each to make it easier to read. (I am just telling you this because you asked for advice in a previous hub). Overall an interesting read though.