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As dark as a Night Stalker - A Sad Poem

Updated on January 19, 2012
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On Loneliness

This was my first idea of the poem On Loneliness which has afflicted me for over a year. a friend i met on fb urged me to express my thoughts in writing. Thus, a very big help for me for i did have an outlet for my gushing emotions. I rephrased it for I have published the poem on my other site: http://raciniwa.blogspot.com

As dark as a night stalker
Snatching every glimmer of hope,
like a dark cloud
marring the sun's last light


As brutal as an executioner
pounding and mashing my core bits
Angel of Death blowing a death spell
like a plague inflicting anguish everywhere...

please depart
I beseech you
I want to succumb to this malady


I want to forget my misery
I want you to let me be

I want to wake up from island of lurid dreams...

I want to kiss
the sun’s rays
I want smile to seal my lips
I want the butterfly

To flutter in my heart


Liberate me,

relinquish your claws on me...

Then I can gladly utter
that the dark clouds

Are not ominous and foreboding
and I can cheerfully
remove the cumbersome

Onus of darkness
Thus the only reprieve for this...

Is the time when you
unlock the shackles
And let me soar towards

perfect tranquility...


Note: Loneliness is a real issue for people who suffered losses and separation with their significant other. It was a very heavy feeling, going on with day today activity seemed an insurmountable task, very daunting.

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      raciniwa 2 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      i do surrender everything to God that is why the veil of illusion is already lifted...thank you for the reminder sunrise...God bless...

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      sunrise 2 years ago

      Offer everything to Lord Jesus Christ and slowly you can overcome the situation you have right now. Always remember the good memories you have had.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      hello again thinice...thank you for making my day...have a great day...

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      thinice13 5 years ago from Colorado

      Another good poem. I look forward to reading more. Thanks for sharing it.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thank you as always Rosemay for being the beautiful butterfly Hubpages...yes, at times we can't help but feel the desolation life has in store for us, their is not better way to express this but through poetry...Have a great day...

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      A powerful piece of poetry, It is so very sad when we lose a loved one and it seems as though the lonelyness will never end. But it does and life goes on. You will always carry him in your heart.

      Beautiful writing Raci

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      Hello Quiz...thank you for taking the time to read my poetry...this is actually an outburst of my emotion some time ago...the feeling is gone now, thank God...but i still feel little vestiges of it...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      Ouch too...hehehe...this was written actually almost two years ago, when i haven't been up to my feet and felt so forlorn day by day...my poems were as dark as my moods...

      thank you for always being with me all the way...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      Oh, Eddy...it's a pleasure meeting you here in Hubpages and exchanging hub experience with you...thank you also for the support you've always shared to me...

      Take care too!!!Have a Blessed Sunday!!!

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, thank you ahorseback...you're one of the writers that I admire too...have a great day!!!

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      QUIZ2012 5 years ago

      I think your work is extrodinary and fulfills us. It is interest how you bring the reader the story and he/she is instantly warp in this dark world whereas he's compelled to view his inner demons. Not to take away from your touching story inside of it, you are able to see it through the prism as seven shades of life.

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      ouch...I should have read this poem first and then the upbeat poem inspiring the students :(

      beautifully written indeed...even the reader got involved in it.

      Wishing you joy and peace, my friend!

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      So very beautiful raciniwa my very dear friend.I often wonder what my life would be like if I had never found HubPages; I would never have found you and your gifted poems, hubs or our friendship.

      A big massive up up and away.

      Take care and have a wonderful weekend.

      Eddy.

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      ahorseback 5 years ago

      Ooohhh , your note says it all ! Awesome poetry ! How have I missed your writing my friend ....I'll be back!

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thank you so much Justin, can't find the right words to say...just very grateful of you to drop by...

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      this is a gorgeous poem, Racini. Thank you for sharing!

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      that's nice of you to notice the world at your perspective quiz...and thank you for reading my poem...Peace be with you too...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, thank you for the wonderful words tammy, it makes my spirit soar high when friends appreciate my pouring out of emotions which kinda overwhelm me at times...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      yes, that's where i have gained a foothold...when i started expressing myself and letting the words flow through me...thank you for the kind words sligobay...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thanks always exploring...yes, i'm hanging on to dear life...and now i'm starting to seeing a glimpse of life...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, glad to share that feeling with you Frank from time to time...thank you for taking the time to read my poem...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thank you Senoritaa for visiting my hub...yes, it's like a thief you don't know when it will free you from it's clutches...

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      QUIZ2012 5 years ago

      That was very powerful. At the moment of reading you piece sent me to another place where I could see all the mayhem and destruction in the world. Good work! Peace.

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      Tammy 5 years ago from North Carolina

      This is impressive and powerful. I think only the strongest poets should go to this part of the pschye.. not everyone comes back from it stronger than when they enter it. This is really outstanding and I hope it soon leaves you.

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      sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

      You may have experienced loss but you have found yourself and beautifully expressed your feelings poetically.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      This is sad and beautiful.I love your use of rhyme. It takes time to recover..Hang in there..Cheers

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Raci.. this was sadly beautiful and it kind of tugged at me.. I like when words do that..:) Frank

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      Agree with your notes on loneliness Raci. One good thing is that there is still hope that some day the monster might liberate you, and set you free to experience happiness. Very well written.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, does it lick old wound Susan?i'm sorry to hear that...this feeling hit me almost two years ago, and it took me more than a year just to let go of it, the hurt has eased out a bit, thanks to my therapist/partner who has helped me a lot in my ordeal...

      thank you for sharing your emotion...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      yes Linda, it always has...and it becomes more meaningful knowing that there are real people who care...I gain friends worldwide along the process...

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      I read your poem last night and couldn't leave a comment as it brought me back to a place that I don't like to go. It is a very powerful piece.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      Deep and intense Raci. Writing is very therapeutic and I hope it helps you:)

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      hello Ailen,

      i'm honored to be regarded as your second mother...yes dai, it's very difficult and painful to go through life knowing that the person who is very dear to us departs...just go on and later you'll realize that you have gotten over it...

      just take sure small steps at a time than leaping ahead but missing several steps in the end...i know you're brave...be assured that i'll always be here for you...my presence may not be physical but keep in your heart the thought of me for i always cherish you every single moment of it...

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      ailen ferrer 5 years ago

      maam this poem.. i can relate this because... when my mothers dead.. i dnt knw how to express my feelings,, nowadays.. nahihirapan akng mkasalamuha sa.. iba.. yes.. im still smiling..pero ung mukha.. ko lungkot parin ang nakikita.. prang ang hirap ibalik ang dating ako.. na makapagpapatwa ng iba.. i feel i am a looner person..

      but thanks maam.. of your poem and thanks.. for your.. care with me.. u know maam i treat u like my second mother.. its.. bcoz. sa tanan kw ray nakasabot nko.. ever since..

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      yes, it is especially when you know that you're fighting a losing battle...the ending is always nasty...thanks for taking the time to read...Peace be with you too...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thank you tony, and coming from you felt awesome too...

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Deep and haunting! Ending a relationship always hurts, but then life goes on.. I wish you all happiness. Shalom!

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      tonymodus 5 years ago

      This a very interesting work.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      yes,ytsenoh...it's easier said than done...ending a relationship no matter how difficult it was, is never easy...thank you for leaving that insightful comment...i appreciate is very much...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thanks Vinaya for the impression...yes, the emotions are strong because it comes from deep seated feelings...

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      Cathy 5 years ago from Louisiana, Idaho, Kauai, Nebraska, South Dakota, Missouri

      And sometimes a person never knows loneliness until a very signficant other departs--the effects of that are included with loss which spills you into a grieving process. Loneliness doesn't have to have power over you unless you want it to. I know this is easier said than accomplished, but it's true.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      Reading between the lines, a sad feeling erupted in my heart. But then suddenly an eddy erupted in my mind that you are a wonderful poet to evoke emotions in the readers.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      thank you caroline you're right...yes, we are not alone...but grieving is part of the process of healing...

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      Caroline Marie 5 years ago from Close to Heaven

      I could feel the heart wrenching emotions in this poem. It is hard to feel loneliness after someone leaves, but you are never truly alone if you don't choose to be. Thank you for sharing. Voted up!