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Casulties of a Poet's War

Updated on May 1, 2013

Words lying around

on my pages.

I tried to save them,

but at last,

I loosened the tourniquet

and let them bleed out onto the paper.

Poems as donors,

unfinished

used now for parts.

As I conduct a post-mortem

on my body farm of work,

I thank you for your sacrifice.

You gave up your lives,

so that other poems might live.




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      Diane Minton 4 years ago from Evansville, Indiana

      This poem is way cool...love it loving it...I like it when poetry is like a thought that keeps continuing and is all put together like this...You did a great job...

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      Chris Jawalka 4 years ago from Louisville, OH

      I really liked the way you made this poem... a sort of bridge to other (not yet written) poems. Excellent job!

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      Romeos Quill 4 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      Short and sweet;honest,cute,and funny! :O) Thumbs up!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      @diane thank you! It did kind of write itself like that.... so I am happy it reads that way !

      @chris I am glad that you saw something in it! Thanks for the visit

      @Romeo I am also delighted that you read the humor that was very much intended!

      Thank you all for your encouragement and kindness!

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      travmaj 4 years ago from australia

      Terrific - this is delightful and sorely identifiable.

      How difficult it is to achieve, all those precious words. Initially, they were so meaningful.

      The analogy with war and casualties is apt. Ah well, now they are donor poems and the words will fight to fit somewhere else.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      A dear writer friend once told me, "not everything can be good, but everything is something"

      I believe that the process takes us all somewhere! Glad you enjoyed this, thanks for your visit and support!

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      Theresa Ast 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Theater girl - I don't know about poets in general, but I have occasionally done this. What a feat you have accomplished to take the concept itself and turn it into an intense and moving poem. I am impressed. :)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you for your truly kind words. I enjoyed writing this and the enjoyment doubles if others see something useful in it!

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      Petra Vlah 4 years ago from Los Angeles

      I am surprised anyone could see humor in this poem... The artistic process is either painful or joyous, but never funny.

      Words have their own identity and they often come together in unexpected ways to express feeling or thoughts that surpass our intent as poets. It is exactly what happened in this case and "the spare parts" took a life of their own creating a very good poem, actually one of the best I read on Hub Pages in a long time

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      LongTimeMother 4 years ago from Australia

      What a great way of looking at it.

      Voted up. :)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Petra, thank you for your heartfelt words. And I so appreciate when anyone feels things so strongly about my poetry! And it is the ultimate compliment when a good writer says such lovely things about something I have written!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you long time mother!

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Ha, I love this! Creative, wry, and true!!!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Mrs. Brown! I am very glad that you enjoyed it! and I thank you for the visit :)

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Wow, this is one of my favorites. Very creative...voting up and sharing!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Wayne! Wow! What a compliment coming from you;) thanks for the votes and the sharing!

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      This is a great one for sure. Agreeing with Wayne here. Up ++

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you so much! I am truly appreciative of everyone's kind words!

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      Erika 4 years ago

      This is amazing! I love it!

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      This embodies that battles that my poems encounter within me everyday. Thank you. Jamie

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you embarrett! I really appreciate that you liked it!

      Thank you also Jamie, I appreciate the visit. And the battle is part of it!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Also, thanks for the sharing!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Also, thanks for the sharing!

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      Nithya Venkat 4 years ago from Dubai

      Great write and what a way to express. Awesome and voted up.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Vellur! I appreciate your comments and you stopping by!

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Confession time : I am really not a big fan of poetry, per se.

      I don't know what I do but I cringe when I have to call it poetry - I am just getting words out - I wouldn't even call myself a writer.

      But that said - this is a fabulous piece of poetry - one of the best I've ever read about the poet's mystique and you captured it with your always brilliant creative mind .

      Sending you sincere warmest wishes to you from Colin and his cats at lake erie time canada 1:20am

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      This is such a lovely compliment! I am so glad that you liked the piece! Thanks as always for your encouragement and support! Say hi to the cats for me!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      what a clever way of looking at it.. lol great piece :)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Frank! And thank you again for stopping by!

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      This is by faaaaaaaaar one of the most clever and creative poems I've ever read! Part of the sheer beauty is you said so much in such few words! 'I loosened the tourniquet...' Oh, that got me... I think the writers, at any level, gets this... SO UP, awesome and beautiful!

      Cat

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks very much Cat! You say a lot in a few words as well, thank you for the visit and the enthusiasm!

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      Ah don't mention it ;-) ... hey, that's funny, most people say I talk a lot but don't say anything :D

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      When every word and line can create such an impact, one has achieved something really special. I think you achieved something really special with this poem. Expertly done!

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Kim! It's wonderful to read your kind words! I think that this poem fell out of my head as a gift from my muse! I am so appreciative that you read and stopped by!

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      dreamseeker2 3 years ago

      Interesting spin and take on writing poetry. I like it!! : ) Thanks for sharing it! Voted it up!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks for the votes and the comments! I am so grateful!

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      Nimra Aijaz 3 years ago from Steel Town

      This is so beautiful, so out-of-the-box concept, so touchy! I love the way you depicted such a constant yet ignored part of the poet's "gallery"! :) Even i myself feel sorry for the pieces that were written with so emotion so fervor but left undone, wishing they had a life of their own rather than getting lost in the pool of words in a new poem.

      Lovely- one of my favourite this poetry is!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you again! I am glad that you can relate to this....I thought I was the only one! And thank you for your enthusiasm!

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      Sunny River 3 years ago from A Place Without A Name which resides somewhere between Fantasy and Belief, just north of Reality

      I do this exact same thing. Great poem. :)

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks sunny! Makes me feel less crazy!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Loved, loved this!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Audrey! I appreciate you stopping by!

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      Word 3 years ago from Chicago

      Hello there Theatre girl. What a wonderful poem of sacrifice. I loved it!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      So glad that you enjoyed it! I am honored by your compliments!

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      Naomi Novella 3 years ago from New York, New York

      This poem was fun! I can relate, keeping those words and tidbits around for later use like keeping scraps of fabric for a quilt. Great writing!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      This is a favorite of mine, so I am thrilled that you enjoyed! Thanks for the visit and the follow....welcome and feel free to return!

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      Bill Holland 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

      This is so very clever.....this just made my top ten list of favorite poems. I love how much you said with so few words. You speak for all writers with this one. Lovely work!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Billy, you are once again, too kind! But I am thrilled that you enjoyed this! It is a wonderful battle that we all fight...and one we cannot truly leave or finish. I am so glad that this spoke to you. Thank you for the visit and your generous words! Blessings to you and yours.

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      Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

      Brilliant and voted up.

      Here's wishing you a great day.

      Eddy.

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks Eddy. This is one of my favorites. I am so pleased that you thought it well done!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Just one of your best!

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      Rebecca Mealey 3 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

      Brilliant! I love the personification that you gave your "unused' work!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Audrey! I always am so honored by your visits! And your comment is generous as always. Glad that you liked this. Blessings to you.

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      This is a poem that I enjoyed writing very much. I am honored by your visit and comment! Thank you!

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks as well for the two shares Audrey! I always appreciate it!

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