ArtsAutosBooksBusinessEducationEntertainmentFamilyFashionFoodGamesGenderHealthHolidaysHomeHubPagesPersonal FinancePetsPoliticsReligionSportsTechnologyTravel

Copy 18 using Louis Dudek 'When You Die of All Our Loves' as a guide...

Updated on April 22, 2018
snakeslane profile image

Verlie Burroughs is a west coast writer from Vancouver Island.

Source

April is Poetry Month

I'm so caught up in poetry, I'm living it this month. So far I've managed to write one a day. This poem is from Day 18. I wrote it from a prompt in a challenge I'm doing.

I took a poem written and translated by Louis Dudek, and used it as a guide to write my own poem.

The poem I picked was entirely random, taken from one of my High school poetry text books; Poetry of Our Time edited by Louis Dudek.

My Dudek

Leave me a sign before you go away
Though there is no beauty or truth in us
Or in the lies we tell, better not to ask why
If none of me remains with you
In the end we die of love
You may tell them eventually
And you may die in ecstasy
It will remain a mystery
All those roads we travelled
far from ruined joy
The key has been my undoing
And you may die of love
I wait for a sign of your gentle leaving
I'll be gone too as I take my turn at ending
We are books, we die of love
I ask only if I may, that you go easy
And feel joy when you hear this song
In years along it will remind you of that time
You nearly died of love
A flower blossoms, the scent is sweet
It hurts me, I stumble
I have only paper and ink
I will plant a garden when you die of love.

Daily Prompt Day 18 - http://www.napowrimo.net/

"First, find a poem in a book or magazine (ideally one you are not familiar with). Use a piece of paper to cover over everything but the last line. Now write a line of your own that completes the thought of that single line you can see, or otherwise responds to it. Now move your piece of paper up to uncover the second-to-last line of your source poem, and write the second line of your new poem to complete/respond to this second-to-last line. Keep going, uncovering and writing, until you get to the first line of your source poem, which you will complete/respond to as the last line of your new poem. It might not be a finished draft, but hopefully it at least contains the seeds of one."

When You Die of All Our Loves (Translation by Louis Dudek)

When you die of all our loves

I shall go and plant in the garden
A flower to bloom some fine morning
Half of metal and half of paper
To hurt my foot just a trifle
So you may die a death most sweet
That a flower might blossom
When you die of all our loves
I shall make in fashion of that time
A song to be sung for seven years
You will hear it, you will learn it
And your lips will thank me for it
And you will die a death most easy
So that I may do so
When you die of all our loves
I shall make of it two beautiful books
That they may serve you as a tomb
And I shall lie there in my turn
For I shall die on that same day
O may you die a death most gentle
In waiting for them
When you die of all our loves
I shall go and hang myself with the key
From the hasp of all our ruined joys
And the many roads conquered by us
Though no one will ever know by whom
And you may die a death most exquisite
So that I may tell them
When you die of all our loves
If too little remains with you
Then do not ask me why
In all the falsehoods that would ensue
We would be neither beautiful nor true
But you may die a death most gay
So that I might follow you

© 2018 Verlie Burroughs

Comments

    0 of 8192 characters used
    Post Comment

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      5 months ago from Canada

      Genna, thank you for your reading, and your lovely comment.

      The Napowrimo 30 poems in 30-days journey has really stretched me as a writer, and I needed that.

    • Genna East profile image

      Genna East 

      5 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      How very clever, beautiful and imaginative. And what cool challenges in the Napowrimo 30 poems in 30-days journey. "Take the path less traveled" is so appropriate. You are a consummate artist of words, Verlie, who travels that path. One of the best. :-)

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      6 months ago from Canada

      Peg, your comment is most appreciated, only a few days left of poetry month, the daily prompts bring out something different every time. Thanks so much.

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      6 months ago from Canada

      Thank you Paula, thanks for reading twice :)

    • PegCole17 profile image

      Peg Cole 

      6 months ago from Dallas, Texas

      I LOVE your Dudek and your described method for creating a new poem is intriguing and masterful.

      These are among my favorite lines:

      "I ask only if I may, that you go easy

      And feel joy when you hear this song."

    • fpherj48 profile image

      Paula 

      6 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Verlie....There's something very moving and intense that comes from your magic pen. I read through this once and then again......so I can be certain, the power lingers.....

      Peace, Paula

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      6 months ago from Canada

      Well that's encouraging, thank you so much. I will see what I can come up with for you dear reader.

    • marcoujor profile image

      Maria Jordan 

      6 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

      LOL... novel, poetry, both...?!!! As long as you are writing it, I'll be at the head of the sales line, dear V :)

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      6 months ago from Canada

      Hi Maria, you're so sweet, I can always feel the love when you're around. A book! What a novel idea :)

    • marcoujor profile image

      Maria Jordan 

      6 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

      No offense to Mr. Dudek but I am drawn to your interpretation, dear V.

      I do hope you plan to compile this collection - it would be wonderful to have a volume of your poetry to treasure, as I do you. Love, Maria

    • snakeslane profile imageAUTHOR

      Verlie Burroughs 

      6 months ago from Canada

      Mike, thank you so much. I don't know what I do without you! :)

      I really enjoyed writing this poem. It is so different from my usual, and seemed like a really good writing exercise. I love both poems now.

    • mckbirdbks profile image

      mckbirdbks 

      6 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Verlie - Your poem is wonderful. It carries the sense of the mystery in the world and love, now just out of grasp. All you 'have is pen and ink,' but they are tools that you have mastered.

    working

    This website uses cookies

    As a user in the EEA, your approval is needed on a few things. To provide a better website experience, hubpages.com uses cookies (and other similar technologies) and may collect, process, and share personal data. Please choose which areas of our service you consent to our doing so.

    For more information on managing or withdrawing consents and how we handle data, visit our Privacy Policy at: https://hubpages.com/privacy-policy#gdpr

    Show Details
    Necessary
    HubPages Device IDThis is used to identify particular browsers or devices when the access the service, and is used for security reasons.
    LoginThis is necessary to sign in to the HubPages Service.
    Google RecaptchaThis is used to prevent bots and spam. (Privacy Policy)
    AkismetThis is used to detect comment spam. (Privacy Policy)
    HubPages Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide data on traffic to our website, all personally identifyable data is anonymized. (Privacy Policy)
    HubPages Traffic PixelThis is used to collect data on traffic to articles and other pages on our site. Unless you are signed in to a HubPages account, all personally identifiable information is anonymized.
    Amazon Web ServicesThis is a cloud services platform that we used to host our service. (Privacy Policy)
    CloudflareThis is a cloud CDN service that we use to efficiently deliver files required for our service to operate such as javascript, cascading style sheets, images, and videos. (Privacy Policy)
    Google Hosted LibrariesJavascript software libraries such as jQuery are loaded at endpoints on the googleapis.com or gstatic.com domains, for performance and efficiency reasons. (Privacy Policy)
    Features
    Google Custom SearchThis is feature allows you to search the site. (Privacy Policy)
    Google MapsSome articles have Google Maps embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
    Google ChartsThis is used to display charts and graphs on articles and the author center. (Privacy Policy)
    Google AdSense Host APIThis service allows you to sign up for or associate a Google AdSense account with HubPages, so that you can earn money from ads on your articles. No data is shared unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
    Google YouTubeSome articles have YouTube videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
    VimeoSome articles have Vimeo videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
    PaypalThis is used for a registered author who enrolls in the HubPages Earnings program and requests to be paid via PayPal. No data is shared with Paypal unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
    Facebook LoginYou can use this to streamline signing up for, or signing in to your Hubpages account. No data is shared with Facebook unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
    MavenThis supports the Maven widget and search functionality. (Privacy Policy)
    Marketing
    Google AdSenseThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Google DoubleClickGoogle provides ad serving technology and runs an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Index ExchangeThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    SovrnThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Facebook AdsThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Amazon Unified Ad MarketplaceThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    AppNexusThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    OpenxThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Rubicon ProjectThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    TripleLiftThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
    Say MediaWe partner with Say Media to deliver ad campaigns on our sites. (Privacy Policy)
    Remarketing PixelsWe may use remarketing pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to advertise the HubPages Service to people that have visited our sites.
    Conversion Tracking PixelsWe may use conversion tracking pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to identify when an advertisement has successfully resulted in the desired action, such as signing up for the HubPages Service or publishing an article on the HubPages Service.
    Statistics
    Author Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide traffic data and reports to the authors of articles on the HubPages Service. (Privacy Policy)
    ComscoreComScore is a media measurement and analytics company providing marketing data and analytics to enterprises, media and advertising agencies, and publishers. Non-consent will result in ComScore only processing obfuscated personal data. (Privacy Policy)
    Amazon Tracking PixelSome articles display amazon products as part of the Amazon Affiliate program, this pixel provides traffic statistics for those products (Privacy Policy)