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Cracked/ The Minds Jagged Edges

Updated on July 26, 2013
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Is this the direction

my face

has taken;

the flight of

a murder of crows

webbing from the corner

of my eyes,

or is this looking glass

crass reflection

cracked

jagged edges

leading my mind

back there

behind

into the shadows

the webbed corners

and dimmed faded

wall papers

plastered over

screaming ghosts

of past

imaginations

that didn’t last

ruminations

that ran wailing

at the first sound

of booted feet

echoing up

from long buried depths

steps leaving

purple bruised prints

on my ground

and seasoning

of bitterness

over my foundation

of crumbling confidence

in a smooth mirrored

reality?



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      Vincent Moore 3 years ago

      Wow and wow again, this is powerful writing my poet. It takes me back into some of my past reflections, your play on words, twisted and layered here were simply brilliant. "The flight of a murder of crows webbing from the corners of my eyes." simply excellent! You grab the readers attention with every poem you pen and that my friend as we both know is the mark of a true poet, I admire your work and I am moved by it and that too is a sign, MOVING your reader. Bravo, I applaud you, vote WAY UP, tweeted and shared. I have a few reflections from mirrors I may add to the Hubs, one is "The Man in the Mirror...keep writing Wayne your amazing my friend.

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      Shauna L Bowling 3 years ago from Central Florida

      Growing old isn't always graceful. If only our bodies would stay as young as our minds!

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Vincent. I think I have read 'The Man In The Mirror' on your website, but will certainly be looking forward to it again.

      I appreciate your support and great feedback. Tipping my glass to you!

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      Martin Kloess 3 years ago from San Francisco

      As a Mason (old men) I'm am very familiar with this. Good work. thank you

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      Tony DeLorger 3 years ago from Adelaide, South Australia

      Some great imagery Wayne, and some very original phrases- which a feat in itself. Excellent write with powerful language. Credit to you my friend; a great poem.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Sha. I worry about my mind sometimes more than I do my body. I

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      Cat 3 years ago from New York

      Oh Wayne, my chest hurts! I think this might be a little above my intelligence level, but this, sadly, I understand 'seasoning of bitterness over my foundation of crumbling confidence'

      'Course, this mustn't be a true reflection for you, 'cause you're the bomb! :D

      Huggies,

      Cat

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      bizarrett81 3 years ago from Maine

      Wow, what can I say really? No words could match this. I am so proud that you are my father. Voted up

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      cleaner3 3 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      love the imagery and wordplay ..!

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Martin.

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      Live To Write 3 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      A very profound read... you are a master of this style of poetry it seems... I am very happy to have you as a member of Poetry's Place

      and glad to read you again...Wow!!!

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you very much Tony.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Cat. I'm sure its not your intelligence that's in question, but rather the madness of trying to follow my mind through its wormhole. :-)

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      Nellieanna Hay 3 years ago from TEXAS

      I love the pulsation of rhyming or related similar-sound words that impatiently occur throughout this piece, not willing to wait around for ends of lines to speak up. Sprinkling the rhymes throughout is a favorite iconoclastic means of mine. The unexpected, but in this case of yours, it makes the 'beat' of the message all the more jagged. So many of your words and images suggest much more than merely surface: 'screaming ghosts', 'booted feet', 'purple bruised prints' - and ultimately: 'crumbled confidence'. This is all so powerful, Wayne, while remaining simple and almost subdued. If it's your mind's 'wormhole' - it's potent and probably a healthy catharsis. If it's all super- creativity, you're an even more amazing creative writer. Either way - not to be curbed! You must not even try to! What have we to offer but who we are?

      Good work!

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      Cat 3 years ago from New York

      Yes, I must say, Nellienna took the words right out of my mouth :D

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Beth, I am proud of you! It is you who has been the biggest inspiration for me being here.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you cleaner.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Lorenzo.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Dear Nellieanna. I adore you and your wonderful feedback. I think you get me, and my writing. "catharsis" is pretty much right on. I'm sure I would have the gift of art regardless of my upbringing, but having it as an outlet has been a god-send. I usually put on some Chopin, Leonard Cohen, or Lucinda Williams, and then move back and forth between my easel and my keyboard. For breaks I either attack the piano, my harmonicas or my garden. ( And of course there's always those hot buttered buns and scratching the dogs ass!) Ah, what a life. You know, yesterday I had the most wonderful time; I cleaned my bathroom! : )

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Cat, are you saying Nellieanna plagiarized you? I think it's just great minds thinking alike! : )

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      Nellieanna Hay 3 years ago from TEXAS

      Wayne, what a marvelously creative setting you describe! I love Chopin and Leonard Cohen, but admit that I don't know Lucinda Williams (yet).

      Your mixture of the sublime and the mundane is wonderful. I understand the term 'god-send' when it comes to expressing oneself creatively, - from art to poetry to music to housework. Everything one does with verve is both creative and restorative, I think. (Cleaning the bathroom has the advantage of a limited size easel!)

      Oh, dear? Can one plagiarize unsaid words still formulating in someone's mind? Or is it an attempt at claiming them by or for the person who may have thought, but had not expressed them? Or is it a literary crime to take the (unsaid) words out of someone's mouth. Just askin' . . . . I enter these dangerous literary talent-filled waters late, having been a reclusive writer for most of my years, where there were no such dangers! ;-)

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      Lurana Brown 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Intriguing and provocative reflections. Well-written! ~Lurana

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      An intriguing and mysterious journey through life. Best we can do is not let age matter.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Lurana.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Rasma.

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Wayne,

      You are indeed a master at this craft. I wish that I could produce such excellent work as quickly as you. I agree with all of the above comments. I am such a fan of stream of consciousness writing, and you sir are the rock star.

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Deb Hirt 3 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      The eerie picture goes well with the transfixed and aching piece of poetry that takes us beyond the realm of oblivion. Superb!

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you very much, Kim. I appreciate the visit.

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      epigramman 3 years ago

      I thought this was the poem with the 'F' word, lol , lol , someone tipped me off that you have a f word going in one of your pages , is that right?

      Well I've known for some time now , as a man who was lucky enough in this lifetime, to have met someone like you Sir Wayne , that as a writer/poet - and a good hub friend - you are fookin' fantastic.

      So there, ya got 2 f words from me - lol

      lake erie time 5:54pm and lighting up my FB page with this poetic beauty to let all of my friends know I have exquisite taste.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Deb. Your visits and comment man a lot.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Lol. Hello Colin. yeah I do have a recent piece with the big 4 letter word in it. I was kind of expecting to have it denied, but it became featured in less than 24 hours, so I guess it is okay. Which is a great relief, because I think that as a poet, you really need some freedom to express certain pieces. I can understand them being cautious against sheer profanity just for the profanity's sake. I was actually more worried about their response to "Fly's Rats and The Daily News" but again, within 24 hours it was featured. I think our friendly moderators are a little more open minded than some give them credit for.

      I also meant to ask, since I'm really not sure of the actual rule, is it against rules for that word to be used? I know I have seen it before, especially in short stories.

      Well any way; I'm just appreciative that you find my work interesting enough to browse. It is good to have you as a friend and someone I can get some good feedback from. Thank you bunches Sir Epi.

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      epigramman 3 years ago

      .....well I've been holding back on that fookin' word myself, lol.

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      Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana

      Its a mirrored reality my friend, you are only as old as you feel. and those crows are just taking a nap. after a good sleep they will be bright and energetic as ever and ready to take on the day. This poem is a great way to describe aging and a crumbling of self really, a look back at our past ghosts and regrets, but also our good memories and experiences and how far we have come and all that we have made it through. Life is a journey and you are just reaching the peak of it. There's still more to come.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Nikki. And you are correct; it is all about perspective!

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