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Dandelions Disappear at Night

Updated on April 28, 2011

In the full light of day

Every weed

Every buzzing creature

Is out under the sun

Invading space

Choking thriving plants

Scaring the children

Following them and us

In this blistering heat


In the full moon light

Cool, misty breezes

Stillness, silence

Except for soft night sounds

Of predators that hide in the shadows

Now, looking across the same grassy field

The dandelions disappear at night

But I know they are still there.

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ....absolutely perfect Erin - probably my favorite 'poem' by you for obvious reasons - it's dark, it's creepy, it's insidious, it's so you !!!!!!! and so beautifully written - this leaves me breathless - you are a marvel and I will come back to read your short story too but right now I have one doozy of a head cold so I am feeling a bit burnt out and depressed - I really need to spend a quiet night with Erin - now that would be the right medicine - good to hook up with you again - and yes I'll be back - your short stories are always top of the line .....

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Good to see you again Epi! So sorry to hear you are ill! I know you will be back again feeling better in no time! My short story will be there...its still ongoing, But at least I put the deadline on this one in the first chapter!

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      Abie Taylor 6 years ago from Wakefield, United Kingdom

      Beautiful Erin!!! loved the poem, just perrrrrrfect. rated up, awesome and beautiful xx

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      thanks so much Abie! Glad you loved it!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 6 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Erin, I've spent the day uprooting dendelions in my flower garden and swatting pesky buzzing creatures. You brought them to life as only you can...Beautiful

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      kallini2010 6 years ago from Toronto, Canada

      Dandelions...are such strange creatures - first they resemble the sun and we used to make crowns of them when we were children and our hands were all dirty...

      They can be eaten, I think they have nutritional value (something about health, I don't remember).

      but then they form those little men with parachutes (seeds) which fly away - skydiving - taking a seed somewhere exploring...

      A story told from a dandelion perspective...

      Up/awesome.

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      Denise Handlon 6 years ago from North Carolina

      Very cool, Erin-dark and mysteriously lurking. Nice work.

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      Kathi 6 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

      They will still be there when you wake up in the morn

      and the bugs will be back and the crack of dawn

      The children will run and cry

      And the predators will be ready

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Thank you all, Ruby, Svetlana, Denise, Kathi,

      this one just came to me, but how true indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting! Brightest Blessings!

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      Doug Turner Jr. 6 years ago

      I like this. Nice and clean. The dandelions disappearing at night is an awesome metaphor for something. I haven't figured out what, but I'm intrigued nonetheless.

      Enjoyed this, peace.

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      thanks Doug. I used it as a metaphor for predators or anything quickly or slowly threatening and eroding innocence or life. Weeds I guess you could say...as they are...yet they curl up and hide so you can´t see them at night, but reappear and follow the sun like beautiful flowers, attractive flowers with nasty roots by day. I guess it could be lots of things really...all up to the reader...guess that´s why its short and clean. I think my comment is longer! A friend inspired this. Peace!

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      poetvix 6 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Hats off to you! This is a marvel. The symbolism is rich, the composition tight, lean and the entirety conveys such feeling. I feel the need to look over my shoulder! Thank you for a really wonderful piece.

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      thanks so much! tight and lean...i don't write em that way often!!Thanks so much for your comments and brightest of blessings to you.

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      epigramman 6 years ago

      ..I will come back to your final chapters of Catherine Blaque - in my current state of mind I need focus and concentration - but I must say this is an absolute masterpiece by you and one of my favorites - and well worth the re-visit - and just to say - lol - wish I had wrote this one - you're just hubawesome Erin LeFey!!!

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      Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland

      Epi, I completely understand - the Catherine Blaque chronicles are quite demanding I think, you have to be in a strong frame of mind to read them. Luckily I didn't to write them!

      This piece does have and Epi-esque quality to it, and I can only say, if I have learned anything from reading your hubs, then I've learned from a master! Thank you, my friend!

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      jami l. pereira 5 years ago

      Aww I Love dandelions :) Voted up and beautiful :)

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      Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland

      Thanks for the votes Jami. This is one of my favorites, too.

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