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Deep Is The Well

Updated on July 24, 2013
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I wrote this poem a couple of years ago after receiving some bad news about a very dear friend. After reading the last line you might be surprised to know that this followed a prayer. Like I told a preacher a couple of months ago...I believe in god in my own way, and I talk to god in my own way. Sometimes I pray to him, and sometimes...well, let's just say, we have words! You may not agree with that philosophy, but if you espouse to be a believer then you know that it is not really your place to judge in the first place.

Drink water out of thine own cistern, and running water out of thine own well. Proverbs 5:15

Sleep well

weep well

go to sleep

well

go to the deep

the deep well

as often as possible

bring back the water

jostling and

gleaming.

God did not plan on consciousness

developing

so well

well

tell him our

pail is full

and he can

go to Hell

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thanks a bunch, Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Your poerty does go for the juggler..LOL I love the title too so macabre...

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Lurana. I appreciate your kind words, and when I get a little time I will have to check out some of your work.

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      I like this a lot. The well imagery is just perfect---deeper than we can reach, but we each draw only a bucketful of holy water at a time. It is not for me to judge another's bucket or question how that water tastes to them...

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Beth!

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      Beth Beardall 4 years ago

      Well done, Wayne. I love the the play on the word 'well.' I, too, was shocked at the ending, but can understand where it is coming from.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Colin: Thank you again. Canada is a long way away for me, but I could imagine it would be enjoyable to sit down and share a cup of joe or a pint of ale with you.

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      ...well I am learning from you too my friend and I love the spiritual nature of your words here and even the last slightly irreverent line.

      I love black gospel and I also enjoy pirate ballads/sea shantys and I think it's Leadbelly who has a song called Ain't goin' down to the well no more (there's a wonderful version of it by Marianne Faithful)

      I love how you mix up your moods and theme, poetically speaking.

      It shows you to be well versed and eclectic with your writing .

      Hubbravo from the epi-man at lake erie time canada 7:15pm

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you for stopping by Gypsy. I appreciate the compliment.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Well when pails are full like a heart that is full things tend to spill over. I know that there are times when people get mighty angry at God. I guess everyone expresses it in their own way. Powerful.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Amy. I appreciate your feedback.

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      ExoticHippieQueen 4 years ago

      Well, Wayne, that really was a surprise ending. I don't know if I would tell the Creator of Alpha and Omega to go to hell, but that certainly is your choice to make, even if it is tongue in cheek! Wonderful poem.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you very much, HL.

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      HLPhoenix 4 years ago

      I love both the poem and the introduction...

      "God did not plan on consciousness

      developing

      So well"

      I love this stansa... brilliant.

      I too always communicate with god directly... Old Testiment folk did it and I'm a great believer that there is less chance the message will get messed up than if it is passed on through other emissaries. Sometimes we disagree.

      I do agree with Leslie that if one gets credit for the good they have to be prepared to be critized for the bad.

      Great job.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Leslie. I appreciate your candidness and your compliments. Stop by any time!

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      i'm not a believer..there are those who judge that and advise me i'll wind up in a hell that..i do not believe in..(oops..)

      it's a catch 22, but - i must tell you that i respect your courage in writing this..

      i have run into a few who espouse their (blind) 'faith' while judging anything that moves (against their beliefs anyway..)..

      i appreciate a free thinker and i respect (sometimes envy) people's right to their faith..

      i don't appreciate indoctrinated kool-aid drinkers who would never be able to say what you have said so well..

      life's not always fair - if god is everything then - who better to blame as well as to worship?

      so sorry about your friend...

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Isaac. And respect to you as well my friend.

      Nellieanna (I love that name.) After reading your work last night for the first time I am so glad to see that you have stopped by. Thank you for the lovely compliment.

      Martin: I'm glad you saw that. When I wrote it my mind was going in a hundred directions and it was almost more of a rant than a poem when I started. I wasn't sure how it would be perceived by another, but for me it had layers of meaning. Thank you again!

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Thank you for this. This can be taken in a number of underlying ways.

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      Nellieanna Hay 4 years ago from TEXAS

      I recognize a kindred spirit! Amazing!

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      TDM 4 years ago from Welcome to my beautiful world, where magic is no longer a myth.

      you did a good job, and very good point. with respect to you.

      I. White

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      That was a very moving scene you referenced. And an excellent movie. We will never understand his way. Life is a mystery and it's because we are human that it can become so frustrating. Hey, even Jesus turned over a few tables in his day!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, x. my thoughts are with you and your friend.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Hey, Beth, As long as we are entertaining ourselves, that is all that matters sometimes. "Roses are red, violets are blue, I'm schizophrenic, and so am I"

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      We all get angry with God sooner or later, but He never stops loving us.

      A scene out of Open Range had two cowboys angry with God over the loss of a gentle giant friend and an innocent dog. We don't understand His way at all.

      Excellent Hub, Wayne!

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      I like this very much. A very good old friend of mine will undergo a bone marrow transplant next week. I hve mixed feelings, angry that this should happen to a good person, grateful that at his age, they will try the transplant.

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      Beth37 4 years ago

      I thought about saying something like "Gee her buckets sure are full aren't they?" Then ppl would wonder how you knew I was gonna say that before I said it... but then I realized it would be one of those awkward jokes that only I thought was funny.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Beth37: It took me a minute to figure out what you were talking about. I was answering bizarrett when I commented to "Beth". There's always room for two Beth's though!

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      Beth37 4 years ago

      I guess you weren't talking to me.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      bravewarrior: Sounds like you understand all too well. I've learned that an opinion given on this subject can be very touchy, that's why I opened the Hub with the explanation. It wasn't an apology, just me pointing out that the last line was a poets vent following a heart to heart with the Heart of the universe!

      thost: I understand! It's like taking the good with the bad. Yes, there will be those days when they are full...that's when it's time to shoulder up!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Yes they are, Beth. Spilling over.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thanks for the kind words, James. And no need for an apology. I welcome honest feedback. I heard it said once that if a child was never angry at their parent then the parent was not doing their job. I used "God" because it was indeed him that I was referring to in a poetic form of one of my "talks" with him. He understands, and that's all that is important.

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      thost 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

      Great poem, my pails are full... sometimes. Vote up.

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      Shauna L Bowling 4 years ago from Central Florida

      We all get angry with God from time to time, Wayne. It's perfectly OK and human to do so. I, like you, talk to God. I don't recite prayers and I don't go to church. I talk to Him just as I would anyone else. I think He appreciates that more than my doing something I don't want to do. If God is omnipotent, then it doesn't matter where you are when you feel like striking up a conversation!

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      bizarrett81 4 years ago from Maine

      Awesome and powerful... our pails certainly are full...

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Poignant and well-construct.I am sorry for what happened to your dear friend.If only you could change God to god ,poem will be religiously acceptable.I am sorry if I m saying something not good:)

      Many blessings to you.