I've been in the mountains for several days with my family enjoying the holiday, I've had very little internet access but I've been writing like a fiend. Revising old poems, writing fresh ones, preparing blog post. One of the poems I revised was one called Weed Killer. Read it here:
If you like this poem
To be honest, I have never liked it. I like the message, I like what i was trying to say but I hate the way i said it. I finally revised it in a way that says everything I want it to say and, amazingly, I made a longish (for me) poem into a very brief one (18-19 syllables, depending on dialect:-)). I hope you like the changes. Even if you don't, I do :-)
(Weed Killer Revisited)
I am a garden
riddled with weeds
entangling the stifled flowers.
all rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price. Nov. 24th, 2011