Five Thoughts in 85 syllables
A Brief History of the Haiku
The Haiku is an ancient form of poetry that originated with Buddhist monks in Japan. They are generally 17 syllables and 2-4 lines. The subjects are primarily around nature with images that contradict or juxtapose one another. The traditional format for the poem is this:
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables
Some American poets, like the late Allen Ginsberg, have written haiku's in seventeen syllable, single line sentences. That's what I've done here. These are more thoughts then poems, but they're all 17 syllables, so, with a loose interpretation, they're haiku's. Enjoy!
Five Thoughts, 85 syllables
I wave my finger at you because I’m angry that you are driving so slow.
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Enjoying fresh oranges, the goat doesn’t see the wolf pack looming.
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Skin for fish and scales for man, how do you like a hook in your throat?
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With no rhythm, the man is dancing without shame, because he loves her.
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If paper comes from trees and trees come from God, then where does God come from?
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all rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price, November 3rd, 2011.
Thanks for Reading.
PDXKaraokeGuy, also known as Justin W. Price, is an author with Sweatshoppe Publications, which will soon re-release his poetry collection, Digging to China. Additionally, the managing editor at eFiction horror and The New Bridge online newspaper. Husband to Andrea, father to two dogs. writer.poet.baseball fan. tattooed. He is am amateur theologian with a rabid sweet tooth. He resides in a suburb of Portland, Oregon.He has a poetry book available for Amazon Kindle, and also maintains a blog, FirstBlog. His work has been featured in the Crisis Chronicles, efiction Magazine, The Hellroaring Review, the Bellwether Review, eFiction Humor, and the Rusty Nail. Please visit his profile page for more information. Thanks!
More of My Haikus:
- Five Haikus
fun with Haikus
Comments
AUTHORThanks so much, Kimmie. Send me a link to some of yours, if you have any :-)
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Audrey.... I had fun with these. I'll have to work on them again and make some more!
Hi Justin,
I love Haiku's, my favorite in fact! Thank you for sharing your creative poetry. I think I like the fish one best!
Merry Christmas my dear and talented friend,
Sunnie
Glad to see this--as you know, I enjoy the shorter forms!
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Thanks Marcy. I'm glad you enjoyed my work. Makes it eeasier to share it :-)
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Thank you, Echoe. I'm pleased that you enjoyed this!
Haiku is a great art form. These are fun - interesting hub! Thanks for letting us see your work here.
That was nice, very entertaining
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Hawkesdream, so pleased I inspired you. I'm glad you liked these. Thanks for stopping by and reading.
The imagery that you have created with these haikus is amazing. I have never tried writing them, but I will. You have inspired me.
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Oh, thanks Tammy. I'd forgotten about this one. It was fun for me to read it again!
This is one of your most creative ones. I like this poem.
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Thanks, LInda. That's very important to me!
I truly like the way you think! Your thoughts are unique:)
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I agree, Mark. I like that it forces you to be brief and concise!
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Victoria, I appreciate the share. I'm glad you like this!
I loved it haikus always offer the deepest meanings. So much to think about. Thank you so much!
Wonderfully creative! You create a great description in your 17 syllables. Love this! Voted interesting, funny, awesome, beautiful, and up, of course. Sharing it with others, too!
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Danger, there are so many great poetical forms we need to experiment with. What i like about Haiku is it forces you to be concise!
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Cyndi, they were. Certainly. And I'm pleased that you enjoyed reading these!
great work. i need to try this out. i forgot about haikus. thanks for the reminder
Those must have been fun for you to write. They were great fun to read.
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Seek N Find- let me know when you've completed that list. I'd love to read what you create!
Sunnie- thanks so much!
Wonderful once again..I loved them..Thank you!
Sunnie
You've just added another topic to my "to write about" list. Thanks and great job. :-)
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Thanks Tilt. I'm glad you found this useful!
So much said in so few words. Again you educated! Often we don't see the wolf pack coming either. Voted up.
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That's a great analogy, Penny. Great comment!
Kinda leaves you hanging...like there is more to be said...kinda like a tear struggling to free itself. Very interesting. Thanks
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Shanaya, I like Haiku because it forces you to be brief, yet show very strong images. You should give it a shot.
Jha, Let me know when they're done. I'd love to read them!
I hopefully will have a few Haikus to share soon, I have been working on some about my family...Thank You for sharing!
Hello PDXKaraoke! I didn't know very much about 'Haiku Poetry' but I enjoyed your Hub. Will surely wanna know more about this. Thanks for sharing with us.
voted up, interesting.
with lots of Respect
from SHANAYA:)
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Thanks for saying so Carlon. These are not traditional haiku's. the key is finding the right words. Since you're stuck to a rigid structure, each word counts. Give it a whirl! I'd like to see them!
I remember studying Haikus in school and being so very unskillful and creating one. You however have no problem. Great job. Smile!
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Thanks Sue, and it's so true!
"With no rhythm, the man is dancing without shame, because he loves her."
This one is my favourite.
Voted up and awesome
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Thanksd for taking the time to read, Flora. It's funny where that thought came up, because I'm a pretty carnivorous person
I enjoy Haiku poetry. As for the thoughts you share, the third one is brutal. How indeed?
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@ Mar and Gypsy: Thanks for the visits and the comments!
@ Debby: Thanks! I'll keep up the good work if you keep appreciated it. Deal?
@Ardie: absolutely. There's no need to be self defeating. Do it. There's no way of knowing you can do it until you do it.
@ Cogerson, I agree. It's great to be entertained and informed!
Very nicely done...great thoughts as well as a great hub that explains some of the principles of poetry....hubs like this are why I like HubPages so much....entertaining and educational all at once.
Thanks for the encouragement! I will indeed try my own and then just hold it close. Or burn it if its REALLY bad ;)
Hello Justin. I also have that same problem of lexiadys and it appears out of nowhere when we are stressed. Keep up the good wroks.
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Debby, I think you are correct and I corrected my blog. I think I was suffering from a mild case of lysdexia :-) Thanks for stopping by.
@ Ardie: Thanks for saying so, but why not dare? Who knows what could happen. NO one has to see it, and it's a fun way to force yourself to concise, visual images.
This was so much fun to read - but I'd never dare to write one of my own :) You are so talented!
My dear Justin ~ I may be wrong but the Haiku that I have been writing for so many years is in the form of 5-7-5 syllables for each line. Is this a form of which I am not aware? Blessings, Debby
Love that crazy cadence! Voted UP & FAB, mar.
Enjoyed readin this. I love haikus.
I've never really understood haikus (how could I make that word plural?) I think I understand, now. Thanks.
PDXKaraokeGuy: What a thoughtful update to an ancient form: a haiku made up of a series of haikus! The thoughts build on each other to a philosophical crescendo, in the rhythm of which the fourth is so endearing.
Thank you,
Derdriu
I love haikus and I have done couple of haikus on hubpages. Thanks for sharing these beautiful compositions.
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