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Finally He Understood

Updated on September 7, 2013


During the darkest hours of the night,

he saw the woman in white,

at that moment,

the moon lit up the skies,

the woman’s eyes followed his eyes,

how red were her pupils,

and how the hand which clutched

her shawl at her breast trembled,

he stared, then glared,

her face would glow,

her black hair would flow,

he pressed closer until

he was almost at the threshold,

the air was cold,

and the moon looked higher,

as distorted shadows appeared

by the fireplace fire,

he looked inside,

as she opened the door wide,

her skin was bright,

as her face gleamed in the fire light,

in the middle of the room

there was a black coffin,

she smiled and her face softened,

he didn’t move another inch,

even if he could,

the fragrance of burning wood

filled the air,

sharp fear enveloped him,

as he just stood there,

the coffin near,

his eyes glassy and red,

finally he understood,

he wasn’t living, he was dead.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      ALUR 5 years ago from USA

      I like this and the way you invoke the sultry aspect of death. I write like this often but am misunderstood at times.

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      Dim Flaxenwick 5 years ago from Great Britain

      WOW!!! Great poem, dark is good......

      Voted up and awesome

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Alur for your wonderful comment and thank you too Dim for leaving footprints on my page :) Frank

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      lol. I think you actually invoke those thoughts at night, where the mood seems right.

      You are the master of thrill, sure i am not the first to say that. You have me cracking up here , it's good no ones at home.

      It's your world .

      When I see anything change I wold know it's for a reason.

      Bless.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Frank Good Morning. another great one. I had to read it twice. first I thought the woman was going to die and then I realized it was the man. I love how you wove the story.. very good.

      Be blessed

      Debbie

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      Another one with a twist at the end, and the filling up of senses with your words just gets better.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Sky thank you for that comment sleep well aftyer this :) LOL Ms Brooks always good to see you around bless you.. and Senoritaa thanks for that vote of confidence.. you rock :) Frank

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      Carolee Samuda 5 years ago from Jamaica

      Frank, you scared me! LOL I loved it though. Good work.

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      mljdgulley354 5 years ago

      Frank I loved they way you held me to the end. He understood at the end. Wow

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting Frank. Another great poem my friend. I wasn't sure what to expect at the ending. Your poetry always has clear vision, compelling even. Awesome work. Hope you doing good and enjoying your day.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Cardisa hope you weren't really scared LOL and the Lyricwriter thank you for stopping by next time bring your tattoos.. and MLJ thank you for your wonderful comment bless you all :)

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Hey, my good friend you are a great writer of poems. Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks writer20 that means alot to me coming from you :) Frank

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Frank, your pretty near unique on the site with the way you tell a story through your poetry. Your also giving our dear friend Epi-man a run for his money with this awesome poem.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      such a great twist in the ending...now i understand too...

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      You would think that he would have gotten suspicious about those red pupils of hers. lol

      Awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Alastar, yeah the only way I can beat Epi is if I put my foot out and tripped him as he was running past..:) LOL Raci you're simply the best,, and Sue.. thanks for coming by my page yet again you're tops in my book Frank

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Wow dark and powerful 'a cert for that up up and awayyy!!!

      Take care my friend.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Eddy bless you

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      he wasn't living he was dead....great ending as I wasn't expecting it. Up and Awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Susan :) Frank

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      H C Palting 5 years ago from East Coast

      I enjoyed the twist at the end. I've never read poetry as interesting and enjoyable as yours.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again express10 for expressing your comments :)

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      shimmering Dawn 5 years ago

      Your poems have great twists. You really create the atmosphere of the poem with your words. Have a blessed day. Shalom!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you shimmering Dawn for your comment :)

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      Theresa Ast 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Hello Frank - this poem was a little bit longer than some of the others and I like that about it. Of course, I was sucked into the atmosphere the images, the darkness... and I didn't see the twist coming at the end at all.

      But even the red pupils clued me in, I wasn't sure what to make of that. Another great poem. You are a master at establishing atmosphere and in telling a story in a very short space.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      phdast that means alot to me coming from you bless you :)

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      When I read she had red eyes I thought it was going to be vampires. Loved the twist at the end, finally he understood, he was about to be crimated.

      Great write. Loved it

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Rosemary50 and baby and the dog that's actually a good idea or would have been..:) thanks for reading

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      Debby Bruck 5 years ago

      Frank ~ mysterious. interesting. spooky. Just a note of thanks for friending me on hubpages. Blessings, Debby

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks for visiting debby.. good to see you again :)

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