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Fired Breath

Updated on October 14, 2014
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Audrey is a poet, classical singer and voice teacher, recovering attorney and licensed psychotherapist.

 Orchids in the Chinese Jue Ju form of poetry
Orchids in the Chinese Jue Ju form of poetry | Source




The blue green hem slowly sinks

eyes closing through languid coolness

lips part, enticing me in

inevitable touch burns, coolness fires.


Jue Ju is one of the oldest of the Chinese patterns and in the 3rd century AD the Jue Ju was very popular. It often carried "suggestively erotic themes".


Line length: 5 words per line
Lines per stanza: 4
Theme: Often suggestive of erotic love
Rhyme scheme: couplets or unrhymed

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Oh, wow, Audrey! This is both suggestive and erotic!!! I learned something new here Jue Ju ---never heard of it. You have written one so magnificently! Stunning photo.

      Voted up ++++ and sharing

      In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Janis Leslie Evans 4 years ago from Washington, DC

      Oooh, erotic indeed. Thank you for that lesson, Audrey. Up and beautiful.

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      Mark G Weller 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      Beautiful words, and a gorgeous photo. Yes it is suggestive also!

      Mark

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      This is such a graceful piece of writing. Peaceful in its presentation.

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      Gustave Kilthau 4 years ago from USA

      Hi Audrey (AudreyHowitt) -

      That which you wrote is art in words, and I like to see such things,

      As to "jue ju" I am insecure. I went to the Internet to learn more. (http://www.poetrymagnumopus.com/index.php?showtopi... That which I found there confused me, a brave learner that I am... There were two"jue ju" poems represented, one from the 9th century by a person named Cheng Hao and the second one by a Judi van Gorder. The Hao poem was both in English and in Chinese and the vanGorder deal was in English only. I did a syllable count in each of the poems. Hao's sported 9-12-9-11 for the 4 lines, and vanGorder's came through with 7-7-6-6.

      I cannot disagree with the counting per your hub, but the examples other than your fine poem gave me the idea that with a jue ju poem, the writer is free to elect whatever he or she wants to put onto the page. The 4-line deal looks to be the correct line count. This Redneck is confused, quite typically, it should be said. :-)

      Gus :-)))

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Beautiful and suggestive it is Audrey. This is very nice!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Gus--I am unfamiliar with the pieces cited--but some of the confusion may be over how the Chinese idioms translate-syllables are important---while we tend to focus on words--but I will look--not that I can do anything to ease your confusion--I will probably just ass to my own--

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      Sunnie Day 4 years ago

      Wow Audry I love this! I may have to give this a try. Simple, elegant, and quite enticing. Thank you.

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Thank you for this beautiful introduction.

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece...naughty but nice!:-))

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      moonfroth 4 years ago

      Audrey -- there are versifiers, end-rhyme players, poetasters, devotional devotees, poets, good poets, damn good poets.........then there's you. The sure, delicate touch, the RIGHTNESS, in this case, of words in delicate, sensual interplay--the slow dance--often the erotic dance--of the jue ju captured perfectly. I'm no expert on this form, but unlike some ancient Asian poetic forms, I understand the poet has a LOT of latitude, demonstrated here brilliantly

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      Snurre 4 years ago

      Beautiful poem! I was unfamiliar with the genre so thank you for introducing it and explaining how it works.

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      You are truly a poet's poet and always put the 'art' back into this literary art form with such grace, beauty and eloquence.

      Sending you warm wishes from cold cold snowy lake erie time ontario canada 1:49pm

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      Catherine Tally 4 years ago from Los Angeles

      Hello Audrey,

      Thank you for sharing your beautiful gift for poetic writing in this Chinese jueju form. I had never heard of it before but see many similarities to my favorite Japanese poetry styles. It is exciting to discover it.! Your "Fired Breath" is exquisite and sensuous. Moonfroth so aptly describes it when she says thay you have captured that "erotic dance" with perfection. Well done!

      All the best,

      Cat :)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow, This is different and i love it, Gotta try it!!!

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Audrey,

      Tasteful and passionate...most beautiful.

      Thank you for the introduction to this style. Voted UP and UABI.

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      Glad to learn another poetry form Audrey! Sensual and erotic. voted up, awesome.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Fantastic. This was so beautiful and awesome. Loved it.

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      yum, yum, i want some! lol.

      beautiful Jue ju, Audrey - i have learned something here today..

      Thank you..

      hub-sharing...

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      Genna East 4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      Audrey;

      Your talents as a poet are beautifully showcased in this delicate yet powerful, Jue Ju form. And the orchid harmonizes with this poem, perfectly. Stunning work. Voted up and sharing.

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Beautiful, Audrey! I am not familiar with Jue Ju, but love your one. I am always learning something new about poetry. Thanks for sharing :)

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      deergha 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

      Jue Ju .....as all above I have learnt new thing here sure. Very erotic indeed and you have done a real passionate job. Thanks for this one. Votes way up and sharing too.

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Audrey, Your Jue Ju is really subtle. Lovely form, enjoyed the juxposition of coolness and fire. Regards, snakeslane

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      Sueswan 4 years ago

      Beautiful and sensuous!

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      prasetio30 4 years ago from malang-indonesia

      Beautiful and how lucky I am to have found this poem this morning. Thanks for share with us. Voted up!

      Prasetio

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      A great new form to try! You did a wonderful job with yours, especially "the suggestive erotic theme." Jamie

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      this was hot Audrey.. no pun intended..:) awesome :)

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Wonderful Audrey;I loved this gem and vote up plus share. Here's wishing you a great day.

      Eddy.

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      Dreamer at heart 4 years ago from Northern California

      Interesting and compelling poetry. Do write and share some more of these creations.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Aww thank you so much Faith reaper!

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      Very interesting form...this was a beautiful piece:-))

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Mark! I hope you are doing well!

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      CrisSp 4 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      Exquisitely burning with passion and creativity. You sing my soul Audrey.

      You have my vote and sharing this lovely piece.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much mcbirdbks!

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      I am unfamiliare with this form of poetry but you have written such an exotic and passionate poem in such an elegant way it is beautiful

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Audrey, I did not know about Jue Ju. Your composition is deep and profound.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you xstatic!!!

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      vespawoolf 4 years ago from Peru, South America

      I've never heard of Jue Ju until reading your Hub. What a beautiful poem, and definitely suggestively erotic. Thank you for educating us so well on poetry.

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      Shining Irish Eyes 4 years ago from Upstate, New York

      You taught me something new this morning as this was a new poetry concept for me. I have learned many different writing styles by reading your hubs.

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      Quotes Lover 4 years ago

      Really fantastic

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      HI Sunnie! Thank you!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Martin! Thank you!!

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      Stacy Harris 4 years ago from Hemet, Ca

      Very interesting... I have never heard of this kind of poetry before! Well done!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you moonfroth!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Snurre!

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      Dianna Mendez 4 years ago

      A very passionate poem. Love the photo post as well.

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      Very passionate, a fantastic piece of poetry, Audrey, God bless.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Wow! What a beautiful piece. Suggestive and erotic. I loved it.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Epiman!! Thank you so much! You are very kind!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Cat! Hope all is well with you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Ruby! Thank you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much marcoujor!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much for reading this one Gypsy Rose Lee!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Leslie! Thank you!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Genna! Thank you so much for reading this one!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you LaThing!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much dgbrh!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you snakeslane!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Sunnie!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much for reading this one prasetio!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Frank! Always great to have you visit!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Eddy!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you starstream!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Valleypoet!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you CrisSp!

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      Rajan Singh Jolly 4 years ago from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar,INDIA.

      Very erotic and telling in effect. I'm always amazed at the different forms of poetry you make us aware about. Today, I've learnt what Jue Ju is. Thanks.

      Voted up, beautiful and awesome.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Rosemary!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Vinaya! Thank you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      And thank you so much for reading it vespawoolf!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you for reading this one shiningirisheyes!

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      Suzanne Ridgeway 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

      Hi Audrey,

      This is new to me so thanks for enlightening me! A beautiful example of Jue Ju poetry and certainly ticks the erotic box and more! Great job. Voted Up, Interesting, Shared ,Pinned.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you!!! I so appreciate your visit Quoteslover!

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      Joanne M Olivieri 4 years ago

      That is so beautiful Audrey and a poetic form I am not familiar with so I learned something new here which I very much enjoy. Voted up

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Aww Thank you barbergirl--how did you get that name anyway?

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much teaches!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you girshpuri!!

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      Suzanne Ridgeway 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

      HiAudrey,

      Fabulous, never heard of this before and your words are truly poetic on a higher level! Shared, Pinned & Voted!

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      Thank you for sharing your passion and your knowledge. As you can see from all the comments most of us had never heard of Jue Ju...what a lovely way to learn of it.

      Voted up, useful, and awesome.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Rajan!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Joanne!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Suzie! Thank you!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much tillsontitan!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Jan --I found a bunch of comments on this poem in my spam folder--so pardon my delay in thanking you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Valleypoet--I found this comment buried in my spam folder--as many of the comments for this piece were--not sure why--but I wanted to thank you!

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      Rolly A Chabot 4 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Audrey... my thoughtful words which takes the reader to think deeply. Very well done... very well done...

      Hugs and Blessings from Canada

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      I so love to read your work. You are the ultimate poet in that you know how to make every word count. Big fan.

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Hi Rolly--thank you for visit!! Thank you so much!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Found this in an odd folder today along with a bunch of other ones on this piece--Funny--Thank you Rajan!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Hi Jamie--found this in a old folder that HP automatically placed your response in --so sorry for the delay in my thanks!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Hi Wayne! Thank you!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Suzie!!

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      Lurana Brown 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Thank you for this introduction to a poetry form that is new to me! The photo is a perfect accompaniment to your captivating words. ~Lurana

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much ocfireflies!

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      Thelma Alberts 3 years ago from Germany

      Beautiful! I´m glad to know about another kind of poetry. Thanks;-)

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Lurana!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much for reading this one Thelma!

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      Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Sorry I missed this, thanks for sharing this. Very interesting!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you for reading it Jackie!

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      Rosemary Sadler 3 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      I missed this one. Learned something new today, interesting that it is 5 words per line rather than the usual syllable count, offers much more freedom of expression.

      You have shared a beautiful example with us, subtly erotic

      Thank you for sharing

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Hi Rosemary! I really like this form--it really allows more freedom of expression--

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      Nell 3 years ago from Netherlands

      spine chilling poetry! It's pretty awesome! :)

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Geniusknight!

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      Sandy Mertens 3 years ago from Wisconsin, USA

      Nice poem. The photo choice goes real good.

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Sandy!!

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      Suzette Walker suzettetaos 3 years ago from Taos, NM

      Beautiful, Audrey. I have never heard of this type of Chinese poem, the Jue Ju. Very well done!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Suzette!

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Very nice Audrey, especially to touch on the erotic with so few words. Well done, also a new genre to me. I wouldn't mind giving it a go, but don't know if i'd pass the hp censors...lol

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Very nice Audrey, especially to touch on the erotic with so few words. Well done, also a new genre to me. I wouldn't mind giving it a go, but don't know if i'd pass the hp censors...lol

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Jodah!

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      Demas W Jasper 3 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

      Wonder #1 is your poem so well crafted. Wonder #2 is the fact that HP is still giving it play months after it was published. Wonder #3 is that you are still here, wonderfully alive and kicking. Bravo!

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      Linda Crampton 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      This is a beautiful poem, Audrey. I love the way in which you have created such sensual imagery in so few words. I've never heard of Jue Ju before. I'm glad to have learned about it by reading your hub!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Hi Jodah! Thank you!!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Perspycacious!

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Alicia!

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      Michelle Scoggins 2 years ago from Fresno, CA

      Wow Audrey - very short but so very powerful. Using minimal words you have created a truly sensual piece. Great work!!

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      Pollyanna Jones 2 years ago from United Kingdom

      I've not heard of Jue Ju before. And it's a beautiful form; there are pauses in there that help you contemplate what is being said before it flows into the next line.

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Thank you mdscoggins!

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Thank you Pollyanna! I agree--it is a beautiful form!

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      Peggy Woods 2 years ago from Houston, Texas

      Hi Audrey,

      You have introduced me to a form of poetry of which I was unfamiliar. Nicely done. Thanks!

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      Audrey Howitt 19 months ago from California

      Thank you Peggy!

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