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Flash fiction, The old country road
There just had to be more excitement out there, somewhere, anywhere!
Lucy lived in a small town in Southern Indiana. She worked at the one-and-only department store in what she enjoyed calling a- one-horse-town. She worked as the store's bookkeeper, spending her day's in a small office and dreaming of adventure. She lived in a small appartment close by. She had a few good friends and dated occasionally but never finding love or fulfillment. Lucy was a beautiful redhead with bright green eyes. She wore her long hair in one braid, pulled to one side. She was tiny weighing only one hundred and six pounds.
This morning she woke up feeling really down and thinking, there has to be more out-there, somewhere, anywhere!
She got into her Honda Civic and headed for the interstate, not knowing where she was going, only feeling the need to get out of this town and her boring job.
She was driving on route sixty four when it started to rain, the wind blowing fiercely against the windshield. She slowed down and turned on the radio searching for a weather station. The forecast was alarming, heavy rain with a chance for hail and possible tornados in the area.
When the wind started to whip her car, she knew she had to get off the interstate, She took the first exit which led to one gas station and an old country road. She pulled up to the gas pump thinking she would fill up, then looking more closely saw the closed sign on the window. She was now hoping she might possibly find something on down the country road. She had been driving about twenty minutes when she noticed an old run-down farm house. The wind was so strong it was difficult to exit the car. She finally opened the door and ran to the house, knocking on the old weathered door. " Coming " was a sweet reply barely audible. The wind had picked up drametically. The door opened and a little old woman stood holding a flashlight, informing Lucy that the electricity had gone out.
Suddenly the wind blew the door off it's hinges and literally picked the woman up, Lucy grabbed her hand. The whirlwind moved slowly through the house and into the back yard, lifting the old woman and Lucy high into the clouds.
When Lucy woke up she was sitting in her car in her driveway at home. She thought she had been dreaming but it seemed so real. The radio was on and Elvis was singing, ' Make the world go away '. Looking around she discovered the windshield and all four windows were gone, scattered glass all over the interior.
In that instant she realized she had not been dreaming. She whispered a prayer for the old woman and became fully aware that she had experienced a paranormal occurrence.
Suddenly her spirit lifted. She no longer felt lonely. She was so thankful to be alive and was ready to spread her wings, where ever they would take her...
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Hello manatita. A little farout but fun to write. Happy you found it interesting. Thank you my nurse friend manatita.
Great tale. Interesting old woman and experience. Nice message at the end. Have a great day, my friend Ruby.
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Hello Thandi. I am thrilled! Thank you for kind words, I thought that i might have gone a little overboard with this one. Ha..Cheers..
for a second i wanted her to stop right at my door. lol
that was a most engaging piece!
She must have been brave enough to overcome the whirlwind even though the woman friend wasn't that lucky - maybe her name should be lucky not lucy.
that was a fantastic write, Ruby.
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Hello Gypsy, Happy you enjoyed. We are both Elvis fans, woopee! Thank you...
Enjoyed this lots Elvis just put on the perfect touch
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Hello drbj, So happy you liked my story. I hope Lucy finds happiness, maybe we will catch up with her if we can find where her wings took her. Thank you dear friend...
Lucy is such a lovable heroine, Ruby, that I hope you plan to write more stories like this. Interesting concept, well-written prose, suspenseful, and a morality story to boot. What more could anyone ask? :)
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Hello Susan, i appreciate you reading my hubs and always leaving a warm comment. Thank you so much...
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Hello vaneet, happy to meet you. Glad you liked the intensity. Thank you for commenting...
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Hello Pam, so glad you liked my story. Thank you for an awesome comment....
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Hello Mike, It is so funny, when i sat down to write this i had no idea that she would run into a tornado or it would be a paranormal event. This is the first time this has occurred. I had so much fun writing this and the best part is my friends like it, it dosen't get any better then that. I remember when the Beatles did that song, i loved it, some said it was a metaphor for LSD, whatever, it was a great song. Perfect is a beautiful word. Thank you..Hugs..
Interesting hub. I enjoyed reading it. Voted up.
Interesting flash fiction. I really liked it's intensity.
This is an excellent example of flash fiction and very interesting. The song was the right choice for sure. There were no wasted words, as everything had some meaning that added to the story. Voted up!!! Awesome.
Hello Ruby. I am sure you have a book in you working its way out. This story had it all, suspense, drama, a tornado, a happy ending. For a slight moment, I wished she was wearing a diamond necklace. (Wait for it...) Then she would have been Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds. (groan)
The story was perfect.
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Oh Mar, Your encouragement makes me so happy. Thank you for believing i could write a story that others would enjoy. A true friend, indeed..Hugs..
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Hello Phyllis, so happy you enjoyed ny story. It might be fun to follow Lucy and see what path she take next. Thank you so much...
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Hello d, good to see you again. Your encouragement is so welcome. Thank you for reading and commenting....
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Hello Nell, i remember we both share an interest in the paranormal. So glad you enjoyed. Thank you for sharing...
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Hello Genna, So happy you enjoyed my story. I have been reading Cam's flash fiction stories and i loved them, short but intersting. I think i might have found the genre that is best for me. I adore the way you break down a story and fill in with your comment. Thank you so much..
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Hello Bill, i am thrilled! When you tell me a story was well written, i am so pleased. I used some of your tips on introductiom, which has always been difficult for me. Thank you my friend...
Dear Ruby,
I am glad this was flash fiction as I held my breath from start to finish...!!
The writing was tight, suspenseful and drew me in immediately.
Like Genna, I saw a modern day Oz theme where Lucy realizes the gifts she has had all along to take her into the journey of the unknown.
Excellent writing. Voted UP and UABI. Love, Maria
Ruby, I love this story -- I hope you write more about Lucy and other adventures she may have. Well done!
Well written. The plot draws the reader in. Hoping for more. Great job.
That was a great story Ruby, sometimes we don't know how lucky we are when we moan about things, loved this! voted up and shared!
Be careful what we wish for. Wonderful story, Ruby. I was so worried about them both in that tornado-like storm. Lucy has a new-found courage after this, and looks at life through a different lens that will inevitably lead her to a fulfillment she has longed for. The answer was in “her” all along. The older woman held her hand through all of this as well. Loved this story. :-)
Watch what you wish for, eh? I like flash fiction; it is the perfect entertainment for my short attention span, and you write it well my friend. Love the story! Have a great weekend.
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Hello Eddy, i am always happy to see you on my page, glad you enjoyed. Thank you...
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Hello Cam, i really enjoy all of your flash fiction stories, so glad you enjoyed mine. Thank you..
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Hello annart, since it was flash fiction, i didn't get into the aftermath of the old woman, but i have a feeling the tornado sat her down easy in her kitchen chair..lol Thank you for coming by and leaving a great comment...
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Hello Graelach, I am just getting into flash fiction, i had fun writing this. Thank you for coming by my page...
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Hello Martie, Elvis' song was the inspiration for writing this piece. Her world did almost go away. I am so glad you liked my story. Thank you my dear friend. Martie i love your fiction stories and it has been a long time, hint-hint.
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Hello Martin, Happy to see you. Glad you enjoyed. Thank you...
LOVED THIS ONE RUBY;GREAT WORK AND HERE'S WISHING YOU A WONDERFUL WEEKEND.
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Ruby, I always enjoy a good Flash Fiction story, and this definitely qualifies. Thanks for the enjoyable read. Have a nice weekend.
Good story! As already said, she wished for excitement and got it, though not quite in the way she envisaged. Wonder what happened to the old lady? Another flash-fiction perhaps?! Ann
Morning Ruby.
A wonderful piece of F/F. The type I love.
Sometimes these extraordinary situations do happen and for Lucy it gave her the courage to spead her wings.
Nice little story.
Take care and have a nice weekend.
LOL Ghaelach
I enjoyed this story, Ruby. Wishing for excitement, but beware, your wish may come true :)
I love Elvis' "Make the world go away"....
Take care, my dear friend :)
Gee, I hope more people stop by to enjoy this. shared
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