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HOT LACED YELLOW SHOES - A Country Song

Updated on March 16, 2012

Hot Laced Yellow Shoes

A Country Song

I followed you to Memphis

To hear you sing the blues

You sure do fit them tight blue jeans

And hot laced yellow shoes

*

I saw you walking a country road

With a guitar in your hand

Thumbing a ride to Tennessee

To play in a country band


I stopped my truck and you hopped in

Decked out in country bling

With tight blue jeans, and after that

I don’t remember a thing

*

We drove on down to New Orleans

In automatic cruise

You strummed into my lonesome heart

While singing, "Born To Lose"


I’d follow you to space and back

There ain't no place, too far

To Country Music’s Hall Of Fame

Or Beale Street’s corner bar

*

Since first I laid my eyes on you

I freely spread the news

I love that girl in tight blue jeans

And hot laced yellow shoes


The man who made millions..Ted Daffan composed Born To Lose

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      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      I love it, and think it is cute as a button.

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Correction: Hank Williams didn't write 'Born To Lose'...It was Ted Deffan. So I rewrote that line. Shoot, write'n a country song, ain't easy.

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Lyric, lyric, lyric...I knew you would get it. You've 'been there done that'.

      Thank you! AD

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Voted up and awesome Ann. This is a great song. I have found, in country music, the words have a way of fitting. When I have posted songs, they are never finished. I think it is fine the way it is. I could put music to it and make it fit, just saying:) They will always be those who say, "no good" or "it don't fit". Not judging the comments, but there will always be. When I write a song and my heart tells me it is good, I know it is. We go as far as we want. Sorry, I think it is good. It is catchy, which is what you want in a chorus and title. Very good potential Ann. I like it:)

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Don, you are justified. Sometimes a critique instructs.

      Keep your spirit dancing...AD

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      mckbirdbks, you're a riot. I will never call you Pinochio.

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Bonjour DFiduccia, Funny you should mention French. I am taking a Pimsleur mail order course now, and I have learned a few phrases. If I ever visit Paris, I can ask them "Do you speak American? Where is the nearest restaurant?" It's fun, but I don't think I'll ever use it. But it does impress my grandkids.

      The Paramours was a strong name for the group. Better than The Righteous Bros. I know it must have been a time of freedom and creative expression for you. Be sure to document that time in your life for your kids.

      Happy to see you, et au revoir

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      DFiduccia 5 years ago from Las Vegas

      Hello Ann,

      Thanks for your comment on the Paramours. I would like to take the credit for forming the group, but Bill Medley and I mutually formed the group. I had studied French in High School and merely suggested the name, The Paramours, which stuck with us.

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      anndavis this is great. I could see this going far. But that's just 'my' nose talking.

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      Don Crowson 5 years ago

      Just so everyone understands my position on thins one, I think Ann has a great poem and good lyrics. I gave it a vote up. I know the problems that a composer would have setting it to music. That does not make it bad. That simply means more work is needed. BTW poems are never really finishe4d.

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Thanks drbj. I am not offended by the 'meter is off' comment. I was in the music business for years, and I learned opinions are like noses...everybody's got one.

      But yours, I listen to. AD

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Joyce, that's more like it. Your comment on the worm story had me in stitches. Your back to your old self. I apreciate you.

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      drbj and sherry 5 years ago from south Florida

      Love the lyrics, Ann. Great job. And forget the 'meter is off' comment. I have yet to hear a country song where sooner or later the singer didn't have to 'scrunch' the words, as you so quaintly put it. Goes with the territory.

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Your great words that will make a great song. Vote up, beautiful and interesting, Joyce.

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      Don Crowson 5 years ago

      Having written a few songs, I am aware of the difficulty of writing notes that fit each verse. That's why i notice your meter. Love the lyrics. But whoever sets this to music or sings it will make some changes. No biggie for musicians. Great start for lyrics.

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      You and me Donna. Shoes rule!

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Hey sky, thanks for the peep.

      Have a wonderful day! AD

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Hi Lily, you encourage me. Thank you.

      Guess what? My grandson, Dakota Davis is moving to Alaska as soon as he graduates in a couple of months. A friend of his made this video about it. He is sure excited! And I, for him.

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0-ZySfln390&lis...

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Gypsy, there's always Hank Jr. Ha ha

      Sending a thank you to Riga Latvia!

      AD

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      DFiduccia, I just heard you on youtube. Your musical background is impressive.

      The group you formed: The Paramours

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OiK5yz2-M88

      Chivalrous of you to come to my defense. Don Crowson was a band leader for years, and he is probably right about the meter. But you....you know. You know that country phrasing gets the point across in the most unusual unproper way.

      Thanks for the vote....Ann Davis

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Cleaner! You like it? Thank you. May you run into someone this very day with yellow shoes....lol

      Ann Davis

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      anndavis25 5 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

      Hi Don, flattered that you stopped by. Being a band teacher and prized poet, you would certainly know that my meter is off. But.....us country folks know how to scrunch words together and make'em fit. Maybe not 'proper' but we can get the point across.

      From one music lover to another, thank you for the visit.

      Ann Davis

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      Donna Cosmato 5 years ago from USA

      Good job, Ann, the song is great but the shoes are out of this world!

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      A beautiful song , and I think the music is already arranged . I await.

      Sounds great!

      Bless.

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      Lillian K. Staats 5 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska

      There you go Missy! Keep it up! Love yaz, lily

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome! Too bad Hank's not around any more to give your song some rhythm.

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      DFiduccia 5 years ago from Las Vegas

      Hi Ann,

      Your song has catchy lyrics. I’d love to hear it with music and voice. BTW, the meter is not off, when using country phrasing. Voted up

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      cleaner3 5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      Very nice lyrical rhyme. Most songs whether country or other start out as poetry. i like it.

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      Don Crowson 5 years ago

      Good start, Ann. The meter is a little off, but you have a good idea and the lyrics say something.

      Thanks for sharing