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Heat

Updated on July 5, 2009

109 Fahrenheit

It's so hot, the heat is like a presence in the room. The walls, the floor, this sofa I'm sluggishly sprawled on, it's all to the boiling point. We are, too, half lethargic, half fevered. You've got your eyes closed and are fanning yourself with that coquettish Japanese fan, up and down it goes, rhythmically swooshing up and down, momentarily hiding, showing, hiding your face.

I look at the sweaty brilliance of your face, your neck, your shoulders and I'm stirred, but it's hard to move, voluntary action seems too much of an effort, so I let my thoughts wander around in slow motion in my head, while I look at you.

Who could guess what I'm thinking now. Would it be obvious by looking at my glazed expression that I'm thinking of licking the sweat off you? The drops that fall down the side of your face look particularly delectable. The ones that trail down your torso are ... ravishing.

Up and down goes the fan, I don't know how you find the little energy it takes to move it. I'm completely paralyzed myself and continue to lay in the sofa, and it feels like a bed full of hot coals, dries my skin, and makes me expel my own heat waves into the room, but it's strangely comforting to be in this cocoon of heat, smelling your body from a distance, smelling my own salty, spicy sweat as it dries the moment it touches the air.

My insides tremble, heavily, when I think of passing my tongue from your shoulder up to your earlobe, taking that tender, juicy button of flesh in my mouth, like an all too alluring lollipop. In spite of the sizzling temperature, I shudder and let off a wave of my own heat. I'm tempted to go to you, you're starting to look like a cold drink in a glass whose walls are full of condensation, drops slowly drip drip dripping, and I feel like licking them off before they reach your t-shirt and leave a mark.

But you're not a cold drink, you are a deliciously hot beverage, letting off steam full of fragrance, tempting me to take a sip. Your scent spirals around the room and tickles my nose, enticing my senses, but not yet quite enough to overcome this heat-induced lassitude that has me knocked over.

I'm really thinking of licking the sweat off you, drop by drop, dry you off, drink you in completely. I lick my dry lips and can almost taste your salty sweat, so delicious.

The fan stops moving and you throw your arm over your brow, half covering your face but not quite. I can still see your closed eyes, and I perceive movement behind the lids. One would think you dreaming your own hot dreams, but I hear you moan, a listless sound that speaks of your mind and body being in the present, under the oppressing quality of mercury rising to the top.

Your moan marks the moment for me. I slowly raise, stretch the lethargy off my limbs, and advance towards you while I lick my dry lips, full of anticipation. I challenge the thermometer to signal my temperature. There isn't enough mercury in the world to mark how hot I am this very minute.

Photo from National Weather Services Forecast Office
Photo from National Weather Services Forecast Office

© 2009 Elena.

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      Elena. 7 years ago from Madrid

      Hi there, Ixxy! Need a fan? :) Timely comment, too, as it's as hot here now as it was when I wrote this last August! :-) Hi right back to k@ry!

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      lxxy 7 years ago from Beneath, Between, Beyond

      Oh god, I'm more flustered than a 13 year old at a jonas brother's concert.

      Wow, I want to re-read this. This is going on my FB wall. Friggin' delicious.

      I'd teleport you some ice, but I'm liking the scene this heat wave is making.

      Oh, and k@ri says hi. She says this is just as hot as the first time she read it. ;)

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      Lgali 8 years ago

      very nice hub

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hello, 2patricias! Thank you for the comment, I'm glad I managed to raise the temperature, in both senses :-)

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      2patricias 8 years ago from Sussex by the Sea

      Just followed you from Misty's Hub (your comment). This is the first of your hubs that I have read - great writing.

      You really conjure up the heat (in both senses).

      Will be reading more of your work!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      uhmmm, I'm not sure what you mean with that, but OK, thanks for the visit.

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      swathin2 8 years ago

      hi your hub is more hot than what your content is

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      If you say so ;-)

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      fierycj 8 years ago from The Fiery Heart of Africa

      Ha ha ha. Sure you do.

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hi fierycj, I'm not sure I know what you mean *whistling*

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      fierycj 8 years ago from The Fiery Heart of Africa

      I didnt even know people where allowed to write this kinda stuff...TILL NOW!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Thugluv, thanks :)

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Ayer, I was wondering when you'd show your slappable face 'round here :) Don't bother with M, she knows all about it :-P See you next week and, yes, you can count on my myghty warth... Laugh!

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      Ayer 8 years ago

      Hey Leni, wait till I tell M about this :-p (I meant to stop by a while ago, but forgot to come nag, it must have been the heat you reckon?)

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      Candie V 8 years ago from Whereever there's wolves!! And Bikers!! Cummon Flash, We need an adventure!

      Yes, I have cooled down considerably! Whew! I was ready to head to the supermarket and sit in a cooler with the Popsicles!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Thanks, Candie! I hope you found your brain already :)

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      Candie V 8 years ago from Whereever there's wolves!! And Bikers!! Cummon Flash, We need an adventure!

      Ok, now, where exactly did I set my brain down?? Never mind, I'll look for it later, it's useless at this point anyway! What was I saying? Ah, this has rattled me to my core! Brilliant!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hello, Peggy! Thanks for the compliment, I'm glad it felt hot :-) About the romance novels, I'd rather read them, I'm actually quite an adept consumer of the genre :-)

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      Peggy Woods 8 years ago from Houston, Texas

      Do you write romance novels? If not.....you SHOULD!!! Hot! Hot! Hot! As another said, it felt like I was in that room watching the fan movements and the drops of sweat...

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      "Your moan marks the moment for me," is one of the longest line of alliteration I've seen in a long time! Awesome.

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      dohn, thanks for the compliments!

      Iphie, I'm glad you felt the heat, in more ways than one :) Heat does get the mind going, maybe that's why I like summer so much!

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      Iphigenia 8 years ago

      Two-way hot - or way too hot ! I loved this piece - it's hot here too and don't it just get the thoughts going, even when the body is too hot to move ?

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      dohn121 8 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

      You should accompany this piece with a tall glass of ice water! Good similes and analogies!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Aren't you glad we can't see you, Pam? :-)

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      pgrundy 8 years ago

      Ooooo, yum. And I'm still blushing! lol!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hello Amanda, maybe we can use this little piece here to warm ourselves over in the dreary winter months? :-)

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      Amanda Severn 8 years ago from UK

      Hot, hot, hot! This is a very steamy piece of writing Elena. I'm glad the thermometer has dropped a little this side of the Channel, though reading this has made it feel a little warmer!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hawkes...too hot indeed! I'm hitting the mighty pillow in 5....4....3...2... but I can't shake this heat from my outer skin.... Ahhhh well, let's see if nighty night brings any respite!

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      Hawkesdream 8 years ago from Cornwall

      Just had to read this, bloody hot if you ask me!! best have a shower or a cold drink, cool down a bit.

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Violet, Spain is plain HOT as hell's parlor, the sexy part is all mine ;-)

      And that would happen to you for being weak of heart :) Not on account of the NYC's terrible humid heat, but on account of the NYC prices!!! Laugh!

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      VioletSun 8 years ago from Oregon/ Name: Marie

      You write like a poet! Didn't know it was that it was sexy hot in Spain. :) Its hot here, but the weather in my side of the fence because of the ocean, is more temperate, so it doesn't get as uncomfortable as in NY where I used to live; years ago during a heat wave of about 110 degrees, I was walking in the city, and  almost fainted,  had to go into a restaurant to cool off and order lunch and water. Turns out I was in an expensive area of Manhattan and ended up paying the equivalent of a full dinner for a sandwich.  

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Wanna borrow the fan, k@ri? :-)

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      Kari Poulsen 8 years ago from Ohio

      Whew, that was very hot! The heat was shimmering off my screen! WOW

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      KCC, cold shower is good for the body, but the mind... that is an altogether different type of heat that's not so easy to errrr turn off. Ahem.

      Chris, yes, I think I do need some refreshment too. Indeed I do. Good luck to you with yours. I'll see what I can do with mine!

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      Christoph Reilly 8 years ago from St. Louis

      Hot in more ways than one! "...drip drip dripping to pool at the table, and I feel like licking them off before they reach your t-shirt and leave a mark." Lordy, I need some iced tea! Some salty iced tea!

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      KCC Big Country 8 years ago from Central Texas

      I need a cold shower after that one! Very nice, Elena.

      We were without air conditioning for just over a week (two weeks ago) and it was 105 degrees here. I know exactly what you're talking about. I had to refer back to my own hub about how to stay cool on a hot day just to remind myself again what I could try. I tried many of them! Thank goodness the A/C is back on!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Cris, I don't see that I'm cooling down any time soon ... not even in the dead of winter ;-) Thanks for the kind words!

      Nazish, here, you can borrow this Japanese fan.... we're done with it ... for today :D

      That's how it is, PM, that's just how it is in Spain land. Who knew eh? Laugh!

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      Paper Moon 8 years ago from In the clouds

      So that's how it is in Spain. Whew!

      Wonderful.

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      nazishnasim 8 years ago

      Now that was definitely hot *fans herself*. Such exquisite writing Elena; quite picturesque!

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      Cris A 8 years ago from Manila, Philippines

      Elena

      Heat and its various um connotations. Thanks for making what could be a thesaurus entry in the hands of another a wonderful read. I hope your writing won't ever ever cool down :D

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Sally, here, have a cold drink. But don't think of condensation! :-)

      Teresa, don't be chicken now, you know it's good in Madrid, the infierno is more in my head than outside. Laugh! No kidding though, it's been one of those weeks!

      Randy, yes, I assure it is hot up "here". A bit difficult to get comfortable with so much...sweating going on ;-)

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      Randy Behavior 8 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Thanks for the fun little trip inside your head Elena. Its "hot" in there.

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      Sheila 8 years ago from The Other Bangor

      What's the old adage about Madrid? Is it something like nueve meses de invierno, tres meses de inferno? Phew! Too hot for me! (*grins*)

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      Sherri 8 years ago from Southeastern Pennsylvania

      Mesmerizing, beautiful. It is cool here, Elena, but in just the last few moments, it seems to have become so terribly hot. You really know how to take your reader along with you!

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      Elena. 8 years ago from Madrid

      Hey Anthony, you can say that again, HOT it is!

      Hello, Linda, muchas gracias, I'm glad you felt the heat. in a manner of speaking :-)

      Feline,,,, shut up! Laugh!

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      Feline Prophet 8 years ago

      Too hot for comfort, huh? :)

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      Linda Myshrall 8 years ago

      Hot, hot, hot!  The corollary is beautiful, and the bit with the fan so... visual.

      As a writer, you place the reader, like a silent observer, into the room.  The stuff movie scenes are made of.

      Well done, as usual.

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      Anthony James Barnett - author 8 years ago

      Nice one, Elena. Very apt too, seeing how hot it is in Spain at the moment.... Maybe a little TOO hot for those antics though.....