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Updated on May 6, 2013

Their relationship was blindly visible, but dead,

Her words stung him like wasps,

And they rattled around in his head,

Buzzing like strange insects,

His heart pounds,

And her words kept making

Slapping of the face sounds,

His mouth would twitch like a coil,

And his eyes would boil,

Her words would not stop,

They kept spinning in his head

Like a child’s top,

Even after they’ve been spoken,

His heart remains broken,

Her words were filled with disgrace,

Clearing his head

And tightening the skin across his face,

Breathing the air in deeply,

He felt as if he’d regain

Some semblance of his senses,

But her words still maintained,

And they were guarded up like fences,

She was a liar,

And his eyes flashed with equal fire,

Her words were said,

And that was it,

Their relationship was dead.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      I like how you perfectly express difficult emotions and moments. Great job!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Two great pieces of advice in this life: Think twice before you speak, and...If you don't have anything good to say, don"t say anything at all!

      Great poetic example of the product of harsh words

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      I second wayne's comment, as my mother used to say that last part about "if you don't have anything good to say, don't say anything at all!"

      Whoa, yes, that relationship is deader than dead, especially being that there was lying going on, and that will kill it every time!

      Excellent and very descriptive poem here.

      Voted up +++ and sharing

      God bless, Faith Reaper

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      This was a good story. I had a singer like her. As I learned about her I also learned to avoid. So we got along.

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      Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Your really becoming a master with the lyrical poetry, Frank. This one flowed like liquid gold to it's Rhett- Scarlett like ending in that movie. Bet he goes back to Charleston.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Theater Girl and wayne Barrett for visiting my words :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Faith always good to see you thanks for popping on by

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Mhatter and Alastar for stopping by and checking out my words...:)

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Wow Frank! This was really good. wonderful imagery! "Her words stung him like wasps." I voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thnaks so much lovedoctor926 for the up vote!!! :)

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      Billy Joseph Ethridge 4 years ago from Georgetown, S.C.

      Cool poem dude, I write a bit myself come on over and check out some of my stuff and see what you think. Voted up

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      Peggy Woods 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

      Words can be powerful when used as weapons. You portrayed this vividly and well. Voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again kkingcrabb will check out your stuff and thank you Peggy w good to see you again :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting Frank. I agree with Peggy, very powerful words stated in this poem. Always well worth the read Mr. Frank. Gripping, emotional, and straight forward. Thumbs up.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Frank--a little different write for you--loved this totally!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Lyric and Audrey for visiting my words :)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. So true that lies and relationships don't mix.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for visiting Gypsy

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Another wonderful gem from you my talented friend. Great work as always.

      Have a wonderful day Frank.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Eddy thanks :) God bless you

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      I echo the comments about powerful imagery and great lyrical poetry---very strong writing!! ~Lurana

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you MrsBrownsParlour..:) bless you

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Frank, what an excellent detailed expression of emotion for a single event! You described everything that goes around a person's heart and mind with such detail AND in a poetic form, WOW!

      It's always a pleasure to read your work, Frank! Thanks for sharing.....

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Lathing thank you so much for the kind words..bless you

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      Yesenia Reyes 4 years ago from Los Angeles

      I just loved this so much! I enjoy reading this poetry. Just amazing, beautiful, and wicked all in one. Thank you for sharing, always a pleasure for me(:

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you VictoriaBash..:)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      I love the way you have created an imagery of words invading the mind and causing untold havoc...a great piece, thank you Frank :-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      hey thank you Valley...:)

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      Stolas 4 years ago from Midwest

      chilling, I very much enjoyed the symbolism. It put me in that place as many of us have been, and as my eyes drifted off the bottom it was like walking out of a shadow. thank you.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks stolas again :)

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      This was amazing, as usual! I have been there before. Word's can be like weapons, sometimes!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you lisa for popping by :)

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      June 4 years ago from From the Heart of God

      I love every words in it...very Powerful words.

      Thank you for sharing this.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Sweet Epistles for stopping by :)

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      Linda Crampton 3 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      I love the imagery in this poem! It's dramatic and creates a very effective description.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Alicia

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      Nimra Aijaz 3 years ago from Steel Town

      Oh My....your words were so strong, the way you painted the whole scenario, portrayed his feelings, described her words.... very profound and heartfelt. This is one of my favourite poems, i must say Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Canscorpion :)

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      B. A. Williams 3 years ago from USA

      I like how you do the play on words in your poetry, it was poignant and had a justified ending. Well done!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you BA Williams

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 3 years ago from Lagos

      Yeah I know that feeling...

      Even the lines, i once chewed,..

      Awesome write!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Uban for visiting Her Words :)

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      Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

      Nothing wounds like words.

      Great use of similies and evoked imagery.

      Anna

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Anna

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      Billy Joseph Ethridge 3 years ago from Georgetown, S.C.

      Words are very, very powerful and can cut deeper than any knife,

      And leave scars that will haunt you for the rest of your life.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you kingcrabb :)

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      Cut The Bullshit 3 years ago from All Over

      Wow you have a way with words. Excellent and so well written.

      btw there are so many of your hubs I want to read, but I do have a fear of flying and have a fear of ghosts.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Its ok Ranzi I do enjoy your hubs anyways..LOL bless you :)

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Really engaging one here!

      Smiles, FR

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again F R.. you r too good to me :)

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