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Hissing: An Alliterative Poem.

Updated on August 2, 2013
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Justin W. Price, AKA PDXKaraokeGuy, is a freelance writer, blogger, and award-nominated author based out of Juneau, Alaska.

Alliteration

Alliteration is a type of rhyme scheme in which consonant sounds are repeated throughout a line, a stanza or, as in the case of this poem, an entire piece. It can be used to give a poem a feel of cohesiveness and connection in a piece which might otherwise seem to lack it. Many fine poets use heavily alliterative language in their poems. I discuss one such poet, Elizabeth Bishop (specifically her poem Filling Station), on this Hub.

You will often see alliteration in free form and blank verse poetry. However, many structured and traditionally rhymed poems, including Edgar Allen Poe's famous The Raven , use alliteration in conjunction with masculine rhyme schemes, creating an even more dramatic, and usually pleasing, effect.

The piece that follows is an experiment. Not only do I use soft "S" sounds which contradict the theme of the poem, I also use the same tone throughout the poem, which hopefully creates a delightfully cacophonous affect.

I hope you enjoy it!




Hissing


So

you say

speaking not so softly.

Your voice,

sputtering syllables of

nonsense and discord.

Searing my spirit.

Hissing sounds—

just …

sounds…

for the sake of sounds.

Slamming doors, strong

faced and filled with simply

superfluous rage.




all rights reserved. copyright Justin W. Price March 14, 2012.

This was originally published on Hubpages under the name "PDXKARAOKEGUY" on the above date. He owns the copyright. If you are viewing this elsewhere, then you are reading stolen content. Please notify the author and the thief immediately and vacate the page.



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      Justin W Price 4 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Archuleta, thanks for stopping by. I would be honored. Let me know how your class likes it.

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      Nadia Archuleta 4 years ago from Denver, Colorado

      Alliteration is one of my favorite sound devices. I love your example poem -- I'm going to use it (with proper attribution, naturally) when I next teach alliteration. Thanks for sharing!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Ruchira. I'm glad you learned something :-)

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Thanks for introducing me to a new genre of poetry. Never heard of it...thanks Justin :)

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      MyMinds Eye, it's pretty much impossible to be totally original and that's the greatest form of flattery, so, just write what comes out. Write what's natural :-)

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      My Minds Eye53 5 years ago from Tennessee

      Your poem was delightful. Edgar Allen Poe is my favorite poet as you might be able to tell in some of my poetry. Being a poet, I used to be afraid to read poetry for fear of subconsciously copying someone else's work. Now I have been writing long enough I have my own style. Now I learn from other poets. Rhyming poetry is my favorite to read and write.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks for the comment, Elijah Truth. I in no way intended for this poem to be interpreted as deeply as you have interpreted it. I think it's great. Thanks so much!

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      elijahtruth 5 years ago from texas

      The hub hubber to hubber Tammy Swallows interviews the Guy, very sound character study of one of the many who have been turned from believing in the Basis of the Bible yet still believes in Jesus Christ! This poem is what our God now does as He promised He would do to those who follow satan/baal He is going to make them a Hissing, as He spoke in the book of Deuteronomy so men such as pat robertson who have caused many righteous souls like our friend here the KaraokeGuy to wonder where is God when such men rule His word! Very pure declaration from the Guy to Tammy Swallows about God, yet this is the day when God promised He Himself through His children would give evidence/proof of why we should have Faith!

      For undeniable evidences that the Guy is thinking wisely go first to the Hub at https://hubpages.com/religion-philosophy/THE-LORDS... a blog where the writer had originally forgotten about the Hub he made many months back then received a line from concerned idividuals here who are proving they desire God, yet cannot find Him and His truth! Go to the link given and the links near the bottom of the page each link has undeniable waking proofs of this Epic generation of thinkers such as KaraokeGuy....... Respect to all of God's seed/Adam's seed...

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks so much, Vinaya. You're such a skilled writer and poet... don't change a thing!

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      I have never tried this in my poetry.

      Justin, you are wonderful!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Tarajey. I'm glad you enjoyed this!

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      tarajeyaram 5 years ago from Wonderland

      Very nice poem. I always enjoyed reading your hubs. Keep writing.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      thanks andrea. my pleasure!

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      Andrea333 5 years ago

      PDX KaraokeGuy...you take nothing for granted do you? Your celebration/exploration of even the smallest things (sounds of a particular letter for example) open my mind to many wonderous things previously forgotten. Thank you for sharing your gift with us!

      Voted Up and Interesting!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks so much Vellur!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      thanks, Julianna. As a future teacher, that comment pleases me!

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      This is hissingly super duper poem. Voted up. Your poems are great.

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      Julianna 5 years ago from SomeWhere Out There

      I feel like I am back in College and you are the professor when I read your hubs. I always learn something from you or my emotions get me going. This was awesome! voted and shared!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Tams. I'm glad this could enlighten you! Thanks for stopping by and commenting

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Raci, thanks. That's not what i expected!

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      Tams R 5 years ago from Missouri

      I've seen the word alliteration in regards to poems in the past, but never understood what it meant. I've never taken the time to look it up either. Thanks for explaining it.

      I like the poem too. It's interesting how it reads. With the consistent 'S' throughout it seems rhythmic coming off your tongue.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      love the soothing sound of this poem Justin and this lulls me to sleep...

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      lol, Karn. If you ever decide to reinsert your pen, let me k]]now. I'd love to take a gander!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      thanks Alicia. I'm glad!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      sam, thanks a bunch for the comment and the follow!

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      Karen Silverman 5 years ago

      Thanks for the information on this type of poetry. i have dipped my pen into the poetry pool a few times - but to be honest - did my best to skip poetry class in school..lol

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      Linda Crampton 5 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      You've used alliteration to create the mood very effectively in this poem, PDX! I love the result.

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      sam209 5 years ago

      slick rhyme scheme!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Jamie, indeed. It was very intentional. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Blossom, I don't read a lot of the older poets, so Tennyson is somewhat foreign to me. I'll have to check him out and check things out.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Deepak!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Lol. Great comment , Tammy. Thank you! Nice seeing you!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks so much Chatkath

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks for the compliments and the votes, dmop!

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 5 years ago from Reno NV

      I love how you titled the poem "hissing" s's always seem to make a hiss when alliterated. Thank you for the awesome introduction about alliteration and an example that cannot be beat. Jamie

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 5 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      You reminded me of how much I used to often admire Tennyson's use of alliteration, if I remember it correctly, in 'And on a sudden, Lo, the level lake and the long glories of the winter moon.' The use of the liquid 'l' gives such a mind-picture of the water and really slows one down to enjoy the sight of the silvery moon-path across the dark water.

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      Deepak Chaturvedi 5 years ago from New Delhi, India

      great hub.

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      Tammy 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Great hub. I didn't nod, nearly napping because of this very creative and colorful alliterative poem. Well done!

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      Kathy 5 years ago from California

      This is so brilliant, you explained and demonstrated with a distinct tease. Love it!

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      dmop 5 years ago from Cambridge City, IN

      Fantastic system of syllables, voted up and awesome.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Leni. I'm glad you thought so!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks so much, Cheryl. That's much appreciated!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Amy... thank you and i couldn't agree more!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Flash... that's awesome! Let me know how it turns out!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      lol. Great comment, April. Thank you!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Jen, thank you! I'd be fine with that... I'm actually still in the process of working on my poetry book!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Gypsy!

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      Leni Sands 5 years ago from UK

      Perfect explanation and a very good illustration of alliteration.

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      Cheryl Simonds 5 years ago from Connecticut

      Sssimply sssuper ssscripting. I like it a lot.

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      Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      A soft-talker toting a hard line. Sounds passive-aggressive to me. I smiled as I read your sssupreme piece (now I'm thinking about pizza.) However, living with passive aggressive personalities is frustrating, stressful and leaves the other heading for anger management! Great piece, PDX

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      flashmakeit 5 years ago from usa

      Thanks for sharing after reading your hub I feel inspired to try to write a poem.

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      April Reynolds 5 years ago from Arizona

      Wow, at first the sounds were sssoothing and sssassy until the story behind the poem sunk in, then they turned sssnarly and sssad. alliteration is so much fun!

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      jenubouka 5 years ago

      You always create incredible pieces PDX! I can expect to read an invigorating poem, as well as learn about the different styles of poems. I seriously need a day to just sit and read all your work, ingenious it the word that comes to mind.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and interesting! SSSSizzling!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Kimberly. I appreciate the votes!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Deborah. Let me know what you think!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Mopon... i totally agree wiht your point. Generally, if I set out to write a poem using this technique, it fails. I didn't intend to write an allierative piece, but I was studying alliteration a lot at the time I wrote it. When I realized what was happening with the poem, i decided to exaggerate the issue. I don't see myself marketing this one beyond hubpages, but I think it's a fun read. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Time2Rite

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Aurelio. I didn't either, actually :-0

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      thanks audrey... i'm glad you enjoyed this. I have my wizzley link above. I hope you're able to find me on there!

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      Kimberly Lake 5 years ago from California

      Great hub. Voted up and awesome.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      I really like this type of poem.. Alliteration. I will study this thank you

      voted up

      Debbie

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      Clark Cook 5 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

      It's a fun piece, Justin, and I DID enjoy it--in the spirit in which you offered it, as an /experiment/. Did it succeed? For my ear, yes it did, though I have some minor reservations. Seems to me there's a danger whenever we try to consciously USE a particular effect in language; that is, the search for the effect can blur the overall force of the poem itself. /Maybe/ that happens here, at least in the closing lines? I'm not sure, but I very much enjoyed this experiment!

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      time2rite 5 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

      Superbly stated; awesome alliteration, PDXKaraokeGuy!

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      alocsin 5 years ago from Orange County, CA

      Love the poem and the accompanying explanation. I didn't realize that "The Raven" was alliterative until you mentioned it. Voting this Up and Interesting.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      I love the alliteration--sssuper!