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If I were..

Updated on August 2, 2010

If I were a bird perched on the highest branch. I would breathe in the air around me. I would fly further than the eye could see, the world below me a distant memory.

I would feel the wind between my toes, gliding me through the heartache in an instant. The warmth embracing feeling of freedom would warm me like a blanket.

I would grab these few moments and enjoy every second, before the world below becomes every closer, realising that I am dreaming and that reality is only a few feet away.

I would value these moments before waking to a world of the fear, pain and the unknown but remember that life is not with the birds in the clouds above, and it is what you do make of it down here that counts.


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      Leanne1783 6 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom

      Thanks for your comments Ebower! I agree we have more apirations but imagine having the ability to fly wherever you wanted! Thanks for stopping by!

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      Erin Bower 6 years ago from Georgia

      What an imaginative poem! It's cool to be a bird, but we have so many more feelings and aspirations then birds do. I voted this up and beautiful.

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      You are very welcome and I will appreciate your honest comments and advice or criticisms when you read my poetry. Do not be reluctant to share your thoughts in comments. It's another way of learning. Others teach me every day. I remain open-minded and teachable. Keep up the good writing.

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      Leanne1783 6 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom

      Thank you, I will take your comments into consideration when writing more poems. I appreciate your advice.

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      Mimi721wis 6 years ago

      Nice slingobay

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      Leanne: You have the soul of a poet and will learn all of the skills of t5he craft in time only if you study and practice. Structure should be one of your considerations. Here is the great poem that I read on this page.

      If I were a bird perched

      on the highest branch.

      I would breathe

      in the air around me.

      I would fly further

      than the eye could see,

      the world below me

      a distant memory.

      I would feel the wind

      between my toes,

      gliding me

      through the heartache

      in an instant.

      The warmth

      embracing

      feeling of freedom

      would warm me

      like a blanket.

      I would grab

      these few moments

      and enjoy every second,

      before

      the world below

      becomes every closer,

      realising that

      I am dreaming

      and that reality

      is only a few feet away.

      I would

      value these moments

      before waking

      to a world of

      the fear,

      pain

      and the unknown

      but remember

      that life is not

      with the birds

      in the clouds above,

      and it is

      what you

      do make of it

      down here

      that counts.

    • Leanne1783 profile image
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      Leanne1783 6 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom

      I found it difficult to put the feelings into words, but this is one of my first poems, I am sure I can improve in time. Thank you again for your comments.

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      Hi Leanne: This is a lovely bit of prose but I thought it would have a more lofty ending. I'm following. Thanks for the follow.

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      Karen Gibson Roc 6 years ago from Los Angeles

      Thanks for sharing..beauty speaks through your presence and gift!!

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      HostelHopper 6 years ago

      Lovely poem! I can certainly relate to it.

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      Leanne1783 7 years ago from Bradford, United Kingdom

      I would appreciate any comments this is my first hub!!