Invisible Woman, An Unconventional American Sonnet
Invisible Woman
An Unconventional American Sonnet
Invisible woman, so quiet, so careful, so cool, and so coy,
the harvest moon blushes bright red at your consummate, poetic ploy.
Undaunted, you pointedly knock on my Internet door to inquire,
“Is anyone there tending fires of judicious, ecstatic desire?”
But when I can finally open the diligent, all-knowing door,
I find no one waiting me there but a frustrated, translucent floor.
The floor with appropriate creak and a shrug looks at me plaintively,
“She treats you much better than me! For she heartlessly walks over me!”
Invisible woman, what secrets, what wonders, what fears in you grow?
What whispering words to express the delights and the dangers you know?
You seem to desire new adult conversation and meaningful friendship:
Have weighty dilemmas of life tied your eloquent tongue to a turnip?
The world need not come to a premature end from relentless frustration,
for Nature equipped every person with powers of endless creation.
Max J. Havlick
Villa Park, Illinois 60181-1938
Late Saturday night, Oct. 10-11, 2015
Comments
An interesting and, as you say, "unconventional American sonnet" Max. I don't know if you actually have someone in mind as "the invisible woman" but I did enjoy the read.
This is so rich with a tapestry of eloquence, thoughtfulness and deep reflection. Truly your own voice of a person with deep feeling.
Really was moved by your Sonnet. You are a modern day Hemingway. :-)
Shared and definitely would give this 5 stars! *****
Blessings always :-)
And imagination, I might add. You do this so well. Carry on, Bro!
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Yes, Jodah, I did, but you'll have to wait for my autobiography to find out who it was!
Seriously, as I wrote, I saw it fit many other situations I've witnessed in my life, and it gradually took on the task of addressing the crisis of the so-called modern woman who theoretically now can "have it all," but after having a man and children, with all those implications and responsibilities, can begin to feel blocked, forever trapped from becoming all she could be, a full-grown adult woman on the world stage.
When I googled this subject, I found Germaine Greer currently dealing with the same issues in a monologue presentation in the London suburbs on "The Disappearance of Women." Best wishes to you.
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Jo, you are too kind! Modern Hemingway?! I seriously doubt it, but thanks. By the way, once upon a time in my long life, Hemingway himself was considered "modern," so that must make me now a virtual relic. Now I see each year my friends keep getting younger and younger! Stay cool, Joanne.
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Thanks, Manatita 44, for continuing to read and respond with encouragement from London. May nothing but the best come to you.
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