Looking For a Place to Die
I was young and brilliant,
but the problem was
I thought I was a woman.
My soul was stolen cause I didn't guard it
and that proved something,
but I was too hard headed
to focus on the lesson.
I was a little girl
and he knew I was too damn sweet.
He knew I was naive
and that's what attracted him to me,
the fucking creep.
I alienated everyone who loved me.
I didn't want to have friends.
I just wanted to be alone
with my demon.
I won't lie,
I am sometimes satisfied
when I feel an evil visitor
enter my body.
There are times
when he won't allow me to cry,
and those are the moments I really
feel like I need help.
But, that only happens once in a while.
I'm good in life, I just need a place to die.
This might sound strange, but something about him
allows my true talent to come out.
I try to act as God's child,
but this spirit
doesn't feel godly at all.
I feel like I'll be misunderstood again,
but I know who I am
and that is why
I am bold in my statements.
I will never fall.
I'm just looking for a place to die.
I need a place to rest when my body
is too tired to settle for a night
of tossing and turning.
That is why I hustle
and that is why I
put up with the bullshit
of this journey.
You don't have a goal?
You don't know what you want?
I'm leaving you behind,
you're no love of mine.
I'm searching for something,
and it has to be better
than the place I was born in.
I have split personalities and we need a place
where we will be accepted.
It's hard to believe
that we don't always agree.
Man, I just remember being young,
brilliant, and naive.
I was forced to do things I didn't want,
but I didn't know I had to become strong.
See, you can't send just any little girl
out to hunt,
she needs experience first.
Comments
Brutally realistic. I was going to hit "beautiful" but it is too stark....it is beautifully written but man oh man there is some serious pain here. :) Well done!
Heartbreaking. Shows the face of the cruelty of this world. God Bless you.
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Thank you, Bill and shofarcall!
Ryem, very powerful work. I could feel the pain and the frustration. Well written. Voting up and sharing.
My heart is so heavy right now. You are a very talented writer and did a great job expressing your emotions in images. Beautifully sad and heart-wrenching poem. Are you going to be alright? Email if you need an ear. I'm a good listener and a counselor.
Very well written, and indeed I too could feel the pain flowing from this one...
Beautifully written, indeed. I love the lines :
"I have split personalities and we need a place
where we will be accepted.
It's hard to believe
that we don't always agree."
So powerful and full of pain, as everyone else has said. Voted up and everything but funny
Very beautifully written poem and though there was pain in it but I still liked it.
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Thank you everyone for all of your nice comments!
Nicely written and a very point-full piece... KUDOS!!! GREAT JOB!!!
Wow Ryem, what a poem you wrote there. I see you were inspired after listening to the song in the video. I have written a couple of poems after being inspired b songs too. This is so dark and brutally honest though, very impressive. Voted up.
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Thank you, Lisa!!
Yes Jodah, isn't it great how music can inspire you that way? Thank you for commenting: )
Way to express yourself Ryem. Nice digging up JackieThere is no place for you to choose to die so just try to keep living. Most of us have had to learn to be strong sooner or later. That's life! Some people are affected with pain much more than others. You survived! I can tell! Stay up my sister! You are truly loved!
Nice, cool digging this up Lisa Luv. Way to share!
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You're great! Thanks so much!
This is very deep and powerful ! Great writing ! Voted up.
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Thank you, Angela. : )
Very raw and true. I definitely feel the emotion tucked into these words. Brilliant!
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Thank you, Skylar!!
Ryem, your poems are like rays of the Sun and your light is so overwhelming and powerful, though, this poem is imbued with streaks of sadness. But, then rays have to penetrate deep into everything. Voted up. Peace. :-)
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Thank you for the great comment, I really appreciate it!
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