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Love in the Background

Updated on May 29, 2013

Waiting

Waiting

Waiting

You circled

moon to my sun.

Waiting

Waiting

a familiar stranger that

left me undone

Waiting

Waiting

only ever

grazing my hand

Waiting

Waiting

what could possibly

be God's plan?

Waiting

Waiting

you said I would never

be alone

Waiting

Waiting

But you still

returned to your own home

Waiting

Waiting

You danced

with me wearing white

Waiting

Waiting

A heart broke that night

Waiting

Waiting

Vronsky drew me in

Waiting

Waiting

We can't simply

be a sin

Waiting

Waiting

Now we live apart

but same

Waiting

Waiting

To live again

on another plane.




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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      this was very creative love in the background...:) voted awesome

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      Beautiful! I love the rhythm.... ooh and the title is perfect! 'a familiar stranger that left me undone'; this is my favorite!

      Cat

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Wow Cat, you are quick! I am so glad that you liked this....I am unsure of using rhyme. Thanks for your encouraging words!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks Frank! I am grateful for your votes and kindness!

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      cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      great poem .. Theatre girl..I like the style and form

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you cleaner3! So happy to read your lovely comment. And I am glad that you liked it. You are too kind ;)

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      Quick? I felt guilty how long it took me to get here :D

      Don't be unsure of anything, don't second guess, just run with it... that's where the honest beauty is!

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Really interesting form and that "waiting, waiting" echoes throughout. The Tolstoy reference with "Vronsky" is a fascinating point in the poem.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      No guilt! I appreciate any visit! And I will take your advice! Thanks again!

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Intriguing, and I love the "waiting waiting" refrain! ~Lurana

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Lurana! And thanks as always for visiting! Glad you enjoyed it ;)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      I am glad you think so xstatic! And I chuckle that anyone finds the words that fall together when I write "fascinating" but I am overjoyed that you do!

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      Romeos Quill 4 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      A sad,but beautiful, poetic verse.Thumbs Up!

      Yours Sincerely,

      Romeo's Quill

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Love is often sad and happy at the same time.....thanks for the visit and the compliment Romeo!

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      I love how you expertly used repetition creating rhythm that works perfectly with your verse. Nicely done.

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you so very much! I am glad that you enjoyed this. I am just getting into using rhyme in my poems so I am kind of a work in progress, but aren't we all?

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      dreamseeker2 4 years ago

      Good poem and one so many of us can relate to. : ) Voted it up and interesting!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you dream seeker! I am so glad that you liked it and for your kind comment and for the visit! ;)

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