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Murder in the Suburbs

Updated on January 25, 2015

Murder in the suburbs

Detective Bill Ramsey arrived at the scene at 7:45 am. He pulled up to modest bi-level in a small suburban development. There were six uniform police cars lined up along the street. The scene had been corned off with yellow tape.

Ramsey got the call while on another case; domestic violence. The estranged husband had killed his wife. As Ramsey gets out of his car he surveys the scene. Bystanders, probably neighbors stood on the street all gathered together whispering. Everyone loves a crime scene, Bill thought to himself.

Ramsey was approached from the responding office, Ken Grims. Ken has worked for the force for twenty-five years. He was a stocky, short man with a balding head. "It's a blood bath Bill". Husband Robert Patterson came home from working night shift at Rollands Hospital. He's an rn in the ICU unit. The victim is his wife Lucinda. She works as an LPN at a nursing home. He works nights, she works days. When he came home he was surprised to still see her car in the driveway. "Where's the husband Ramsey asks?" Ken points to a man in scrubs on the front lawn. He was crying uncontrollably and two women trying to console him. "Neighbors" Ken says.

"So what happened to vic?" Ramsey asks. "Twenty-six stab wounds it happened in the bedroom, ME is in their now Bill." Ramsey starts to walk toward the house. "Aren't you going talk to husband?" Ken asks. "Not now Ken, I want to look at the crime scene" Ramsey responds.

Ramsey walks up six steps leading into the house. The bi-level has six steps leading down and six leading up. Ken was right behind him. "The body is upstairs and down the hall to the left". Ramsey notes as he walks down the hallway there is no blood drops. He enters the bedroom where Ned Stark ME was taking body temperature. "What you got Ned?" Ramsey ask. "Hey Bill, this ones a nasty one. Victim killed on bed, fatal wound number twenty to the heart." "So after the perp killed her he continued stabbing her?" "Yep, looks like an act or rage". "Any sexual assault Ned?" "No, came in and she was completely clothed". "Time of Death Ned?" "Around 6:00 am Bill". Ned started packing up his kit. "Done here Bill, I'll type up my report and it will be on your desk by the time you get back." Ramsey and Ned nod and Ned left.

Ramsey surveyed the scene. Blood splatter on the walls by the headboard. Bed was completely made. Victim dressed in scrubs. Blood splatter on the lampshade and bed. She was spread eagle on the bed. Could of be pushed or fell to the bed. Ramsey looks around the room. Cash and Jewelry on nightstand. The room was neat, no sign of robbery. Ramsey looks at the door frame. No signs of prints or blood. The victim was definitely killed in the bedroom.

Ramsey's brain starts thinking about the victim and her last minutes alive. The victim is getting ready to leave for work. She comes back into bedroom to get cash and maybe put jewelry on. She turns around and killer surprises her. Pushes her down on bed. Twenty-six stab wounds, six after fatal stab. Definitely personal or perhaps rage and psychosis. Ramsey hears the CSU unit come in. They each do a quick nod. "Okay guys it's all yours". As the CSU start photographing the scene, Ramsey walks out of the house.

Ramsey has been a homicide detective for eight years for the Morgansville police force. He moved from New York City where he was lead homicide detective for fifteen years to Morgansville, Kentucky. He needed a break from the horror of the city. He thought a small town in Kentucky would be less horrific. Eight years later he realized it didn't matter where you are, murder is murder. Ramsey exits the house and looks at the distraught husband. Well, he thinks to himself, time to interview the hubby. The spouse is always a person of interest.



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    • lisavanvorst profile imageAUTHOR

      Lisa VanVorst 

      3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks Billy for stopping by to read. I tried a switch on my writing. I didn't think it would be three parts because sometimes you lose readers, but I'm happy with the way it turned out. Now I need to start coming up with new hubs before my score drops.

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      Bill Holland 

      3 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I'm a big mystery fan. I've never seen a mystery I didn't want to read, and I'm glad I stopped by to read this one. Is there a butler in the place? :)

    • lisavanvorst profile imageAUTHOR

      Lisa VanVorst 

      4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Frank. Coming from you that is a great honor since I really enjoy reading your work. I will submit part II of Detective Ramsey this weekend.

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      Frank Atanacio 

      4 years ago from Shelton

      a stand alone piece of crime fiction.. as smile said a believeable, dramatic, violent and raw.. can't wait for the next installment Frank

    • lisavanvorst profile imageAUTHOR

      Lisa VanVorst 

      4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you smile. This is something new to me, but I love watching crime shows. I watch Investigative Discovery Channel every night. Don't worry I already have my brain going for installment number two.

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      4 years ago

      Seems to be a 'crime of passion' or that of a complete lunatic....will have to wait for the 2nd instalment to find out more. Very well written, an (unfortunately) believable scene with some equally believable characters...thank you Lisa:-))


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