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Nightly Nightmares; An Untold Story Pt. 1 ( 2/21/11 )

Updated on February 22, 2011
Haunted shores
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Nightly Nightmares
Nightly Nightmares

This was just me playing around with form, and words. It turned out better than I was expecting. It was written in under 10 minutes.


I am turning this into a 3 part series.


Part 2 can be found here:

Daily Dreams; The Story Continues





There is a story untold of

A nightmare to unfold and

there are things to be said of

walking among the dead.


Now...


follow my footsteps,

into this dream.

Enticing and inviting.

But be warned of

the remnants of spirits

floating ashore, and

through every pore of

my subconscious allure.



Let me lead you inside my head.


Physically dead,

yet in spirit, so alive.

I have tried

to abide

by the rules of sanity amongst

men without reason.

It all comes in season.

Tonight , I commit treason.


Against the laws of a king.

A song I will sing,

speaking of things that

remain yet unseen.


This is our final chance


to erase the past and

begin to sail forward,

into an open sea.

Remove the mask

that binds us here

in fear and

in time passed,

killing us fast and

with speed.


Blood creed


planting a seed,

within our hearts.

Justice amounts to

injustice and sin

within the lairs of

evil men’s glares


Into darkness progress.


This is only a test of

steadfastness and strength,

exploring the length of

time you can stand to

walk in the sand of

the beaches of thought,

that are my distraught,

and despaired


Nightly Nightmares...



© copyright Ben D.A 2011


Go to Part 2 : Daily Dreams; The Story Continues





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    • Granny's House profile image

      Granny's House 

      7 years ago from Older and Hopefully Wiser Time

      Fantastic writing. On to part two

    • SheZoe profile image

      SheZoe 

      7 years ago from Idaho, USA

      haunting

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      By all means, read parts 2/3 nighthag :]

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      K.A.E Grove 

      7 years ago from Australia

      fantastic, this has all the signs of being a true epic and I cant wait to read more,

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      I don't mind at all, did you read part 2/3?

      thanks for reading. :]

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      goody7 

      7 years ago from over there under the sycamore tree

      This subject really fascinates me, and really enjoyed your ghostly hub. I hope you don't mind, but I put a link from my own ghostly hub to yours. You'll hopefully get some extra traffic this way. If you don't like the link, then please just let me know, and I will remove it for you. Happy Hubbin...................

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Haha, thats funny for someone your age. But I do agree with you.

      Have you read parts 2/3??

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      Mark Lecuona 

      7 years ago from Austin, Texas

      @Ben - well it was very well worded and is something to which I can relate. I am 52 years old and have been in corporate America for far too long. I am a CPA and I feel I'm good at what I do but at times I have to interact with hard core ambitious types whose singular focus is to rise up the corporate hierarchy and who clearly are using power instead of intellect to achieve their aims. If there is anything good about becoming older it is the experience of life and the sense you develop about the veracity of others. I have been told that my "weakness" at work is my body language; my boss (who is a good friend) say's I visibly recoil or grimace when I disagree with others. I said "how do you remain prone and mute in the face of a lie?"

      He just said "you need to master the ability to survive...."

      Fuck.....

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      that is what I meant.

    • The Suburban Poet profile image

      Mark Lecuona 

      7 years ago from Austin, Texas

      "I have tried

      to abide

      by the rules of sanity amongst

      men without reason."

      I like this one even if it doesn't mean what I think it means which is to say you have to pretend amongst pretenders.....

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      saddlerider1 

      7 years ago

      I am happy that you decided to extend this work into more chapters, I am intrigued and moving on to Chapter2..great write. On to more nightmares...

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      poetvix 

      7 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Now this rocks! Talk about a stellar dark beginning. The rhythm is fantastic, the feeling dark and driving. I would say more but I have to read the next one!

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      thanks to everyone who read/commented!! :]

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      SilverGenes 

      7 years ago

      I really like the beaches of thought - looking forward to the rest!

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      Nikki Wicked 

      7 years ago from Louisiana

      i like it too. i agree with them u should definitely continue on this. a poetic short story, sumthing along the lines of edgar allen poe, go for it. you definetley have the skill.

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      bbnix 

      7 years ago from Southern California

      Nice, and like Randy, on to part two. Keep it up...

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      Randy Behavior 

      7 years ago from Near the Ocean

      You have my attention, on to part two.

    • epigramman profile image

      epigramman 

      7 years ago

      ..well that's a spendid idea Ben because your 'writer's pen' definitely has the midas touch .....

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      Elizabeth99 

      7 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

      Very good for such a short time span. I am tempted to follow those footsteps into your head lol. Thumbs up! :)

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Epi, thank you...

      I have a question...I am thinking of turning this into my first "poetic short story" containing 3 parts.

      What is your thoughts on this?

    • epigramman profile image

      epigramman 

      7 years ago

      ...man oh man if I could only write like this good and had hair like yours then I'd might get somewhere in life

      instead of sitting here holding this stuffed cat - lol lol - currently listening to the DROPKICK MURPHYS - another Irish band I would recommend to you is THE WATERBOYS - particularly the album - Fisherman's Blues!

      And later on tonight one of my favorite bands from the west coast - Social Distortion with Mike Ness!

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      agreed, i rly like it though :D

    • Nikkij504gurl profile image

      Nikki Wicked 

      7 years ago from Louisiana

      most mines are quickly written. and yes idk just the feel of the poem. the way it was written. the fact you started it off saying a story untold, just kinda reminded me of the start of a play or something.

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      Mentalist acer 

      7 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

      The rebellion of thought towards the etherial king.;)

    • BenWritings profile imageAUTHOR

      BenWritings 

      7 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Thanks, yes this is really different. It was VERY quickly written, and a really odd one.

      Modern Shakespeare? Sounds nice haha

    • Nikkij504gurl profile image

      Nikki Wicked 

      7 years ago from Louisiana

      hmm sounds like the beginning of a story straight out of grims fairytales. or a bit of a modern shakespeare. a bit different than your others. but nicely done.

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