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October Massacre

Updated on October 8, 2011

You stalked me for days, returning to the place you knew I could always be found. Why you chose me I do not understand. Maybe you envied my almost perfect skin or my shape, beguiling to many. I have heard the horror stories of this senseless torture but never believed I would fall victim to a crazed, knife wielding maniac. I tried so hard to shrink into the shadows where your insane gaze could not fall upon me. I tried staying in a group, hoping against hope that you would not be bold enough to grab hold of me, stuffing me into your car and carrying me away from all that was familiar, all I knew. I tried to scream out for help but could not. I was completely at your mercy and your twisted mind found great satisfaction in knowing this was so.

After the first plunge of your knife I thought I would go into complete shock, fall into a state where I would not witness your depraved acts, but no! I was somewhat numbed but felt as your hand ripped my very insides from me. You turned me in whatever direction you chose to achieve the complete devastation of my being. The knifeā€™s tip thrust and sawed away as parts of me fell onto the protective covering you had laid out before so that once your evil deed was done, there would be no evidence of my slaughter.


Then, in a final attempt to humiliate, you displayed me, ravaged and empty, save for a candle you lit and stuck inside the shell, that was now me. Here I will stay, decaying slowly until I fold in upon myself, a mushy putrid jack-o-lantern, having satisfied your fiendish desire to share your handy work with all who pass by.


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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    @Ercolano - coming from someone as talented as you, just the reading of my work was an honor. Thanks so much!

    @Lola - This was an exercise, self imposed, to see if I could do a twist on a short tale ... that, or I'm watching far too many Criminal Minds episodes...LOL

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    Lola1929 6 years ago from Oregon

    Oh My God! You scared the wits out of me! I've got to be careful with your hubs...I'll be wary now. Wow!

    Love from Lola

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    Sam Walker 6 years ago

    I love misdirection, I love when inanimate objects show indignation. I love when a horror story has elements of humour. I love reading stories about Halloween when it isn't Halloween anymore. Good job.

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    Well, thanks everyone. This was fun to do. I think it's good to stretch ourselves once in a while and see what comes of it. I appreciate all of you taking the time to read and I love getting feedback, thanks again!

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    Sharon Smith 6 years ago from Northeast Ohio USA

    Loved this ~ VERY creative Pooh. Nice work!

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    Phoebe Pike 6 years ago

    AWESOME! I love this hub! :)

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    Joe Friedman 6 years ago from Chicago, Il

    Ha...nice twist. You had me going for a while. Great writing.

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    Thank-you DeBorrah K. I don't like horror stories either and won't watch any movies or t.v. with a lot of violence and absolutely nothing satanic or supernatural but this little story popped into my head when I was looking at Fall decorations on line so I thought I'd give it a try.

    Yes, I might be able to do a series. I had to look up vignettes as I've had no formal schooling in writing (other than a few writing assignments in a Jr College English class - ha ha.)so styles, grammar punctuation and

    all that goes along with being a good writer is a constant struggle for me.

    I always appreciate your encouragement and especially your prayers. Gary is still doing well!!!

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    DeBorrah K Ogans 6 years ago

    Poohgranma, You are so talented! I do not like horror stories so I almost did not read this... You are so clever! This is very GOOD! I believe that you could do a series writing short descriptive vignettes and not let on to the end what they are really all about?

    So glad to see that you are pushing ahead! TAKE CARE! God Bless You & Gary!

    Thank You for sharing, In HIS Love, Grace, Joy, Peace & Blessings!

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    stars439 6 years ago from Louisiana, The Magnolia and Pelican State.

    Wonderful hub, and thank you for sharing. God Bless You.

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    Well thanks Amigo, I'm just playing with words, seeing what comes out.

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    50 Caliber 6 years ago from Arizona

    Sherry a macabre writing to be sure and laid out to lead one on, to a pumpkins fate, voted up most excellent! Dust

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    I am delighted with the reactions! It is always hard to branch out into a new area of writing and this was my first attempt at "tongue in cheek" with a twist. I was afraid it was going to be too obvious, being so short, so I am happily surprised to have drawn readers in. Thanks everyone.

    No empathy for clay, hmm Robert? HA HA

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    rwelton 6 years ago from Sacramento CA

    Pooh - you freaked me out! I thought for a few fleeting moments you had gone over the edge and there would be no comment from me on this hub. Like any GOOD writer you had me at Massacre.

    Relieved and smiling, I will now look at Halloween from a different perspective and perhaps move to a ceramic Jack this year.

    Please don't do a hub of being dipped in liquid color and then thrust into a fiery Hell. I don't know if I can conjure up empathy for clay.

    Good job.


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    justmyopiniontoo 6 years ago

    Awesome description, I loved the way you made us feel its terror. Poor pumpkin. Ravaged by a knife wielding maniac!

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    Cheryl Simonds 6 years ago from Connecticut

    Thank you, I truly enjoyed this.

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    Your answer sir

    Though quite macabre

    Is just a fact of death

    But words you pen

    Genre matters not,

    They always take my breath!

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    epigramman 6 years ago

    ...and in return I thank you for your meaningful words and have stopped by again to congratulate you on 100 hubs and yes I have walked along the beach in the last hour, fed the cats, finished my coffee and I still can't get this fine piece of writing out of my mind - so what I did was wrote a piece of horror myself in answer to you - you see what you have done - you have inspired me - my muse and I wrote this one in about 20 minutes and it's called The Phone Message .... lake erie time 2:08pm with the sun sparkling her diamonds on the water

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    A very blessed Thanksgiving holiday wish comes your way from me, a truly thankful friend and admirer of the Word Master, Sir Epi.

    For you to grace my humble hub, let alone lavish praise, is worth more to me than I can adequately express. You are such a dear friend, always more than ready to help along a fellow writer, pointing to their work like a proud parent displays their children's drawing on the family refrigerator. You have mentored so many aspiring writers and are selfless in your advocation of our attempts. Many many thanks, dear man.

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    epigramman 6 years ago

    ....well number one: it's always so nice and a real treat to hear from you anytime anywhere anyday anyhow - I sincerely hope this comment finds you and your family well - this is our Canadian Thanksgiving weekend and I am thankful for having you in my life as a valued friend and esteemed colleague.

    and now to number two: this is one of the best pieces of writing I've ever read at the Hub from anyone - it's short and it's sweet (lol - well maybe more like bittersweet and just downright creepy which as you know I like the dark side anyway(I wrote a creepy one myself a week or so ago called The Glove Compartment) and this is the kind of writing and genre that gets me really excited and inspired - and yes it's true about the horror genre, it's a tough field to conquer but you have conquered it so very well that I would have to call this a qualified masterpiece from the gift of your pen and your imagination.

    lake erie time ontario canada 1:12pm

    posting this one to my facebook page with a direct link back here with pride and awe

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    Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

    Oh good ... I'm trying to branch out a bit and I was concerned this would be too obvious. Thanks to everyone for their comments!

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    mckbirdbks 6 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

    Ohhhhhhhhhhhh, Halloween. What we do to those poor, slimy innards to get to our Jack-o-lanterns. Good one.

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    Barbara Bethard 6 years ago from Tucson, Az

    oh thank goodness a pumpkin!! I am so relieved!! I couldnt look away from the page I was so captivated :) way cool!!

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    Grace Marguerite Williams 6 years ago from the Greatest City In The World-New York City, New York

    Oh my! I am totally speechless.