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One Candle Burned

Updated on January 12, 2012


Only one candle burned

on the window pane,

the slow mist outside

became driven rain,

her pretty face was already

hard with death,

and the air around her

use to be breath,

bone white rosary beads

gleamed around her wrist,

and down the side of her nakedness,

a young woman, so innocent,

and before she died she was

probably staring at a picture

of the Virgin Mary

and the Christ child that was hanging

on her living room wall,

she was waiting for the heavens to call,

life for death she was trading,

and the foggy window

you could see the sign of the cross,

fading,

her clothes left at the foot of the stairs,

all her worries were gone,

no more fears,

no more tears,

her right hand was still a fist,

and the blood had dried,

at the cuts near the wrist,

only one candle burned

on the window pane,

a delicate light,

that stained the night.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Marlena Oechsner 5 years ago from Wisconsin

      Beautiful! So vivid...and I love the rhyme!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Marlena.. I could have titled it Talking Walls..right? LOL

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Good morning Frank,

      Suicide, such a waste of life ...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Good Morning right back at you... thanks for stopping by Susan..

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      WD Curry 111 5 years ago from Space Coast

      Have you been watching old B&W French Films, lately? I could see the film noir lighting and overly dramatic camera angles.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      No I haven't but I see what you mean thanks for stopping by :) Frank

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 5 years ago from The Caribbean

      Beautiful! Thanks for sharing such a vivid picture of peace at death.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by MsDora :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Mr. Frank beautiful and awesome....I admire your work...you really ie me....voted up across the board..debbie

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Great poem Frank. lol. vote up and awesome.

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      LaDena Campbell 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      I keep trying to find another way to say Awesome! But since I can't think of another way to say it, I will vote awesome once again! Another great poem, Frank!

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      Alastar Packer 5 years ago from North Carolina

      Reading your poem Frank, brought back images of a pretty young girl who was being autopsied after committing suicide. As the pathologists took her apart piece by piece, the juxtaposition of what she once was and what she had become, struck home like beautiful but deadly lightening.

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      Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      What can I say brethren ? And the thing is you know that you hold the ability to capture and ...here is a word for you , let it be done . How effortless "poetisize" from D Block! is that a word ? Yes how are you able to do that so effortlessly?

      No body does it better stay true to your inner self.

      Great work.

      Bless.

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, so grim...but i love the vivid description of this one Frank...you have caught and left it in your readers' imagination...

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      Richard Ricky Hale 5 years ago from West Virginia

      Up, awesome, and interesting votes Frank. POWERFUL POETRY! Wow, what a poem. I loved it. Your poetry is distinct Frank. I can always visualize it. The girl, the blood, the cold, ect. The story of it all, it is class "A" poetry. Very talented. Your distinct words make it possible. Enjoyed it, I have enjoyed everyone that I have read. PS- What is your favorite tattoo? lol

      Another great job Frank. Hope you have a great day and catch you later.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Ms Brooks.. and I hope it doesn't hurt when you're IE'd LOL Writer20 thanks for always showing up.. even when one candle burns LOL Justateacher it's always welcomed no matter how you say it..bless you :) Okay Alastar... your comment was deeper than my piece of work LOL only kidding thanks for visiting Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Sky we here on DA Block thank you :) and Raci.. thank you for visiting my page..and Lyricwriter..it's always good to see you leaving footprints on my work thank you all for reading bless you :) Frank

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      poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      This gave a vivid image of a vast waste of life. I like how you tackle the "hard" topics in poetic form. Awesome!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much you Poetvix you..:) Frank

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      csheal6249 5 years ago

      Symbolic poem that leaves me a little saddened. Main character has died, but at least she is in good hands. Her redeemer has chosen to protect her. Good poem selection Frank. Shows how much empathy and feelings there are within the main character of this poem.

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      This one has been burned in my mind as a beautiful and heartwrenching piece of work.

      Voted up and away!

      Have a good weekend

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much CSheal for joining this page bless you for reading.. and Sus How do you do :) thanks for reading my one candle burned.. bless you all :) Frank

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      Senoritaa 5 years ago

      Very sad, touching, and utterly chilling.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks for reading Senoritaa

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      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      A hard thing to face in any way.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Jackie :) Frank

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      Ruchira 5 years ago from United States

      Such vivid descriptions, Frank.

      But, sad to see a life wasted.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      A powerful poem and perfect imagery within it's words. It speaks to me that she died very lonely but praying for forgiveness for taking her own life as she did the deed.

      Very sad

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Good to see you again Ruchira thanks for visiting my page and thank you too Rosemary50 for making your footprints known thanks for your comment

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Brilliant work here Frank and so very powerful too.

      The work of a gifted artist I think.

      Take care my friend.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Eddy thanks again for leaving footprints here on my page bless you and keep on writing :)

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      Kebennett1 4 years ago from San Bernardino County, California

      What a vivid scene you painted with your words! Death on her own terms, tragic yet beautiful. Frank you are an inspiration!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Keb bless you again :)

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      secondimage 4 years ago from From a place lost in time and space

      great frank, truely great!! glad to have found you on here, looking forward to reading more. voted up and awesom :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much second image for reading :)

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