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Open Mic

Updated on July 6, 2010

The night is still young

and so beautiful

there are fireworks

flickering the sky

though only in my mind…


the only real thing tonight,

the live band

under the black sky

few people sitting in the grass

me, in a table with strawberry vodka

the straw to my berry is not here…


couple of friends sitting

swaying with the beat

and the night, still young…


candle lit each table

sweet sweet air is here

music, rhythm, lovers, drinks

candle lit each table…


“Sometimes I sit

by the fire and reminisce

about the time we spent in front of it

and that old flame will never be the same

until you come back and rekindle it…”


Wish you were here

hearing my heart beat

instead of the music…


The night is still young

and the straw to my berry

is not around…



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    • Enigmatic Me profile image

      7 years ago from East Coast Canada

      This stirred me.... pleasantly. Thank you.

      Inspired by this feeling I have written my own, feel free to peruse...

    • carolina muscle profile image

      carolina muscle 7 years ago from Charlotte, North Carolina

      A very nice, visual verse!!

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      Mentalist acer 7 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

      To endure a longing for a strawberry heart can be like waiting for time itself to stop,an hopfuly enjoyable poem:)!!

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      CiscoPixie 7 years ago from I'm in a world of my own, but aren't we all?

      That was amazing.. :)

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      I was in my fave place at the heart of the city and they played that song. It has stirred me, too so there goes the flashback.. :) Thanks, Enigmatic! I'll read it

      Thanks Carolina Muscle :)

      Strawberry could stop the clock yeah :) Thanks Mentalist!

      You're one adorable cute penguin! Hope I wrote it as pretty as that night :) Thanks CiscoPixie

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      Freya Cesare 7 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

      Strawberry heart? Cute! And this poem is so cute too. :)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 7 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I loved the poem and the music was great.

      Cheers

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      Micky Dee 7 years ago

      I'm sorry you're missing your straw! Beautifully put!

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      Dark Heart 7 years ago

      The straw to my berry-loved it.

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      Seems the word of the day is "cute" :) Heard it since morning. Thanks Freya

      Always Exploring, thanks and nice meeting you :)

      Hahaha Micky Dee good to see you

      Thanks Mr. Joe :)

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      mystery... 7 years ago

      i love you Blaise ;) you know who this'll be..

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      I love you more.. ;)

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      Dim Flaxenwick 7 years ago from Great Britain

      Oooh, Poignant. Well done. x

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      Thanks for dropping by, Dim. God bless :)

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      hubpageswriter 7 years ago

      blaise, you really have a way with words. This one's amazing too.

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      thanks hubpageswriter :)

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      ltfawkes 7 years ago from NE Ohio

      I like: the live band

      under the black sky

      Simple words, but they paint a picture. Nice.

      L.T.

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      Fehl Dungo 7 years ago from close to you...

      Glad you do. Thank you Itfawkes :)

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      Cathy Nerujen 6 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      Strawberry image here works well. It always brings me back to my childhood, remembering that. You caught the atmosphere of the concert here well, and the thought of wishing for the return of someone we love and an old flame even. And so magical when the person does show up, and hopefully not with someone else...

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Glad to share with everyone that atmosphere :) haha yeah it's so magical when someone shows up..Couldn't ask for more when someone showed up for me.. :)

      I'm happy to see you Cath. XX

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      Cassandra Mantis 6 years ago from UK and Nerujenia

      This is a lovely Summer evening image I have here in this poem, there is nothing better than to share that with someone special. I really enjoyed this! It feels a little sad because the person you wanted to be there wasn't there. But it is very beautifully told and so easy flowing, like all your poetry. You write like water gurgling gentle as a natural stream, Blaise. Just lovely! XX

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Hi Cass! How was the movie house? lol Well yea, one perfect moonlight night, perfect music, ambiance and perfect mood, too..all was there, nothing I could ask for..just someone I've been missing..Thanks for dropping by and leaving a so lovely comment ;) XX

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      Joy56 6 years ago

      i am here now, so don't be lonely any more.... I so enjoyed the atmosphric poem, nice one.....

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Aww you're so sweet..thanks for being here :)

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      David Walston 6 years ago from The Large Magellanic Cloud (LMC) (m-M)_0 = 18.41, or 48 kpc (~157,000

      Fantastic Piece~

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      niceandcool 6 years ago from Philippines

      i really like this part... "wish you were here, hearing my heart beat instead of the music" kinda mellow dramatic but so sweet...

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Thanks Awful Poet and NiceandCool! :)

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      Johnny Love 6 years ago

      your heart is the music i feel. lovely and well said. i feel it strongly. blessed be

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      KryptoGirl 6 years ago from Redding

      I seriously love all your stuff ^.^ (so many comments sorry haha)

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      Thank you Krypto! :) Comments..I like them haha

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      BeyondMax 5 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      Beautiful story, feel the longing, a touch of sadness but so deliciously warm...

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      Fehl Dungo 5 years ago from close to you...

      thank you Maxi :)

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