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Our Sun (poem)

Updated on December 9, 2012

I can’t believe they’ve come undone

Those hours of Joy those days of fun

Our path ahead had just begun

And there to guide us was the sun


A sweet perfume this world we knew

Whose scent would bless all things we’d do

Each breath a memory of you

Such was the spring which we danced through


There was no dream we left undone

No couldn’t be we wouldn’t do

And if I paused I’d look to you

And up above we had our sun


But far beyond what others knew

Laid shadows jealous of our fun

So unaware of what’s begun

So strange from all that we danced through


The evening of our setting sun

We kissed and knew it has begun

Her eyes still held those times so fun

I can’t believe they’ve come undone


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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      wow I read this beautiful poem three times. it is so beautiful and the song goes perfect with it. It makes me remember so many things the love of my life..

      I love your poetry..


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      Dianna Mendez 5 years ago

      The sun does bring a day to and end; you poem is symbolic of the memories that fade with time. A little sad, but it is beautiful.

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      Deb Hirt 5 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      This is also a lovely piece.

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      Squeesh 5 years ago from United States

      very beautiful! had to vote up and share!

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      Heaven L Burkes 5 years ago from The Invincible Heart of Neverland

      Oh - very nice. I especially LOVE the second stanza - a beautiful word picture and effortless flow of thoughts. Wonderful! Voted Up!

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      Shining Irish Eyes 5 years ago from Upstate, New York

      Oh such heartbreaking melancholy as the sun quietly observes.

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      myownlife 5 years ago from london

      Wow, Our son, our HP and we are the family members, brilliantly express our son,

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. Flows like a song. So beautiful.

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      Janhorner 5 years ago

      It brought a tear to my eye by the time I'd read the last line. Lovely beautiful words. I've landed here via my email and would have voted up but the menu is not available.


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      picklesandrufus 5 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

      Very, very nice....a bit sad and full of cherished memories.Vote way up!

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      Deborah 5 years ago from Las Vegas

      Beautiful poem, very well done hub. Thank you.

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      Mark G Weller 5 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

      Beautiful words, and the song is perfect.

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      Ann1Az2 5 years ago from Orange, Texas

      Beautiful, M. The song was a perfect choice, like everyone has said. Voted up.

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I'm glad I stepped away from the limericks to read this; beautiful...sweet melancholy in your words. The choice of songs was right on!

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      wetnosedogs 5 years ago from Alabama

      Lovely. The song goes well. Enjoying it.