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Pine

Updated on August 9, 2013
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Her face in the window

was it the rain

or a ghosts tears

residual moistening pane

crying again

moaning from the hearth

a dying embers glow

as I hear a pine needle

fall to the snow

feel hollow

her voice in my head

directing my script

possessing my page

from a dark lonely crypt

her sadness dripped

recalling ripped letters

a specter wept stain

over the note of her loss

and inconsolable pain

all hope vain

of her soldier returning

she lay down to sleep

never to awake

searching for him in the deep

and I hear her weep

outside my window

and somewhere in my soul

and if it is silent

she will whisper low

like a pine needle falling to the snow





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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you LadyFiddler. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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      Joanna Chandler 4 years ago from On planet Earth

      WAW!!! That was certainly a treat very nice read ;)

      Keep up the Good works

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      ....well you have done the same for me so it goes both ways and your daughters are fabulous writers too so it runs in the family.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      You humble me Colin. I do appreciate your friendship. From the very beginning you have encouraged me and made me feel like my writing was worth something. I thank you for that.

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      .....they're always kind thoughts because I admire you as a man, a father, a creative person and a friend to me (with a good sense of humor)

      5:43pm

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Sure, sure, sure! : ) That's why you've been the writer of the year for two years in a row!! Hey, from you, I always appreciate your kind thoughts.

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      I am glad I don't write 'poetry'Sir Wayne or else you would kick my skinny little hub score of 78 butt all the way back to kingdom come when you write like this and this is you capturing poetic lightning. The only thing I ever catch is the snot coming out of my nose.

      Colin

      2:54pm

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you very much Rasma

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. This was hauntingly beautiful. Enjoyed. Great imagery of pine needles in the snow.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Deb.

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      Deb Hirt 4 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Your reflections of sounds close to silence are a wonderful addition. It's almost like a soft bump in the night with a barely heard reply.

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      Nellieanna Hay 4 years ago from TEXAS

      So now I'm grinning! :-D

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Anna!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you very much Nellieanna. For you to say you are awed brings a big grin to my face.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Tom, it's nice to see you. Thanks for the good word.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Sha.

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      Anna Haven 4 years ago from Scotland

      Full of emotion. Sad yet beautiful.

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      Nellieanna Hay 4 years ago from TEXAS

      As your poetry always seems to do, this one leaves me gasping; in this case, for the loss, so aptly represented by the falling of a pine needle onto or into the snow, perhaps to slip under its surface and be buried and unseen but to the one who was intimately aware of its fall and landing.

      The imagery is both subdued and lively, both gloomy and brisk, both full and lean; somehow encompassing a world of feeling and, perhaps, a lifetime of not-quite-fulfilled, but intense love.

      It's gorgeous and I'm awed.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Suzette, thank you for the wonderful compliment.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Michael.

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      thost 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

      Good work Wayne, I like this poem very much.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Good to see you Amy. Thank you for the kind words.

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      Shauna L Bowling 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Wayne, you free so many emotions with your poetry. This is sad yet beautiful at the same time. How in tune to your lost love you must be to be able to hear one pine needle fall. Amazing!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Vincent. I appreciate the share and the nice words as always. I have been working my tail off, so I haven't been around here or the other sites much in the last couple of weeks, but I'll catch up.

      I'm really happy to see our Undead Poets Society showing some life. I was beginning to worry that the site had gone under. I'll be seeing you there soon. Maybe another game of chess soon, eh?

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      Suzette Walker 4 years ago from Taos, NM

      Sad, poignant but beautiful poem. The pine needle softly falling in the snow is such a great image. I can 'hear' it fall - that is how good your poem is written. The images are beautiful also. So well written and well done!

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      I appreciate the compliment Jennifer.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you VKP

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Faith. It's good to see you on this beautiful Saturday morning.

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      cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      very nice wayne .. a work of art ..

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      ExoticHippieQueen 4 years ago

      One beautiful verse lovingly leads one to the next in a chain of soul-stirring emotions.

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      It's often possession that calls us poets to pen what we do. Here I see you thinking and remembering of a love lost. Her ghosts appears and under candle light you pen in vain. Your visuals are haunting indeed, but in a memorable way, you feel her presence as she does your, she weeps as she appears as a ghost in your memories of her. Beautifully expressed my poet, you never fail to deliver with impact, leaving your reader wanting more. The signs of a true poet indeed. Voted up, tweeted and shared.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      First, I love the imagery of the pine needles falling in the quiet snow. Clean and haunting! I always enjoy how your work assaults (in a good way) the senses as one reads it! I am in awe.

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      Vivek Pal 4 years ago from New Delhi

      Awesome Warren beautifully written!!! keep it up voted up

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Really, really beautiful piece here! Stunning.

      Thoroughly enjoyed it.

      Voted up +++ and sharing

      Bless you, Faith Reaper