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Planted Oblivion


Trapped unintentionally
In an umpteenth circle of hell
Once strong, I now lay frail
Rusted shards mince deep in my shell

In oblivion my pain, untraced
Sarcastic in its occurring
With itself it comes laced
Exaggerating my suffering

It bears no centre
Exercises callous anarchy
Perplexed at my illness
It raises primitive hierarchy

Feeding me distaste
Of all finesse existing
Purposelessly I gaze
Agitated even in brooding

All prayers fail to heal
Evil pervades my reckoning
I wish my heart was ripped
And death forwarded my beckoning

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That was... intense Rahul. It was definitely a great piece of writing feel with these "dark" thoughts as others have said before me. You seem to lay out these poems with delicate hands and with a very defined structure. Good work, hope to see you around. ;)
We feel this way when we are betrayed, Rahul. A chilling, well written read, with words well chosen! Am sharing this.
I too felt like that at my last job as someone said above. This really paints a picture of anguish and despair that pervades us at times. Up!
rahul wow this was explosively good.. the very soul of oblivion voted awesome!!!
So, so, SO sad, Rahul! It frightens me to think of how many damaged, desperate souls exist in this misery every single day! I think we all 'feel' this to some degree - some days more than others, but - i'm afraid that more desperate acts will come to fruition as the economy - and society - and human communication - continue to devolve..
So, so, SO sad!
THAT FIRST PIC IS A KNOCKOUT! BREATHTAKING..
voting, tweeting, sharing..
Wowee, Rahul, very disturbing and a powerful reminder of all that is around us, influences us but can be endured.
This poem is super dark, Rahul I am scared bro I don't know what else to say but this is tremendously gloomy, and ultra self diminishing I guess.
Maybe it could be art or something, I'll give you credit though for all the awesome words, these words enhance the imagery 100 times over, towards the even more morbid state, and if that's what you were getting at here, well then you did it bro.
Cool stuff! But why so depressing?
Voted up and awesome. Such intense words. Not stressed out are you Rahul? Passing this on.
Voted up and awesome..the cold cruel side to pain that never leaves us...
Hi Rahul
All prayers fail to heal
"Evil pervades my reckoning
I wish my heart was ripped
And death forwarded my beckoning"
Chilling and dark.
Voted up and awesome
Take care :)
A powerful n profound creation, Rahul, this is intense and very sad, God bless.
You write what i can't. Though some day, if death doesn't claim me first, I will be a vegetable, I must be positive.
Chilling and causing a deep pain. Images of still death. Hope you are fine my friend, Thanks Rahul!
Disturbingly dark and brooding... hoping your pen gives you catharsis and perspective. Voted UP and Awesome, dear Rahul. Hugs, Maria
powerful poetry. Thank you for sharing. Jamie
Debbie, I relate. I get worried about my brother when he goes so dark. He usually responds to let us know he's talking about the past. But I, too worry!
My sweet son Rahul.. this is beautiful but so sad.. are you all right? I worry about you.. are you taking too much on? is college getting harder and harder? has someone been mean to you? remember you can talk to me.. after all i am your second mom..
praying for you
Debbie
Such measures of pain, illness, brooding....aching & tortured soul in complete desperation.......contemplating self destruction.....no greater sorrow........Fiercely intense. This tears at my soul, Rahul
Up awesome...........
I can image how you feel because some program languages use do or die for error handling so you must do something to correct the error in your life not die. We love you very much! You have excellent writing skills!
From tortured souls comes some of our most enduring and creative art. Maybe the greatest artists must suffer, so that the rest of us wouldn't have to endure the pain in order to see what lurks in the dark places.
Rahul, another master piece, explore the darkness, but do not loose sight of the light. All my best to you.
Rahul, my brother, how do these thoughts reel in your head? I know some of what you lived as a child and it's horrendous. You have overcome and become one of the most beautiful people I know. Are these thoughts that haunt you? I ask because I can't imagine coming up with something as dark and tortured had the thoughts not once been in my mind. If this is pure fiction from your mind, you really should seriously consider writing a book. Fiction and sci-fi are difficult genres to master. From what I've read, you are master of everything you touch!
You're young. Go for that dream now. You definitely have what it takes to become a successful writer!
BTW, the imagery you consistently choose brings forth the power, pain, torture, wistfullness of your words. You truely are a master!
Whew - this is a powerful and profound one here! As billybuc stated above, there is a whole lot of pain and misery going around today, unfortunately. Great writing as always, and I am thinking that you are just writing and you do not actually feel this way. God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper
In quiet desperation most of us hang on by a thread. My head is often filled with sadness and not of gladness. Thus I pen and thrust my thoughts from inner soul to attempt to reach out to those who feel akin to what comes from deep within. You shared a very poignant piece here my poet and woe to those who suffer with indecisions. To stay or run away? to pull the trigger without reserve? or to live in turmoil thoughts the rest of their livings days. Voted Up always.
I felt this way when in my last job. I put all that hate in a story that I wrote daily in my lunch brakes.
Voted up and awesome, Joyce.
"Powerful" was what I first thought after reading this poem. I always remember stories with a bad ending. This poem is now stuck in my head. Wow ...
I wonder how many people feel this way? I may not want to know the answer to that question. There is a great amount of misery around us...so much desperation....so much hate and pain....this is a powerful piece of work my friend.
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