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Planted Oblivion

Updated on September 3, 2012


Trapped unintentionally

In an umpteenth circle of hell

Once strong, I now lay frail

Rusted shards mince deep in my shell




In oblivion my pain, untraced

Sarcastic in its occurring

With itself it comes laced

Exaggerating my suffering




It bears no centre

Exercises callous anarchy

Perplexed at my illness

It raises primitive hierarchy




Feeding me distaste

Of all finesse existing

Purposelessly I gaze

Agitated even in brooding





All prayers fail to heal

Evil pervades my reckoning

I wish my heart was ripped

And death forwarded my beckoning



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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hey Aubrey... thanks for the kind feedback... i am glad you liked my work.... if you look deep... you may find that the most positive of messages come out of the darkest of situations :)

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      A.E. Williams 4 years ago from Hampton, GA

      That was... intense Rahul. It was definitely a great piece of writing feel with these "dark" thoughts as others have said before me. You seem to lay out these poems with delicate hands and with a very defined structure. Good work, hope to see you around. ;)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      yea we do Mitchelle..

      Thanks for the read and share

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      Michelle Liew 4 years ago from Singapore

      We feel this way when we are betrayed, Rahul. A chilling, well written read, with words well chosen! Am sharing this.

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thank you so much Xstatic... I am glad you liked it... and yeah.. sometimes if the work environment is not suitable... such can be the feeling

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      I too felt like that at my last job as someone said above. This really paints a picture of anguish and despair that pervades us at times. Up!

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks much Frank... I am glad you liked it :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hey Leslie.. thanks so much for the visit...

      You are right..as we live happily there are many around us who do not know how happiness feels.... who live in utter despair

      thank you for the kind comments :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hey Terrye.. thanks so much.... I am glad you liked it...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      rahul wow this was explosively good.. the very soul of oblivion voted awesome!!!

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      So, so, SO sad, Rahul! It frightens me to think of how many damaged, desperate souls exist in this misery every single day! I think we all 'feel' this to some degree - some days more than others, but - i'm afraid that more desperate acts will come to fruition as the economy - and society - and human communication - continue to devolve..

      So, so, SO sad!

      THAT FIRST PIC IS A KNOCKOUT! BREATHTAKING..

      voting, tweeting, sharing..

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      Terrye Toombs 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

      Wowee, Rahul, very disturbing and a powerful reminder of all that is around us, influences us but can be endured.

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hey Mike.... scared eh!.... hehe... it's self diminishing I know but there is a message.... a message to live .. and not get lost in the lusty world of various pleasures... the more you want... the more stress will kill you... whether u want it or not

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks so much Rasma.... I am glad you liked it.... m not stressed... just tried to convey how stress can be sometimes

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      Mike Pugh 4 years ago from New York City

      This poem is super dark, Rahul I am scared bro I don't know what else to say but this is tremendously gloomy, and ultra self diminishing I guess.

      Maybe it could be art or something, I'll give you credit though for all the awesome words, these words enhance the imagery 100 times over, towards the even more morbid state, and if that's what you were getting at here, well then you did it bro.

      Cool stuff! But why so depressing?

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. Such intense words. Not stressed out are you Rahul? Passing this on.

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      hey Nice to meet you Dallas... pain never leaves us... I believe it completes us..

      THanks for the kind visit.. will visit you soon

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks so much Sue....

      I am glad you connected and liked my work

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      thanks so much Girish... I am glad you liked it :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      you should be positive martin... and yes... I do not write like you cause you are much more better :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am good Joseph... thank you for your love.. and kindness..

      Glad you liked the work

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      it always does dear Maria.. It always does... thank you so much for connecting

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      thanks so much Jamie.. always a delight to have you visit my pages

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Oh Sis.... I desperately need to meet you... you will see how jovial I am... I delve into darkness to bring out messages for the world.. and to create art... as diamonds can only lie around coal rocks :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am good mother... I am good... do not worry... just writing what I feel... I do not have a specific genre.. I write what I wish to tell...

      College sure is hard... but not that much to rip me off hehehe.....

      You are a true mother.. thank you so much

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      I am glad you connected Effer... and I think you liked what I wrote.. sadly.. most of the world lies in this state of pain...

      thanks for the kindness..

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks so much for your Love Flash.... your presence makes my work worth..

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      In fact art must suffer Jox.... suffer like gold... like diamond so when the final product comes out the perfection is unmatched..

      Pain must be embraced first.. only then one can endure it...

      Thank you for such kind words and the visit :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      These thoughts come to me Shauna... I bring them to me... as I say.. I want to deliver messages... recently one of friends was admitted to the hospital due to Dengue Fever... one week of confinement frustrated him... to the extent that he wanted to run away from his treatment even... can loneliness drive to such extremes... was his treatment more painful than a malnourished child who does not get a full stomach ... throughout the year...

      There are so many forms of pain one needs to know... but why... because knowing other forms of pain.. lessens your own pain... and that is why I close my eyes and feel that pain of my friend.. and pen down my thoughts for wonderful people like you who connect with love to my work and share my messagess

      thank you Shauna for the extreme kindness

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hi Faith... I am not writing this under personal grief... but felt grief of a close one... none the less the intensity remains the same...

      Thank you for the kind visit :)

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      The first two lines Sir Vince.... utter wisdom and excellent literary philosophy...

      Indecisions.. pain... grief... disease... all are related... commit one and all will follow...

      Thanks for the kind visit Sir Vince

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Hello Joyce... I am glad you left the job for good... It is a sin to let pain fall on you purposely

      thank you for the kind visit...

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Thanks Made....

      Although the ending is bad... it is the truth... although I weave fiction but I try to convey a message/..

      Thank you for the kindness

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      There are many who feel this way Sir Bill.... misery can be overlooked.. but it should not by men who can take up the mantle of responsibility

      Thanks for the kind visit

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      dallaswriter 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Voted up and awesome..the cold cruel side to pain that never leaves us...

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      Sueswan 4 years ago

      Hi Rahul

      All prayers fail to heal

      "Evil pervades my reckoning

      I wish my heart was ripped

      And death forwarded my beckoning"

      Chilling and dark.

      Voted up and awesome

      Take care :)

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      A powerful n profound creation, Rahul, this is intense and very sad, God bless.

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      You write what i can't. Though some day, if death doesn't claim me first, I will be a vegetable, I must be positive.

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      Joseph De Cross 4 years ago

      Chilling and causing a deep pain. Images of still death. Hope you are fine my friend, Thanks Rahul!

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Disturbingly dark and brooding... hoping your pen gives you catharsis and perspective. Voted UP and Awesome, dear Rahul. Hugs, Maria

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      powerful poetry. Thank you for sharing. Jamie

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      Shauna L Bowling 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Debbie, I relate. I get worried about my brother when he goes so dark. He usually responds to let us know he's talking about the past. But I, too worry!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      My sweet son Rahul.. this is beautiful but so sad.. are you all right? I worry about you.. are you taking too much on? is college getting harder and harder? has someone been mean to you? remember you can talk to me.. after all i am your second mom..

      praying for you

      Debbie

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      Paula 4 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Such measures of pain, illness, brooding....aching & tortured soul in complete desperation.......contemplating self destruction.....no greater sorrow........Fiercely intense. This tears at my soul, Rahul

      Up awesome...........

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      flashmakeit 4 years ago from usa

      I can image how you feel because some program languages use do or die for error handling so you must do something to correct the error in your life not die. We love you very much! You have excellent writing skills!

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      From tortured souls comes some of our most enduring and creative art. Maybe the greatest artists must suffer, so that the rest of us wouldn't have to endure the pain in order to see what lurks in the dark places.

      Rahul, another master piece, explore the darkness, but do not loose sight of the light. All my best to you.

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      Shauna L Bowling 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Rahul, my brother, how do these thoughts reel in your head? I know some of what you lived as a child and it's horrendous. You have overcome and become one of the most beautiful people I know. Are these thoughts that haunt you? I ask because I can't imagine coming up with something as dark and tortured had the thoughts not once been in my mind. If this is pure fiction from your mind, you really should seriously consider writing a book. Fiction and sci-fi are difficult genres to master. From what I've read, you are master of everything you touch!

      You're young. Go for that dream now. You definitely have what it takes to become a successful writer!

      BTW, the imagery you consistently choose brings forth the power, pain, torture, wistfullness of your words. You truely are a master!

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Whew - this is a powerful and profound one here! As billybuc stated above, there is a whole lot of pain and misery going around today, unfortunately. Great writing as always, and I am thinking that you are just writing and you do not actually feel this way. God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      In quiet desperation most of us hang on by a thread. My head is often filled with sadness and not of gladness. Thus I pen and thrust my thoughts from inner soul to attempt to reach out to those who feel akin to what comes from deep within. You shared a very poignant piece here my poet and woe to those who suffer with indecisions. To stay or run away? to pull the trigger without reserve? or to live in turmoil thoughts the rest of their livings days. Voted Up always.

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      I felt this way when in my last job. I put all that hate in a story that I wrote daily in my lunch brakes.

      Voted up and awesome, Joyce.

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      Madeleine Salin 4 years ago from Finland

      "Powerful" was what I first thought after reading this poem. I always remember stories with a bad ending. This poem is now stuck in my head. Wow ...

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      Bill Holland 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I wonder how many people feel this way? I may not want to know the answer to that question. There is a great amount of misery around us...so much desperation....so much hate and pain....this is a powerful piece of work my friend.